Only time will tell, Kingdom Hearts goes back to the '50's

(This is actually a Kingdom hearts fanfic I came up with years ago, back in the first year it came out. Everything said in this fanfic is purely fictional, any people mentioned, living or dead, are purely set in a fictional enviroment. Discalimer: I do not own any rights to Disney, Paramount Pictures, Squaresoft, or any rights to the mention of past actors in this story. It is purely for the use of entertainment.)

That besides, I will Set-up a basic analysis of the start of the story, Sora, Riku, and Kairi are sent into our world, but with a twist, back to 1953, when Rock and Roll was starting, and Dean Martin and Jerry Lewis were the Kings of Comedy Duo. And in fact, Dean Martin and Jerry Lewis play a big part in this, being the first people the Trio meet. From there, Sora, Riku, and Kairi must get back to Disney Castle and their own time. Can they do it?

(Should I have make any mistakes in occurance or timeline, or simply wish for me to write in Favorite actors and Role Models of that Era, please alert via posting on this thread. I will also be accepting a few Original Character additions just merely add:
Name:
Good/Bad:
How they get involved:
Wheter they are from the '
50's timeline or sent from the Kingdom hearts one.

Please enjoy.

(Another note to readers of "Sebax, Number 14, I did not give up on that, I am currently writing it else where on my computer and will post a revised edition on a different date.)

Chapter one

All was silent within the mighty halls of Disney Castle, Chip and Dale were making adjustments to the new engines for the gummi ship, Daisy was busy in the Kitchen, cooking with Queen Minnie, even Huey, Duey, and Louie could find something quite to do when-

CLANK!! BOOM!! CRASH!!

"BLAAAAAHH!!! Donald screamed at Goofy, A agromorphic Dog, who was lying on the floor of the Garage, in full armour, and under heavy machinery. "Goofy! Why don't you watch it!" Donald, a small Agromorphic Duck in a blue wizards atire, screamed at the happless Goof.

Goofy merely shook his head, the faint sound of a empty paint can being heard from the inside of his helmeted noggin. "Garsh..." Was all he had to say, scracthing his head.

Sora, The Keyblade's Chosen One, Riku, The denzien of Darkness and Light, and Kairi, the not-so-damsel in distress came cluttering in, King Mickey behind them.

Sora merely rubbed his upper lip with one finger, trying not to laugh. Then quickly helping Goofy out of the wreckage.

Donald was calmer now but tapping his foot, glaring at Goofy.

A short while later, out of what was before metal wreckage, was now a nearly completed Large Tank looking Machine.

Goofy was carrying a large glass tube, twice his tall size, almost ready to fumble it, Everybody was looking worried and Donald was starting to Lose his temper again.

Leaping into the air, the Duck sent out a shot of Blizardga[/I magic to Goofy backside.

Startled, the Goof lost grip of his hold, and the large glass tube went flying into the air.

Bouncing and rolling, everyone could only watch it and wait.

Then, it rolled into the place where it belonged and clicked into place.

A moment of awed silence ensued, but lost to the uproar of laughter at the antic.

Shortly, after making sure all the tubes were bloted in, and the bolts steady, everyone backed up to admire Their hard work.

Now it glittered and shone in the bright shine that radiated from the installed Twin set Firaga-G Engine.

"Whelp, I guess it's done..." King Mickey said, brushing off his white-gloved hands.

"Um,... Your majesty?" Sora began, looking down to the small Agromorphic mouse King.

"Yeah?" The king asked, looking back up into Sora's eyes.

"What exactly is it for?" Kairi asked, finishing Sora's questions.

Goofy was first to answer. "Well, It helps out with Castle maintenance, keeping track of all the Broom workers." Goofy stated.

"It serves as a computer in case any of us should lose information." Donald continued.

Then the two went on to describe numerous functions such as Central defense moniter, Gummi Ship Charger, Undewear clear, Soap Scrubber, Dish Washer, Pasta oven, Crock pot,-

"And Toaster oven..." Goofy said with glee and a chuckle, waiting for the ding from a small side-defice.

Then Donald and Goofy came back over, fighting over the toast.

In the struggle, both kicking each other and holding different side of the cooked bread, Donald Mentioned it's last function.

"And a time Portal...!!" Donald said, trying to attain the bread.

"Time Portal!?" Sora, Riku, and Kairi each said in unison, knocking of the Quarelling Duo's stuggle and making them both winde up sprawled on the floor with equal halves of the toast.

Chapter 2
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Sora quickly raced up onto the console, typing every possible key.

Donald, quickly raced over to Sora, trying to pull the young teens arms away from the keyboard.

Goofy quickly joined his friend, grabbing th oppposite arm.

Pulling in vain, Donald moaned, "Don't you remember what happened the last time?!" He yelled.

A matter-of-factly Mouse-sounding voice quickly chipped in from the main console. "System Overload, System overload!" With red lights flashing all over the entire garage.

"Uh-oh!" Donald screamed, running off with Goofy and King Mickey in toe.

Unfortunately, the only stairs to the entrance to the Outside was cut off, by falling debri.

"What'll we do now?!" Kairi screamed, holding her head down with her hands.

Sora looked to Riku, and they both knew what to do.

"REFLECT!" They both screamed in Unison, unting their Keyblades. A flash of bright light then a loud explosion followed.

Outside in the gardens, Queen Minnie and Lady Daisy had heard the alarms, Donald, Goofy, and King Mickey lying on the ground dazed.

