My life so far.

This is a story about a couple of kids who are far from normal. I'm Evan, but most people call me Ev. Or Ven. Or Evan. There's this girl, her name is Lexi. She's like me, we're just your average, everyday tweens. But guess what. We're weird. I mean, like, scary weird. We aren't normal. We all have special powers, in some way.

First off, I have enhanced senses, like, i have extra good smelling, and I can pick up on any movement, and I have 180 degeree vision, even though my vision is the worst you'll ever find on someone who isn't blind. Also, I have this radar thing with my ears where I can tellll exactly where a sound came from, also my hearing is excellent. I also have what I like to call my Sixth Sense. I know what you're thinking. "You can see dead people?!'' But, nope. I can't see dead people. But I can sense people who are alive. I can sense any life form, any presence, within a ver far range, and locate it. I can even find out if electronics are on, just because they disturb the airwaves or sumthin'.

That's not even the half of it. Plus, I can control water, create fire, direct wind, and use the element of light to my will. You know that Riku kid from that video game, Kingdom Hearts 2? Yeah, I'm like him, only, instead of dark aura and dark shield, it's light aura and stuff. (Face it, light PWNZ) Also, I'm really fast, and don't get tired out easily, and really strong. So that's basicly me.

Now, here's all you need to know about Lexi. She's amazing. She can jump really, REALLY high. I mean, you gotta see this girl jump. She also has some of the powers I have, like the enses and stuff, except, instead of having awful vision, hers is better than the average human. Along with all her other senses.

Also, Lexi can control earth, like rocks, not the planet:). And she can control darkness, even though she's a good girl. Trust me, Lexi's awesome. And, she's kinda cute. Once you see her, you'll know what I'm talking about:

Oh, yea, how stupid of me. This is how I look: .

You may be thinking "You're life must be awesome!" Well, my life is far from awesome. There's these guys, in black oufits, that are out to "get" me and Lexi. Don't ask me what I mean when I say "get". Trust me, you don't wanna know. Right now, we're hiding out somewhere in the rocky mountains. Actually, not much is happening right now, so... I think we're safe. I just hope something bad doens't happen...

{note from the author: so.. this is the story of a kid named evan, and his friend lexi. It may sound boring so far, but trust me, it'll pcik up speed.}

 

Wow, this is good. Are you going to make this into a stroy about and thid girl? that would be something else......good!

 

{This will be a story about both the boy and the girl, but it's only going to be narrated by the boy}

"Morning, sunshine." Lexi said. I looked at my watch. "It's 5:00 in the morning! What are you doing up so early.?!" I aske, exasperated becuase of my lack of sleep. "Hello. We're on the run, remember?" She said flatly. Man, this chick is great.

" So... what are we gonna have for breakfast?" I asked, rubbing my stomach. I was so hungry I could eat roadkill. "Roadkill." Lexi replied. How did she...? "I'm kidding, silly! We're having eggs. Don't ask me how or where I got them, and we won't have any problems." She said. I didn't think I wanted to know.

"Sure I can't help you with that?" I asked, noticing she was making breakfast all by herself, while I was... What was I doing? I guess, just staring out into space, dosing off slightly. "Nope, I'm fine. It's almost ready anyway." That's Lexi for ya, folks. Always doing stuff by herself. Besides that, she was totally cool. In fact, she's totally cool with that characteristic being counted!

After we had eaten breakfast, I noticed something on the peak of one of the cliffs. I pointed it out to Lexi. "Hey, Lexi. Doesn't that look like... A GUY IN BLACK?!?!? We'd better get out of here!" I screamed, after noticing what it was. Suddenly a shower of arrows all just missed us. Superhuman speed skillz FTW! One of the arrows had a note attached to it. Lexi picked it up from underneath the arrow and read it:

Hello Lexi, Evan. I'll make this brief, just like your life. You have only 6 months to live. You have enhanced abilities for a reason. You were made this way. You will expire in 6 months, so enjoy the last times you'll have together.​

"Well that's not good!" I said, with actual meaning in my voice. " You know, it's funny. You look so emo, but you're like the comeplete opposite of emo. I now declare you ome. That's emo backwards, for those of us who can't spell." I rolled my eyes. "I'm serious. What if that guy is right? I don't wanna die yet! I'm only 12! I haven't ever kissed a girl before!" I said. "Ev, the only girl you've ever seen up close is me." Lexi said. I blushed.

