****************************** Nobody will ever understand my pain All that I had to stake in my life Is just too hard to stand up Is just too hard to live Every door is closed for me I have no chance to live I so wish that I could change the past Evade what happened before in my life I just want to live But the past traps me from behind Is just too hard to forget everything Knowing that everyone betrayed me I want to dream, to find a temporal solution But I remember I can only have nightmares, nothing more No one will ever understand my pain No one will understand me, that´s the truth I just want one chance A chance to be happy without being full of sorrow But I can never get that Problems will always chase me down This is my destiny To life in misery Because is just too hard To forget the past It always tracks me down It always brings my sadness and rage I have no chance to life with happiness I will life in the past forever I just try and try But is too hard I can do this I better give up before time You said you used to feel my pain You will never understand Try to be live with your past behind your back Try to live always in suffer and cry I don´t want compassion Just an explanation Why this happened to me? Why I must live in misery? ****************************** I am always depressed because I can never forget what happened before, it´s just too hard ._..
I wouldn't judge someone's mood by their poems... people often enjoy writing about something they aren't. Anyways, the poem flowed great until the last stanza... the double question killed the ending IMO. Still, nice work. ^^
I like the third verse as well =] Very nice! Its hard to write a poem that sounds right without it rhyming, or at least for me it is, but you pull it off quite nicely. Its easy to read into and kinda feel what you're feeling when I read that. But then again I have a fat dead skeleton in my closet.. well.. kinda.. everybody knows its there but I still hide it.. makes me feel safe <_<;; Anywho, hope to see some of your newer work soon, I'm off to read your other poems ^^