"Where are the others?" Daisy stated, worried, holding one feathered finger to her beak, what would be her lips.

Each Dazed member suddenly leaped in shock and looked from each other to eahc other. "We Forgot them inside!!" They all said in alarm.

Goofy first barged to the door, elbowing it with all his might, next came Donald, giving Goofy Leverage from the back.

Then BOOM!!

The doors burst open with smoke, sending the two flying through the air. Goofy landing on Donald in the back. Both Dazed and Unconcious.

Later, when Donald and Goofy came back to, They went back inside the Gummi Garage, with The King, being careful to watch for fallen objects. After a long jump to the bottom of what was once a stair case, each looked in awe of a large, deep crater where the LArge Tank Machine once was.

Burnt underwear, broken Dishwear, and a piece of toast which crumbled to black dust in Goofy's hands were all the Trio could find.

The Gummi Garage, besides the crater, was unscathed completly, Chip and Dale, soundly hidden in the Cockpit of the Gummi Ship.

Helping the two small chipmunks back to the gardens, The Queen and her lady in waiting worriedly looked at the trio, who only remarked with a sad shake of their heads. the two ladies gasping.

"Sora, Riku, Kairi, We'll miss you..." The king trailed on and never finished, in tribute to the three fallen heroes.

Donald and Goofy hugging each other and crying uncontrollably and slighty comically.

Chapter three

(Sorrry It took so long, computer was shared.)

Sora, Riku, Kairi, each woke up, sprawled on the floor of some dark alley, each one rubbing his or her own head.

"Where are we?" Kairi was first to ask.

"Dunno..., We could be anywhere in time..." Riku darkly replied.

Sora glared around, grimaced. "Let's not point fingers but,.." Sora started, before Kairi and Riku both pointed fingers at Sora. Riku's pointing, a little more vulgar. (XD)

Then, a loud clatter reached their ears and they noticed two tall, dark figures in suits head down the alleyway.

They each found saftey in a large trash can nearby.

Foot steps grew louder and louder. Closer.

Each breathe, though each tried to hold it with the stench, was heavy.

Then a loud creak and then...

A White Man, probably in his early twenty's, popped his head into the trash can.

In a nassily kids voice, odd for the Man's age, he yelled and fell face first into the trash can, landing in the middle of the trio.

"DEAN!!" Was what the Tall Man yelled, still in a nassily kids voice, yelled to the other man in a suit. The Man screaming was kicking and grunting to try and get out of the Trash can.

The other man, turned his head and ran back to the Trash can, easily taking his friend out by the neck of his suit.

After helping his friend to get off the stragling trash, and the white man comically dusting off the other man for no absolute reason, The one called "Dean Spoke, in a Strong Italian Accent.

"Whadya think your doin' ya putz?" He moaned to his pal.

"I thought I hoyed something, coming from that Trash Can." The White man, pointing to the Trio's hiding spot.

The Tall, tanned Man, with Curly Black hair slowly walked over to the trash can and lifted its lid.

He looked in with sudden shock.

"Jerry, There's Kids in there!" He yelled over to To his friend, "Jerry".

Then all five pairs of eyes met, two sets of blue eyes, two pairs of brown, and one pair of Periwinkle.

The two large Men hoisted Kairi out first, then Riku and Sora.

"What are you Kids doin' out in a Hollywood Alley at this time of night?" Dean Asked.

Riku faced him, measuring almost to the Tanned man's heighth.

"What are you two doing out at this time of night?" Riku asked, trying to find out where they were.

"Well, ya wise guy, we have show to do a show-" Dean Started, but the Other Man interveined, rolling down the wrong suit sleeve, then rolling up the other where he quickly tapped his watch.

"IN FIVE MINUTES!!" he yelled, jaw totally dropped and yelling comically.

Then he turned to Face Jerry, "Don't worry, Jer, we can get rid of that in an hour..." Dean cooly joked as he light a small cigarette, with a solid gold lighter.

"Do you fellows wish to come with us?" Jerry Comically asked, holding his hands in front of him and stretching out eahc word.

Riku and Kairi looked to Sora, who nodded.

"Sure, I'm Sora, and this is Riku, and Kairi." Sora said, motioning to him and his friends.

The Tall Tanned man streched out a long, thick fingered hand out to each, kissing Kairi's hand in turn.

She giggled, He had that sort of Charm.

Riku simply nodded.

"I'm Dean Martin." He said, after he kissed Kairi's hand, holding the cigarette in between his fingers like a pencil.

"And I'm Jerry Lewis!" The White Man exlaimed, shaking The party's hands two at a time, and switching hands.

"All right, let's get outta here." Dean Calmly said.


Chapter 4
Sora POV
Making their way to the show Dean and Jerry Mentioned, Sora could only think about how they would get back to Disney Castle.

What if they won't come back for us?

The thought had a short life, he quickly cut it out of his mind. He knew his friends would come.

There it was, just a few blocks away was a tall blocky building called "Can O' Yucks", obviously a comics club, and by the look of the two they met, he could guess this was the right place.



Narrator POV

Inside the building was a crowd of people with their families, and in the higher booths, people shrouded in a cloud of Cigar Smoke.

Then a small man in a pin-striped Tuxedo came on stage and announced "Dean Martin and Jerry Lewis!"

The crowd went into a pure uproar!

Even a few claps could be heard from the High booths.

Dean and Jerry walked up stage, Jerry still slightly musty from the trash can.