"Anyway, I guess you're right. Maybe there's something we can do to live longer." Lexi said. And the plot unfolds itself...

{Yea, i know it's short, but it'll pick up speed once more chapters come.}

 

{Sorry for the double post, but I'm gonna update this each day, cuz I want ppl to read it.}

I was still left speechless. (Well, speechless beyond snapping back a comment at Lexi, of course.)

"Hey, Lexi, I've got an idea." I said. "Well, SPILL!" She said. I detected a tone of anger and hatred in her voice. So[I/]not like her.

"Well, aren't we sort of near, like, a really old fashioned English town or something?" I said, not even half sure where I was going with this. "Yeah..." She replied.

"Well, maybe they have some sort of secret magic spell or something to help us stay alive." I said, half serious. Lexi jumped up 14 feet in the air and di a flip, then hugged me. Again, I blushed.

"Oh, Ven, you're a genius!" She screamed, in her hot, girly little voice. She ran off (Well, it was more of a half jumping 10 feet in front of her while running sort of thing) as I yelled quietly "I was kinda kidding!". I decided to follow her. Me/She might've been onto something.

When we reached town, I pointed out an old fashioned bookstore. "Maybe we'll find some spellbook or something in here." I said cheerfully. God, I just noticed how much a couple of misfits we are. We can be incredibly cheerful, while looking emo( ome) and look and act perky. We were the ultimate super-kids.

After searching shelf after shelf, we couldn't find anything. After about 2 hours of looking for a book, we went up to the front desk. (Which, apparently, the old-time bookstore had.)

"Do you have any books about real life remedies or something to being immortal?" Lexi asked. "Young lady this is a bookstore, not an Egyptian tomb." The guy at the desk said calmly, sort of sounding like the Dyson guy, only waaay more exasperated.

"Yeah, I know, but we thought--" The man interupted her. THE FIEND! "I don't care what you thought, we do not carry and REA LIFE BOOKS ABOUT LIVING FOREVER!! Now, if you please, let me finish this wonderful book about pixies and fairies and a flatulent dog named Poot in peace." The dude said. Man, what a creep!

Suddenly, I had a thought. But this time, it was a good thought! "Hey, wait a minute... LEMME SEE THAT BOOK!" I yelled, as I grabbed the book out of the freakazoid's hand. The title cover was unreadable, but it had some good pictures that actually looked promising on the front. Lexi shot me a look that said: "get the hell out of here, we're making him angry!" and we both ran for the exit. After we made it into an extremely old inn, we looked at the book.

It had all this stuff about these fairies with rings that kept them immortal so they could spread the goodness of the seasons to the magaical land they lived in. "Why did you steal this book from that WONDERFUL man?!" Lexi said, totally sounding sarcastic on the word "wonderful".

"Just, read the book." I said, and I handed it over.

 

It gotting (getting, for those who don't know how to spell ^^) betz(better). Really good dude! Fantasy, love it!

 

Turning into a good story..keeep going i'll be reading. good job!

 

{Thanks, guys! I really appreciate the posts!!XD}

"What a find." Lexi said. Wow. Normally she says more than that. Oh well! She hugged me, conviently at the time the maid came in. (Note my sarcasm) "Oh..." The maid said. "i'm sorry if I interupted anything." Crap. Crappity Crap. Crap on a stick! "Uh, no! It's not what it looks like!" We both shouted, almost simultaneously.

"Oh, well I just wanted to dust a little bit." She said, a tone of exasperation in her voice. She gave us a look that said: This always happens... Gosh, some people! "Ju- Just do it later, okay?" I said, almost pushing her out of the room.

"That was rather rude." Lexi said. "Yeah, well, she was rude to us. It's only fair..." I trailed off, like one of those guys who like to make people beg for stuff by, like... you know what? Let's just say I trailed off. "Anyway, maybe we should try to decode some of these clues." I said, trying to change the subject.

