lol i feel soooooooooooo awkward but im 11 so this is the best song i can came up with.[listen to the song 99 red baloons by goldfinger and takes it rythym and thats the rythem 4 this song.] This is a song about Organization 13 who were having so much fun just like they were teens. Lexaus and zexion were having some fun.Axel was just caught by num-ber one.number one told larxene who got mad.cus stealing from the fridge was her personal fad.She ripped Axel right down to the core. while roxas stood on the sidelines asking for some more (popcorn). Axel threw his chakrams right at Roxases feet. but he jumped away cus he couldnt take the heat. finally xion ended it. it was over. Axel felt just like a drover [badger].Roxas felt really good cus it was over. this was a story of organization 13 who were havin so much fun just like they were teens. this was my best attempt at a org 13 song. im 11. sue me. okay i just wanted to tell you guys i felt awkward about that last post.just post what you thought.
I won't move this to poetry and lyrics, because in my opinion it doesn't resemble anything that belongs there. (It's also kingdom hearts, and this subforum hosts fanfiction) I know you may be only 11, but your work would look a whole lot more inviting if you used proper English. Your spelling and grammar could use vast improvement, especially when you use words like "cus" or "Roxases". (should be 'cause and Roxas', by the way). Saying that, atleast you managed to get a few nifty rhyming couplets in there. And it was vaguely amusing. Take a look at some of the songs in Poetry and Lyrics to check out how songs are usually set out. ^^