When Jerry quickly rushed off-stage after introducing Dean's next song, Sora decided they needed a table.

He walked over to the newly arrived Matire'D, who was hunched over, carrying something on a fork.

Sora tapped the man's shoulders, asking for a table and the Marie'D whirled around. Nearly whipping Sora in the face with a ten pound steak on a fork.

It was Jerry!

"Who ordered the steak!?" Jerry Yelled while Dean was singing.

If that crowd wasn't laughing, then they must have eaten some bad food because the whole place went into Chaos!

Acting as a real Matire'D, Jerry Seated each member of the party at a table near the stage.

Just as Dean was closing his song, Jerry Ran up stage, knocking over waiters and the empty plates they were holding.

"Now then, I would like to continue-" Dean calmly talked into the microphone, cut short.

"Hey! Wait a second buddy!" Jerry yelled, contorting his voice to be gruffer. "It don't say out on that sign out there, "Dean Martin, stop!" It says "Dean Martin and Jerry Lewis!" Jerry yelled, continuing his act. Making a sour face.

Dean Looked calmly into Jerry's eyes. "You want I should share the show?" He said, moving his hands occansionally.

"Yeah!" Jerry Said, Just as gruff.

"Then how about I share it with those kids over there?" Dean Jokingly asked, pointing over the Sora and copany.

Sora, Riku, and Kairi were lead upstage as Dean and Jerry waited.

Sora tried glaring into the crowd, but squinted at the stage lights instead.

Surprisingly he got a huge laugh.

Jerry Bowed over, clapping, "I Like It! I like it!" He yelled, laughing.

Back at Disney Castle, Goofy and Donald were erecting a monument to Sora, Riku, and Kairi.

Daisy was comforting Minnie in the courtyard, while Mickey left to go down to the Gummi garage.

Most of the Debri was swept away, with the help of the Brooms; But Mickey looked at the still empty crater near the Gummi Ship Tower.

He just looked into the black darkness; until a sparkling object caught his eye!

The Keyboard, all metal and still working, somehow survived the explosion!

King Mickey rushed down and grabbed it; all that was needed was a Computer to connect it to.

Maybe there was still hope for the three heroes of light after all.

To be continued....

Chapter 5

Goofy and Donald were still trying to erect the large statue as King Mickey came rushing back from the Gummi Garage.

Catching Donald off guard with the loud Bang, He acidentally set of a Firaga magic shot.

Knocking Goofy in the backside, who was holding a fine painting brush and black paint. Goofy swung around on the rop he was suspended from and the pain went flying.

In the midst of the Choas, Mickey was headed over to the infirmey to Check on Chip and Dale, to see if they could make any sense of the Keyboards surprising survival. For after all, they were the ones who designed the machine in the first place.

Inside the infirmery, were larger beds, row upon row. Mickey raced up to the ones that were small enough to be for Dolls.

Inside these beds were Chip and Dale, resting from minor trauma.

King Mickey felt terrible about waking them up, but had to do it.

"Common fellas! You just gotta wake up!" Mickey exlcaimed to the slowly awakening chipmunks.

"Say, where am I?" Dale drowzily said in a high-pitched, yet low-pitched voice.

Both of them realizing the King, they both lept up into a salute.

"Fellas, can you tell me how this keyboard survived that Giant Explosion?" king Mickey asked.

Both chipmunks lowered out of they're salute and rushed over onto the keyboard.

"I dunno! Maybe it was because it's keys, body and cord are made from mythril?" Dale suggested to Chip.

At this, King Mickey looked confused. "How did you fellas get this much Mythril?"

Dale looked to an angry Chip and flashbacks of hiding out in Sora's back-pack, collecting any Mythril shards that dropped in, then a flashback of melting Goofy's Mythril shield into Ore. (An obvious reason why most people could never aquire Ultima weapon and Goofy wounde up with his original shield in KH II)

Dale just shrugged his tiny shoulders and grimaced, "I dunno." He said hafl fast, half slow.

"Come you guys, we gotta find a computer for this thing!" King Mickey worriedly yelled, looking right into the chimunks.

"The Jack is very speacial, your higness, it can only be plugged into two computers in all the universe!" Chip said, jumping up and down. "The one that blew up...-" Chip started.

"And Ansem the Wise's computer!" Dale finished, acting very scholaristic.

"Then we'd better hurry to Radiant Gardens on the double!" The King said, rushing out of the room, balancing the two tumbling chipmunks still on the keyboard.


Back in 1953, Dean and Jerry had just finished their show and were headed back to their hotel, along with Sora, Riku, and Kairi.

Dean was looking skeptically at each of the Trio's outfits. "You, all in a new movie?" Those are some fancy sorta clothes you got there." Dean asked, stopping right in front of the hotel.

Sora looked to Riku and Kairi.

"Yeah, we're actors and couldn't find our studio..." Sora trailed off.

It didn't seem to work for a second, because Dean Still looked Skeptic, but he just said. "Ok..."


After a couple of jokes shared with the desk attendent, Dean and Jerry got a couple of rooms for Sora and his friends.

Just as they were getting ready to take the stairs up, Dean was claustrophobic and wouldn't take the Elevator, a kid ran in.

Followed by an army of Shadows!!

Each party member looked into each other's eyes, then to Dean and Jerry.

"You guys should get back to your rooms, we can handle these guys!" Riku ordered, getting into attack stanse, summoning his Keyblade.

Sora and Kairi doing the same.