"Yeah, Maybe." Lexi said, sounding incredibly sarcastic. I love/hate the way her mood changes constantly. Wait. Isn't that, like, a sign of something? I'm only 12, so, obviously I wouldn't know. *shrug*

"Well, let's see... This looks like it says... kloonwtoninhet. Wow. Helpful. kloonwtoninhet. What the crap does that mean?" I said, using my favorite almost-swear word. Besides, frick, that is. Well, they're actually tied, just, well, NEVERMIND!

"Well... kloon could be look...wton is town... in is, well, in... and het is the. So, put it all together in words that an idiot could understand..." She said. Wow. I could've never figured that out! She is so amazingly smart, it, well, amazes me!

"Look in the town" I replied, almost instantly. See? I can be smart, too! :Þ

"Well, how helpful. Look in the town. What town? This town? A town in India?" She said, totally tired of looking at the book, and just completely having a suckish time in this time. Yup, my third fav almost-swear. Suck.

"Let's try deciphering another word, and then see if we can make any sense out of it." I said, trying to cheer her up. "But first, let's SLEEP!" I realized, it was almost 1:00 am. Wait, why was the maid coming at that time? Oh, well. I'll figure it out tommorrow.

Suddenly, Lexi and I looked at eachother. We must've both remembered. We only bought a one-bed room, cuz we didn't think we'd be staying. "I'll just sleep on the floor or something." I said, sacrifing sweet, SWEET comfort.

Ah, the nice, sweet comfort of the ground. NOT!

 

I woke up the next morning. Well, I guess you could call it morning. I looked at the clock. 3:08. Why did I wake up then? I'm, like, a totally sound sleeper! I looked out the window. My danger sense was tingling.

Ok, not really. A guy in black was walking throught the parking lot. If I knew more swear words, i would totally use them. "Lexi, wake up." She mumbled something, still about 3/4 asleep. "Lexi, a guy in black is here." I said, quietly. "Tell him to come back later..." She groaned.

I had an idea. "He saus he think you're shmexy!" I yelled, a little too loudly. "WHAT!?!" Lexi screamed, almost just making a loud squeaking noise but the WHAT was still, barely, audible.

"Let's get out of here!" She jumped out the window. I facepalmed. The 23rd floor, too. Oh, well, at least she's a good jumper, so she'll land on her feet. I hope. I jumped out the window, too, after taking the book. It was easier than it looked, but I still think Lexi's incredibly brave/awesome for trying.

Luckily, when I got down, the guy in black was no longer there. But his car was. And it was still running too, with the window open. too easy. "Hey, Lexi" I called after her. "Do you know how to drive?" I asked.

"Why would I? I'm only 12. In most normal places you don't learn till you're like, what? 15, 16?" She nagged.

"Okay, I'll just wing it then!" I said, and I jumped into the car. WOW. So many buttons. I had no idea it would be this difficult to drive a car. I found out later, that no, it's not that difficult, this is a spy car, but that's a different story.

I did like I saw on T.V. I put it in drive, and then I accelerated. Not a good idea. We almost crashed into a poll if Lexi hadn't pressed the barke at the right time. OMG. I can't reach the pedals without having my vision in the windhield be cut off.

We got out of the car and ran. For our lives. "Okay, driving, not a good idea." Lexi said. "Jumping, on the other hand" She jumped onto a telephone poll, and started walking the cables like a high-wire. Good thing both me and her have excellent balance.

I climbed up the poll, wishing I could say I wasn't scared. Once I was up, though, walking the cables was easy. the only problem was: where would we go?

{I do know all the swear words, but Evan doesn't XD}

 

{If anyone else reads this, please post in it. I don't wanna get in trouble for double posting :nono:}

"Yo, Evan, make it start raining!" Lexi said, interupting my intellectual thoughts. (I was thinking about how cute her butt was when it wiggled on a wire... OH NEVER MIND!)

"Since when are you a gangsta?" I said. "Oh, just do it!" I made it start raining. Power over water FTW!! But, wait, won't we get electrocuted?

"Lexi, jump!" I shouted, as I jumped off myself. She nodded and jumped off too, landing farther than me. (of course) I landed on a car, she landed on the grass on the side of the rode. I jumped onto the grass too, accidently rolling into a quickly-filling-up creek.

