my story!!!!!

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  1. ♦Demon♥Angel♦ Gummi Ship Junkie

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    (this is my story, when they were kids. I added a new character, ME!!!!!!! i hope u like it)

    A sliver haired boy was making his way to the beach. his jade eyes scanning the house for clues to where his friend might be. For some odd reason he was mad at him. He did nothin wrong.

    "If he's at the beach already i will kill him.....that sounds gay." he said to him self. The boy folded his arms. He was over half way there when a girl with light orange dress with a giltery butterfly butterfly on the front, ran towards him.

    "Riku, Riku, RIKU!" Selphanie said coming up to the jade eyed boy.

    "What, I'm looking for sora. We're going to the market to get new wooden swords." Riku said flatly. He kept walking with the girl at his heels.

    "Did you hear, the new people. Sora said...."she was cut off by a boy screaming. "Opps, lookes like Sora did something. Hehehe..." Selphanie ram off giggling.

    "What's her problem!?!" The young boy said, running to the beach.
     
  2. computercat5 Merlin's Housekeeper

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    you made a few mistakes, but other than that, it was pretty good
     
  3. Shuhbooty moon child

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    It's really short. But it sounds good so far! You should make the chapter's longer. :3
     
  4. Sumi suicidé

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    It's Selphie, not Selphanie. And Riku's eyes aren't green, are they?