Then a large tanned hand slapped onto Riku's shoulder. And he turned around.

Dean and Jerry were ready to fight as well, fists up.

"Don't think we're not gonna be in the fracas? You got another thing comin' ya dumb &*$*" Dean cooly said, ready to take on the heartless.

(And yes, I am censoring! So don't complain!)


chapter 6
(At last it is here! I am personally sorry for the delay, I just had a hard time figuring out what should happen next. Gosh, I was just freeballing up to this point...)

The boy that had led the heartless into the hotel was quick to rush past The party, yeeling at the top of his lungs, "Run!!"

Then the shadows advanced, inching closer in and odd sort of dance.

Jerry just looked at them in a gruff, contorted face. Putting up his fists much like the "Notre Dames Leperchaun".

"Common, Boy, we can take 'em!" He said, using his gruff voice again.

Then behind the shadows came a dozen Darkballs with two Invisible Heartless Guards, weilding long, thick blades.

At this Jerry stopped his act and attempted to run off with that kid.

But Dean, without even looking behind him, Grabbed Jerry by the neck of his suit and dragged him back.

Jerry, not even getting a few inches away from where he started.

At this, the fight was on!

The battle was going moderatley in the heroes favor so far. Already One Invisible, five darkballs, and a dozen shadows was already defeated.

This left about seventeen enemies left.

A shrill scream alerted the party, from over behind the Hotel Desk.

A shadow was dancing menacingly on top of the counter, ready to claw and attack the Desk Clerk.

Dean made an effort to rush over but what ever he hit it with, nothing worked.

"How come you guys can knock the *@#% out of these things, and me and Jerry Can't!?" Dean Yelled, somehow still sounding calm.

Sora just kept fighting, unknowing of how to tell their new friends exactly where Sora, Riku, and Kairi came from.

But at that instant, a beam of light shined in Dean's thick-fingered hand.

"What the &*^# Is this thing!? Where'd this key come from?!" Dean shouted, a large keyblade, designed with cards for a blade stem, miniature boxing glove for key tongs, (Those things that make a key look different from a rod) and A square made out of Ace of Spades. A Bowl of Pasta looking tag at the bottom of the silver tag.

Looking over at Dean, Sora's eyes grew in wonder!

It must have been since he risked his own life for another. That's how I got it I guess...
Sora thought blanky.

Dean took a whack at the shadow ready to pounce on the screaming desk clerk.

Another yell, but of surprise soon came from where Jerry was.

"I know we share everything, shows, bills, and money, but now we're doing sharsies on a key?!" Jerry yelled at the top of his Nassily voice, over to Dean.

Dean just looked at the keyblade his pal had gotten: The stem made up of different Drama and Tragedy masks, all made in the way Jerry could contort his own face, The tongs made up of Two side-way "J"s. And the handle made up of Just silver shaped as a square.

Dean looked it over some more and cooly implied, "Sure we share everything, except women, That I make sure of..." Dean said comically.


Once the room was cleared of heartless, Sora had some lying to do.

And surpringly, Dean and Jerry bought that all of what just happened was new, experimental speacial effects.

A few seconds after Dean and Jerry bought the lie, the boy that brought the Heartless in slowly tried to slink to the exit door.

A thick-fingered Tan hand on one shoulder, and Sora's Gloved hand on the other, they brought the young boy over to a chair and sat him down.

"Alright, kid, Tell us why you started that whole mess back there! Tell us why you nearly got me, my partner, these three kids, and a desk clerk, killed!" Dean finished, making a sort of clap with his hands, raising the right hand above the other one after the clap.

The boy just looked up into stern eyes, with his own green eyes.

"I didn't mean anything by it, Mister, honest!" The boy said, in a very thick Irish accent.

"Me family and I were in the middle of the San Fransico Earthquake when-" The boy started, but was cut off.

"San Francisco? EarthQuake?" Dean asked, baffled.

"There hasn't been a real big earth quake since 1906, kid, what are you trying to get at?" Jerry asked, acting tougher than he really was.

Now it was the boy's turn to look baffled. "Since? What year do you think it is?!" The boy asked back, totally confused.

More confusion spread.

"Those Creatures appeared in front of me, on the sidewalk, as the Earthquake was starting." The boy started, explaining further. "then a huge black thing, righ' below me, and sucked me up." The boy went on, "Next thing I know, I'm here, being chased by 'em right down the block!" The boy ended, not making much more sense.

Riku had an idea what was going on, "How about you come with us. Maybe, we can help you." Riku suggested to the boy, all the party still weilding the strange keyblade.

"Deal, but should any of you, Jack here, try and send me to the road of destruction...., I swear by God's holy name, I'll try me hardest to Damn the lot of you." The boy concluded, looking very stern at the end.

Dean just put his hands on his hips and chuckled, "He's Irish Alrigh'?" Dean said in his deep, cool Italian Accent.


Back at Disney Castle, The Gummi ship was ready to set off to Radiant gardens, with The king, Donald, and Goofy in the cockpit.

Chip and Dale were ready to press the launch button as the Ladies stood near the nearly completed stairs, waving farewell.

Dale attempted to push the launch button but it wouldn't budge!

He stamped on it, and stamped on it, but still in vain.

Eventually, he got tired and slacked down, sitting on the button, panting.

Angry at Dale, Chip merely knocked Dale on the noggin, causing the Launch button to click down and send the Gummi-Ship off into Inner-space.


