My Rhyimg poem

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  1. Kairi9020 Traverse Town Homebody

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    As angels pass,
    I hope this will last.
    This strong feeling in my heart,
    I wish that we are never apart.

    In my dreams I see an almost faded face
    One that I wish not to replace.
    I don't know his name or his age
    When I'm around him I want to hide in a cage.

    I'm afraid of what he thinks of me,
    Am I immature? Too outgoing? Do I have to much glee?
    I want to be the one who stands by his side,
    Never afraid, never wanting to run and hide.

    I have imperfections
    One being all this affection that lives deep inside my heart.
    I want to open it to the face of the one who is hidden,
    Admit to him I am smitten.

    I try to act like I don't care,
    Like I wish he wasn't there.
    But in my eyes, he should see how lonely I am,
    How much I want him to understand.

    So I write down a poem, a song if I must,
    I play it on my piano quietly to hide my rage and how I'd like to fuss.
    I try to calm myself down,
    I try to hide my frown.

    So till this day, he still doesn't know
    What's going on, what I refuse to show.
    I'll keep this feeling to myself
    Until I'm ready to take it down from the shelf.

    I'll write him a letter explaining how I feel,
    But tell him it's not a big deal.
    Secretly, I'll be hoping he responds with a smile
    And an open heart that lasts longer then a car riding a for a mile.


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    One poem I've written that rhymes. I'm not sure if it's any good, but I tried.
     
  2. Last of the Organization Twilight Town Denizen

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    Very nicely done Kairi.....nice length....good words.....good rhyme.....
     
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    Wow...the poem's awesome...the rhymes, the rhythm...great job. :) So...do you actually know how to play the piano?
     
  4. Kairi9020 Traverse Town Homebody

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    Yep, and gutiar. I'm thinking about starting drums.
     
  5. Nymph of Destiny Chaser

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    Wow, ironically, I can play the piano, a little bit of guitar, and one song on the flute. lol But good luck with the drums~! And since I don't want to go off subject...I love how you used the sentence with piano in the poem! :)
     
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