I'll say it again. Crap. Lexi looked behind us. "What do you know? We're being stalked. AGAIN! What the **** do they want us for?! We're already gonna die!!" She said. She sounded really deppressed. I knew how much she wanted to be a normal tween, and so did I.

You have no idea how hard it is to not go to school, not have parents, be stalked all around the country, and worry about dieing before you hit puberty. "Hey, Lexi, first of all, was that a swear? Cause, I mean, I'll write it down... Anyway, we gotta find another place to stay." I said, almost getting out my journal to write the word down.

How does she know more about that kinda stuff than I do? Meh, must be instinct. "Let's just dig a hole in the ground and come out..." She said glumly and sarcasticly. "That's a great idea! You can manipulate earth, right? Then start digging!"

Wow. Living in a hole. Niiiiiiice.

{sorry this one is so short, but I didn't have much time to write it. Next ones will be longer, kay?}

 

{Seriously... If anyone reads this... POST IN IT!!! PLZ!!!}

Lexi got to digging right away. "A hole, Evan?" She kept saying. "A hole?!" I just replied "It'll be safer....." In a singson voice, then smirked. I don't think she wants to be in a hole. Oh, well!

"There.... done. Now All I have to do is move this boulder..." She moved a boulder without touching it, and then we walked inside. It was like a comfy little dirt home! We could make it look... nice... "Let's just get inside before anyone sees." We walked inside, and I found a cool little pile of dirt to sit on.

"hey, Evan, can you make some walls, please?" Lexi asked politlely. I smiled, as I made wind rise up right in front of the dirt walls, so no bugs could get in. "perfect." I mumbled. "Now let's take a look at that book. I'll read the second clue. It reads... lwoberugodnehtnidoldraaoco" It's never easy, is it?!?!

"Oh, that's easy! It spells 'Below the ground in Old Colarado'! Anyone could figure that out!" I was speechless. "Wait a minute... we're below the ground in an old Colarado town! YAY!" She dug a little bit, and found a crumpled up piece of paper. I read it aloud.

"If you ever want to find your life-saving rings, look in a place, where faries sing." Well that's weird. Wait a minute...

" I GET IT!" I shouted, a little too loudly. "We need to get to the realm of fairies! Or something... Look, I saw this glowing thing a few 100 feet ahead of our holehome, in the grass. Follow me!" I got out of the hole, and ran towards the portal. The moment I stepped inside, everything seemed to melt around me. Now I was in complete darkness.

All of a sudden I was back next to Lexi, and both me and her were stunned. All around us, and army of guys in black stood, with lots and lots of guns. I pointed out all the ones I recognized to Lexi. Ak-47...

They started shooting at us. I, instinctively, for some reason, put my hand up. every single one of the bullets missed me, even though they were shooting straight at me. Weird... Anyway, after a bunch of them had to reload, we started fighting back. Oh, yea, there's one thing I forgot to mention. We PWN at martial arts. after knocking out guy after guy after guy, I saw something interesting. They were swarming the portal!

 

Hi thekeymaster, i've been reading your story don't worry. ^^ I actually think it's pretty interesting. I like Evan's personality lol

 

Thanks. It's good to know someone's reading it. HINT HINT!

 

{YAY! This thread is now a hot topic! What a great improvement...:unsure:}

"Lexi! Get to the portal before they do, and knock any of them out who are still swarming. we're going in!" I shouted while punching a guy in the face. lexi jumped 12 feet into the air, then ran/jumped across people's heads to the portal. Lemme give you all a layout of the situation.

It's raining, we're surrounded by thousands of guys in black, they're all trying to kill us, we're tired, and our fists hurt.(Hardheads :Þ) Now we have to get to the portal without dying. Easy, right? Well, you're fricking wrong. Did you forget they had GUNS?!?! Lot's and lot's of guns!

I did the same as Lexi, only jumping about 3 feet in the air, then being assisted by a puff of air I created, and running across the heads. When i got halfway to the portal, I jumped off a guys head and made a blast of wind towards the ground. everyone within a 30 foot radius got blown backward and knocked out. Convienient.