Chapter 7

In the 50's, Sora, Riku, Kari, Dean martin, Jerry Lewis, and a new Irish kid claiming to go by the name Rick Osgood, all tryed to make sense of what was happening, all sitting in different chairs in the hotel lobby.

"God I need a drink.." Dean finally said, breaking the long silence. Getting up from his chair.

"I'll join ye'!" Rick said, eager to get up and have a pint.

Dean just wheeled around and gave Rick a dirty look. "You expect me, to give liqour...to a kid?" Dean asked Rick, sternly.

Rick just looked around and grinned. "Sure, why not?"

Dean suddenly dropped the dirty look and matched the grin. "A kid after ma own heart." Dean happily yelled, racing Rick over to the free bar; Since the bartender had run when the heartless attacked.

When Jerry Got up, claiming he'd get himself a milkshake, Sora looke to Riku and Kairi.

Whispering in their softest voices, they tryed to make sense of the situtation themselves.

"So, the heartless somehow made it into the past." Riku stated, matter-of-factly.

"That's not the problem, how are we going to get back?" Kairi asked, nervously.

"It is a problem Kairi... Remember how much damage the heartless caused in 9 years?" Sora asked, a worried look on his face.

Both Riku and Kairi nodded, RIku catching on the moment Sora metioned it.

"Well with 50 years, there may not be a home to back to..." Sora finished, spreading the worry to his friends.

"So what do we do?" Kairi asked, worry etched in her face.

Both Riku and Sora answered in Unison, "I don't know."


At Radiant Gardens, after a breif flight in the Gummi Ship; The King, Donald and Goofy, accomponied by Leon and Yuffie, made it to the long lost computer of Ansem the wise.

Plugging in the Jack succesfully to the mainframe, a male voice came from the computer screen.

"Hello users! What can I help you with?" Asked the voice.

"Tron, we need you to somehow get Sora, along with those tied to his heart, back to this timeline." The king stated.

Tron doesn't know what Kairi and Riku look like or sound like, there had to be some way to get them back along with Sora. The King breifly thought to himself.

"I'll see what I can do..." Tron said, the voice now showing some manner of itself as Tron, on the screen console.


Dean Martin POV

I swear, these kids aren't tellin' us the truth about themselves. Just look at them whisper after me and Jerry left them alone. I'm gonna go over there and get some real answers.

Dean thought.

Just then, as Sora, Riku and Kairi were whispering, and Rick and Jerry were imbibing their own drinks.

They allow disappeared!

Dean looked around, being left alone.

Then Dean felt a prickiling sensation over himself.

Some sort of white light was abosorbing to his body.

Then the next thing, the crooner had no idea what just happened.


Narrator POV

Everyone awoke to the sight of a blue light somewhere...everywhere?

Chapter 8
Awaking, Sora imediatly found out where he, Riku, and Kairi had wounde up. "Space paranoids." Dressed in the normal Digital suits, Sora looked at his two friends. Riku's suit was the same excpet with a deep purple light and Kairi's was a light Pink.

Then all three of them getting up, noticed a tall Human-noid figure standing in front of them.

"Tron!" Yelled, jumping up and facing his old friend.

"Hello Sora, I was sent on a mission to rescue you and two others but...-" Tron started off, happy as well, a concerned look when he got to "But" though.

A puzzled look came over Sora as Tron pointed to a mess of dog-piled people where Sora hadn't noticed them.

All three of the others was dressed in the Same blue suits as Sora was, excpet, they were Dean, Jerry, and Rick!

All three of them lay there, dazed and sleeping, piled like they were put there.

Sora got all three of them up and when he did, a mass of confusion and the breaking of lies came out.

Sora tryed his best to tell the real truth why they where there.

"So you guys really are from a different time!" Dean yelled, losing his cool debonair.

Sora nodded.

"So what do we do now??" Dean asked, slapping Sora upside his helmeted head.

"We have to get back to King Mickey back a tDisney Castle I guess..." Sora trailed on.

"Disney? As in Walt Disney?" Dean started off confused.
"And Mickey, as In Mickey Mouse? THE CARTOON MOUSE!?" Jerry Finished off.

Sora just nodded again.

"Fine, We're tagging with you, pally. But keep in mind:" Dean started off.

Sora just looked confused.

"I got a date a seven-thirty." Dean finished off, comically, yet cool and postured.


Back at Radiant Gardens, all there was to do was to wait.
Just having to wait...

Then six beam of light flashed in the room, followed by a crash.

There stood the entire party, and Donald and Goofy both on the floor where they had crashed to the floor in surprise.

"I knew you could do it Sora, but who are they?" King Mickey said proudly, then transisting to concern.

Sora sighed and though he might as well get it over with.

 

Interesting story, and I'm really interested in seeing this take off. I like the whole time travel feel, keep it rolling.

 

Well, since you asked so nicely...

Okay, where do I begin?

First off, you made sure to use spell-check when you posted this right? I noticed a few spelling errors throughout what I read. :huh:

Second, the punctuation could be a bit better. For example:

When listing off people, it's better to separate groups by using semi-colons.

That sentence should read something like:

Also, make sure to use complete sentences for complete thoughts instead of doing run-ons such as:

Yes, commas do usually keep ideas separate. But in this case, it's best to use periods or semi-colons.

Thirdly, every other word doesn't need to be capitalized.

You don't need to capitalize "Dog" and "Duck" unless they're proper nouns.

