No time to think, No time for fear Now it's the time to take the dare Im standing tall ,im flying free Now i found a whole new me. Falling under lost in darkness But there you are, right by my side In your heart i feel the light Listen to your heart and you feel free Play it cool, that's your stlye What's behind those beautiful eyes Soul lover, you go your own way Or is that just something sound good to say? Are you everything you seen? Or are you just a fairt tale dream? Where we going i don't know So follow light and let darkness go! Follow light. No sadness, No tears, No pain, Only love Follow the light Let it bring you Joy and happyness Follow the light Trust your heart, take a chance find away Anything can happen as long im with you.
I correct the grammar and spelling mistakes, they are underlined. The overall message is very good, you definitely get the point across. I've never been in love so I can't say much more on the subject. I think the poem could flow a bit more. At times it seems like you just want to put another love line in the poem. But achieving flow is a skill that come with time (Trust me I had the same problem, and I think I still do) One thing I would say is PLEASE capitalize your "I"s when the they need to be.( Sorry it's a pet peeve grammar mistake of mine) Bad grammar can make even the best writing look like a piece of trash. Also check out the spelling and capitalization.( Don't worry the first person who commented in my poetry thread also commented on my grammar and capitalization. I am not very good at grammar either,but I try my best. ) Good start! If you like it, keep going! =)
