Ohh woah! One true media.She kind and nice.She can sing, dance.She one true media.She got every thing! Everbody loves her but i see she. No true media.Huh girl you have to see that some day you'll be wishing you where me.But till that day she the one true media. i'll be wishing i was her...Wishing i was her. I see she were to much make up.She so cool.She gets every thing.She got everbody to love her.she got the boys.She one true media.She can get the best she every thing i want to be.....Now i see one thing.I don't want to be some thing im not...I want my hair down. I want to to not were any make up.I miss the old me.Im no one true media. Im a girl having fun not watching every one.Not singing.Not being happy.Im not true media but im...Im a rock star a pop star im going to be some thing but not a.True media nooo true media. Hope you like any thing i did't spell right tell me and i'll fix it:D:type: Sorry i have not been on im been out of town and im been in the car for 2 days:( and im going home in two day:( Any ways hope you like'd
Its good.... But word of advice,maybe use seperate lines for each sentence? It would make the whole thing much easier to read.
I'll start off with the poem/song itself and then go onto the technical aspects. Did you write this intending it to be a poem or a song? Since I'm absolutely terrible not very skilled at the rules of songs, I'll just say what I think of it poetry wise. c: I like the use of anaphora when you you describe the girl herself, "She...". I also liked the metaphor of true media and how you set it up; the girl you're referring to throughout the poem is the true media, which I took as a symbol of someone who's the stereotypical "popular kid" in high school, the one that does it all and everyone adores for shallow reasons. The image of yourself at the end was also well done, as you're saying that although that may be the popular thing to everyone else, you want to be yourself and live life the way you want to. Overall, it was a solid theme and a good poem. :3 Your focus right now should be in the technical department. There was a lot of spacing issues in the poem, not to mention quite a few grammatical errors. As Daxa stated, it was a little difficult to read, but you don't necessarily have to put it in stanza form. If this was meant to be a free verse, you can leave it in whatever form you want. (Paragraph, stanza, etc.) I edited it above leaving it as just a paragraph, but if you do wish to put it in stanzas, I'll be willing to assist you if you need it. And I look forward to seeing more poems from you in the future! <: Bold Asterisk (*) meant that you needed a space since you were starting a new sentence. Italics were grammatical errors. Bold was for spelling errors. Bold Italics were for both spelling and grammar errors. And I omitted some things here or there from your poem, and explained (in parenthesis in bold) why it wasn't needed.