And then there's the grammar of that same section. It's "an" not "a." You use "an" before a word that begins with a vowel and "a" before a word that starts with a consonant.

There's other minor stuff, but all in all, not a bad start.

 

You don't need to capitalize "Dog" and "Duck" unless they're proper nouns.

And then there's the grammar of that same section. It's "an" not "a." You use "an" before a word that begins with a vowel and "a" before a word that starts with a consonant.

There's other minor stuff, but all in all, not a bad start.[/QUOTE]

Thanks!

I am aware of that last one.

It's one of my basic human flaws, but I make up for it for how fast I can type, usually without error.

Thanks for posting!

 

what the **** does Agromorphic mean???!!! ?!?!?!!?!?!!?!?!?!!?! ><

 

May have spelt it wrong

may have spelt it wrong! Sue me!

Agromorphic means- A Animal or object that has a human-like appearence or character.

If I say Goofy's a dog, and Donald's a duck...

It would be very ackward due to the fact dogs can't wear armour and ducks lack the arms to weild magical objects...

Not to mention a regular real world mouse could never rule a kingdom...

 

OOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!! sry, 7th grade blonde mind here

 

Ok

Ok, I learned that word in 6th grade, but since your a blonde, I'll let you slide...

hehe, blonde joke...

*Sebax looks to left and his eyes literally bulge to see an army of Blonde Fans and German Nazis with Blonde hair blue eyes, all being led by Larxene, Tidus, Namine, Roxas, Hayner, Seifer, Cinderella (?!), Princess Aurora (?!), and every Blonde KH Chacter!!**

Sebax runs away while Sorarulz just looks on....

 

lmao XD
*watches*
rockin btw

 

Here is my way of bringing my story out of the depths of the underworld, and soon planting the characters in the underdrome.

As you know, I haven't posted in a great while.

But now I'm back, and ready to Rock, er..., croon(?) out Dean martin and Jerry Lewis's odd adventures through the worlds of Kingdom hearts


Chapter 9

"YOU'RE FROM WHERE?!" Jerry yelled in a comical over-voice.

Dean's hands were kept clenched at his sides after Sora had just explained the entire story of what just happened.

"So were in a different time?" Rick asked, confused at what was happening.

Sora grimacedly nodded.

"I'm going to to kill you..." Rick calmly said, then went into a rage and made a grab for Sora's thraot.

Luckily, Riku and Goofy were there to hold Rick back.

Calming down, Rick glowered at Sora, who was on the ground and getting up from the surprise.

"So what can we do?" Dean asked King Mickey.

"Yeah, we got a show at ten-thiry..." Jerry mentioned, checking his watch.

Dean just stared at Jerry, "Jer, I think we'll be a little late." reffering to the fact ten-thirty 1953 was over fifty years ago.

Jerry nodded, "Yeah you're right...It's ten-forty now..." Jerry said jokingly, putting his shoe to his ear.

While Jerry put his shoe back on, a loud siren bellowed thoughout the entire castle.

"Not again..." Donald moaned, drooping down.

"There's trouble brewing at Olmpus Colesium!" Chip suddenly ran in and pitched in, jumping up and down, frantically.

"You guys better get there quick!" Dale chimed in after Chip. Jumping down along with his pal.

"We're coming along too, I'd-a like ta see what you guys do for kicks 'round here." Dean calmly added, putting a thick palm on Sora's shoulder.

"You guys sure?" Sora asked, looking up at Dean.

"Of course were not! Dean What'd you thi-" Jerry started in, but Dean's other hand was soon to cover Jerry's face in a grip, muffling Jerry's words.

Summoning his own keyblade, lowering his hand from Sora's shoulder, Dean lifted it to the light and rotated it around a bit. "No I'm Italian..." Dean trailed off, still looking over the keyblade.​

(Sorry for not being so quick about this. School, My Novel of Sebax, and my Jurrasic Park RP has really been biting up my time.)
Chapter 10

Later, in the Gummi garage, everybody was loading up for the journey to Olmpus Colesium.

While heaving and moving a large shell-G gummi block, Dean glances over at Sora, whos' tinkering with the engine exhaust with a monkey wrench.

"So, what's this about These ships? What're dey for?" Dean Asks, thinking they might be similar to auto-mobiles.

Sora looks up from the exhaust tank.

"We use them to get to different worlds, The Muse Is strong enough to sustain most attacks, but we also need to install state-of-the-art Weaponary, just in case." Sora explains.

Dean, actually looks a bit worried. "What sorta attacks?" Not knowing anything about heartless or Nobodys.

Sora sighs and gets up. "Heartless are created when the Darkness inside their hearts are exposed to darkness. Nobodys are created when somebody dies and becomes a heartless, leaving their body and soul behind. If they have a strong will and mind, then they become nobodies."Sora explains. "There are alot of different types of both enemies on the ground battles, but not so many Nobody or Hearltess Gummi fighters." Sora further explains, cooling Dean down a bit that there wasn't going to be too much to worry about in Inner Space. "Namine and Roxas, are nobodies, but you don't know them yet. They're with Wakka, Selphie, and Tidus back at the islands me, Riku, and Kairi are from." Sora goes on. "Roxas used to be part of Organization XIII, who used people's hearts to get the hearts they didn't have. But me, Donald and Goofy defeated them all." Sora continues. "But we never would have beaten Xenmas, their leader without another Nobody friend of ours Ba-" Sora starts off, but suddenly, his face turns into a frown and he remembers what happened to Base back at the World that never was. "---A friend.....This used to be his ship." Sora ends, too sullen to continue.

Dean just tries to take this all in, looking down at Sora who looked more than a little down.

"So what's Olympus Colesium like?" Dean asks, trying to change the subject.

Sora suddenly looks better, though still a little glum. "It's a world that me and Goofy came to at the start of our Journies." Sora starts off. "It's a great place to practice above ground!" Sora explains.

"But our mission is to do something about the underworld, which exsists along with the Colesium." Sora explains further. "I think you and jerry should stay with Hercules, Phil, and Meg above while me and Donald and Goofy go to talk to Hades." Sora suggests. He had caused the comcal pair enough trouble already.

But surpringly, Dean doesn't look worried.

"We're in this mess, so we're gonna help. Got it?" Dean asks rhetoically.

Sora goes into a funny salute and the two laugh.


"Bring it on, snout-nosed..."Jerry eyeballs Goofy with a glower.

"How'sabout you first, Monkey limbs..." Goofy glowers back.

Both look pretty angry at each other.

Donald begins to get worried as he passes by, he stops to see what happens.

Jerry makes a shocked face with his jaw dropped and eyes crossed while goofy puts a finger against each cheek inside his mouth and pulls each side oppositley, and sticks his tounge out.

The two look at each other and break out laughing.

Donald just sighs and taps his foot on the spot.

"What's the big idea you palooka's?" Donald asks angrily, still tapping his foot.

Jerry and Goofy just look at each other and laugh at the stern face Donald is making.


"Well, that's it!" Sora exclaims, dusting off his hands against each other.

"Let's go!" Donald commands "We're behind enough already!"

Sora, Donald, Goofy, Jerry and Dean all board the Muse while the King and Queen wave good-bye.

 

certanly interesting to say the least =D

 

I feel a need to join that mob.XD

 

I wish I felt the need to join that mob lolz

 

Why should anyone feel the need to mob me?

All I did was make a blonde joke.

It's not like I said their dumb.

*Looks to right and the mob from earlier is chasing him again for a misunderstanding, but this time, Cloud, Simba(Sort of a blonde, golden-brown fur anyway.), and Haseo!*

GAHHHHHH! It'S ONLY A MISUNDERSTANDING.

But seriously, If you want any Oc's in here or you have any good ideas or jokes, send them in.

This is the last Fanfic I'm writing until my RP is done, then I chronicle it, or when I finish my Sebax novels which won't be done for a while so, include youselves!

 

lol,this is cool :D

 

(This new installment would have been up hours ago if not for somebody else using the computer and shutting it off...I had the chpaters almost done and they sounded pretty good too...Life sucks, eh? XD)

Chapter 11

Deep space...into the far reaches of inner-space...Where nothing can be heard due to lack of Oxgygen and life...Totally Devoid of-

"ARE WE THERE YET?!" A nassily Kid's voice yelled at the front Pilot seats Where Sora and Dean were checking the ship's status.

"Not yet, Jer..." Dean murmured, not even looking back and still keeping his hands on the U-Bend control Stick.

Donald then turned around and stared angrily at Jerry, who recoiled a bit at the sight of the maddened Duck's eyes. "Why can't you be more patient?" Donald asks angrily at Jerry.

Goofy just looked Happy-Go-Lucky at the two of them and smiled. "Now look who's impatient." Goofy muttered, clapping one gloved hand over his mouth the supress the oncoming giggles.

Donald then falls right to the floor and picks himself up, only wavering for a moment. He then puts up his fists in front of him and begins to hop up and down. "What'd you say, ya Big Palooka?" Donald asked perturbed.

Goofy covers his head with the bottom of his arms to help shiled against the oncoming feathery fists of fury.

Soon a complete brawl breaks out among the three, Jerry, Donald, and Goofy. Worse, Donald was winning.

Then a small tremor shook the entire ship.

Donald, no longer having a temper and suddenly shocked at the tremor, looks around in confusion. "What was that?" He asks worriedly.

At the control Panel, Sora is desperately pulling at the U-Bend control stick try and regain stability. The entire ship was now rockeeting down.

"We're coming in too much! The weight you were pushing around while fighting made the ship unstable and no we're stuck in the Gravity Field!" Sora gritted through his teeth, still trying at the Control Stick.

Donald's eyes suddenly bulge out and he gets down on his knees and begins to mutter something with his eyes closed.

Jerry, does the same except speaking yiddish.

Goofy just sits down back in his chair and clicks in the seat belt, holding onto the arm rests as the turbulance grew.

"Brace for impact!" Sora commands as the Gummi ship plummets into the falling sand of the world below.

(P.S: Due to many letters I've received concerning the title of this Fanfic, I'll have to explain.
It is true that the '50's is no longer mentioned and now it's back to the original time.
I did originally have a concept to have them stay in the 50's for long periods of time, but this idea was too slow moving and was scraped. As for a continuation back to the '50's, I already have that in mind, and boy, is it good! XP)

 

very short but well written =D

 

(Very true...To tell the truth, I spent a couple of hours writing out two more chapters, but like I said with my computer being turned off...I had limited time and effort so I only wrote one. As a reminder, I'm now actually going to be writing new chapters in the more traditional way of writing after new posts. If nobody has posted however, I will continue on from the same post I last wrote in.)

Chapter 12
Inside the Colesium, everything was in complete ruins.

Somehow, Cerberus had escaped from the underworld and went above ground to the Colesium entrance.

It was to this episode our heroes came in.

Dean just looked at the giant Black dog with fright. "What the Hell is dat thing?" He asked, looking directly at Sora, who had already summoned his Fenrir keyblade.

Sora, wavering for a moment, looked back up to Dean. "That's Cerberus, Hades' Guard Dog to the Underworld." Sora explained, half of his joking demenour gone from the seriousness of the battle.

Dean then summons his keyblade and tells Jerry to do the same.

"So what's the plan, kid?" Jerry asked, more serious than one might take him for, staring right up at the three-headed beast.

"You'll get onto the back while Me and Donald go for the head on the right, and Dean and Goofy will go straight for the left. While we got him distracted, Jerry, hit Cerberus between the eyes on the center head, that should at least knock him out." Sora explains his tactic.

Each one ran off, to go battle the great mutt.

After Jerry had succesfully gotten onto the back and got his footing, Sora gave everybody a nod and they went in, ready for attack.

Chapter 13

"HELP!!" Screamed Goofy as he was lifted from the back of his slacks by one of the beasts mighty heads. All Goofy could do was bend over in midair and cover his eyes and swing around as the beast rose him higher and higher.

"Hold on, don't get your pants in a knot..." Dean calmly says, getting ready to strike the head to let go of Goofy. "...Or bitten off." Dean finished off with a handsome smile.

Seeing a piece of rubble nearby, Dean hurls it at the creatures uner chin, konocking it square in the jaw and forcing it to to drop Goofy from its mighty maw.

Goofy just slowly lifts his hands from his eyes as he's on his stomach on the ground.

As Goofy gets up, he doesn't realize the giant hole in the back of his pants that show heart pattenered boxers underneath.

Dean just crosses his arms and looks Goofy in the face civilly, even though Goofy is looking serious and ready to attack again.

"You don't happen to feel a draft, do ya, pally?" Dean asks, scratching the side of his face with his free hand.

Goofy just looks around confusedly and looks at his backside, and gazes in shock at the realization of the large hole.

Goofy then blushes and steps sideways out of view.


"BWAAAAAAACK!!!" Donald yells as he nearly misses a clamp of large teeth to his tail-feathers.

Losing his temper, Donald closes on eye toughly and rolls up his wand arm with his opposite hand and mutters.

"THUNDER!!" He Commands, sending an entire storm of lightening upon each head, dazing it for a few seconds.

Seeing the chance, Sora nods to jerry, still atop the mighty back of the dog.

Jerry nods back and jumps onto the confused creatures middle head and lightly taps the middle of its eyes with the back blade of his keyblade, sending the Monster to the ground with a great thud.

"What was that noise?" A voice crys out from the inside of the Colesium.

A small man with a lower half in the form of a goat pushes open the grand doors to the colesium entrance and looks all around at the wreckage in shock.

"What happened here!?" Asked Philocetes, the Colesium Director, confusedly.

"Looks like Hades has a bone to pick again," Sora thinks out loud, looking at Cerberus who was unconcious.

Phil chortles a bit and corses his small pudgy arms, "No kidding..."He looks to Dean and Jerry and looks back to Sora unemotionally. "Who are they?" Phil asks with little care, practically ignoring the comic pair.

"There with us, It's sort of a long-" Sora starts off, but is cut short by two figures storming past him, up to Phil.

Dean and Jerry both look down at Phil with glares, towering over the short cenetaur at Six feet tall themselves.

"What'd you say, shorty?" Dean asks seriosuly, croassing his arms and glaring at Phil.

Phil looks up at them unwavered. "I said nothin', except you two look like complete bozos." Phil mocks, looking back up at Dean just as serious.

At this Jerry Picks Phil up by shoulders and raises him up face to face.

"You know somebody better than us?" Jerry asked in a contored gruff voice he used often to sound tough.

Still, Phil looks unwavered and nodded. "As a matter of Fact I do..." At this, a fist comes out from behind the doors of the Colesium and knocks Jerry Right in chin, causing the comic to fly backwards and fall back first onto the hard sand behind him.

Phil just falls to the ground and gets back up and dusts himself off. He chuckles and bit and smiles at Jerry, mockingly.

By this time, Dean is rushing over to his friend, trying to see if he's not going to winde up a single act.

"Jer, speak ta me!" Dean asks worriedly, shaking Jerry by the shoulders like a ragdoll.

"Come in Tracy,....I can hear you all right!" Jerry slurs dazely, looking around with lzy eyes.

Dean lets his pal drop back to ground and picks himself up. He galres at the guy who had punched Jerry out with a hate.

"What'ya think you're doin'? Who do you think you are, ya putz?!" Dean asks the Man, tall and muscualr on the steps leading into the Colesium.

The Man just looks back at Dean and laughs heroically.

"I am Hercules, and your friend threatened mine." Hercules stated-matter-of-factly at Dean, who looked even more unamused.

"Trust me, we won't make a habit out of it." Dean retorts back, still glaring at Hercules.

Goofy gets into the middle and holds his hands up.

"Say Fellers, don'tya think we should get on with our adventure by now?" Goofy asks, trying to break up the fight from going any further.

Dean just helps Jerry get up and wakes him up by slapping him in the face a couple of times.

Sora just looks over at the entrance to the Underworld with disdain and pity for all the lost souls down there.

"Common you guys, let's go!" Sora orders as he paces towards the Underworld with haste.

The others follow after a wave good by from Herc and Phil.