There were only a few guys left, guarding the portal, but these guys were the biggiest, muscleiest, scariest dudes you'll ever see. And they all had guns. some had chain guns, and others had Ak-47s. How will I block a chain gun?!?! They started shooting at me. I put my hand up, and most of them missed, except I got grazed on the shoulder a few times. Then, right before my eyes, they men shot off the ground, huge mounds of stone in their place.

I caught Lexi smiling at me before jumping into the portal. I followed her, and it was pitch black again. At least there weren't anymore guys in black for now. Suddenly, a blinding flash of light had us disoriented. when I could see again, I relaized where we were.

"the ocean." I said, and Lexi nodded. We were floating in the ocean, about, well, roughly 28 miles from shore.

Lexi looked ahead at the distant shoreline. "It looks really... differnt. It's sort of futuristic, and it has a lot of really tall buildings." She said, and I looked at her. We both winked, highfived, spun around while jumping, and highfived again. Our secret handshake. We started swimming towards the shore, me using my water and wind powers to assist us going faster.

We finally reached shore, and we walked around on the beach. We walked to the sidewalk, and then saw the city for the first time, really well. It was AMAZING! There were tall skyscrapers with rounded tops, and barely any windows. They had cars, but they looked different than our cars.

I and my superior guys skills identified the kind of cars. Toyota Pms. I've always wanted a car like that! I thought to myself.

Suddenly I heard a loud shout. "WATCH OUT!" It said, and I looked up.

 

I moved out of the way just in time to see one of their awesome cars come crashing down into the sky next to me.

"Well, that was... fun." I said sarcasticly. "Say, Ven, why does this place, not ion our Earth, have a car from a Japanese brand?" Lexi asked.

"Maybe... it has some connection to Earth?" I replied unsurely.

"That was quite smart. Anyway, in the city's center, there's a giant monster throwing cars and causing destruction. Why don't you aloof, cool kids check it out?" A woman, about 24 camoe out of the shaodws dressed and all black, addressed us.

"I would, but we need weapons. even we can't go up against a monster unarmed." I said, trying to sound as cool as possible.

" There's a sword shop over there. Good luck..." The lady's words slithered off of her tongue like a snake. She sank back into the shadows, and pointed to a shop nearby. "Shades and Blades." Lexi said, reading the store name.

"What up with the shade part?" I wondered out loud. We walked into a store. It had lot's of nice sowrds and staffs, and sold a few sunglasses. Real funny... I thought. I purchased a sword that looked like this,: only it looked more real up close xD. Lexi purchased 2 bamboo swords, because we both are good with those kins of swords, and she bought me one becuase she's generous.

If you didn't already know, Evan means "Young Warrior" in Welsh, and I think that pretty much sums me up.

We walked to the center of town, and saw a big flash of green light, and nothing was there excpet damaged cars. No monster or anything. "it must of dissappeared at the flash of light." I told Lexi, and she nodded.

"Oh, well, at least we're armed." She smiled, and we sat down on a bench. Lexi leaned her cute little head on my shoulder and fel asleep. everything was good. For right now, anyway.

{Shades and Blades is an actual store near where I live. That name is copyrighted by them, and I didn't make it up. Please don't sue me.:nono:

Different Chapter. It automerged it. I hate that.



I managed to get some shut eye for about 5 hours, but I had to be only half-asleep, to, you know, always be alert.

Lexi started stirring. I realized we were still sleeping on the bench, and it was about 1:00 in the morning. "Ev... I don't feel so well..." She said. She didn't look too good, either.

"Lexi, you look sick.. we gotta get you someplace safe. How about another hotel?" She just nodded, and I carried her to the hotel. Look at me, all hero-like. We checked in, and we got a two-bedroom this time. Thank goodness.

I laid Lexi down on the bed, and she told me what was wrong. "I have a huge headache, and my vision is all blurry, and my stomach hurts, and I feel like vomiting, but I can't." She said. I felt soo sorry for her. Why Lexi? She never did anything wrong!

"I'll go get you some medicine. It might not work too well with your advanced DNA, but we can try it. In the meantime, here." I set some soothing light over her, becuase light makes everything better, and I left. I felt bad leaving her there by herself, but I had to.

Luckily, I found a drugstore that was actually open at 2 in the morning. This world...thing had some of the weirdest medicines. Take this one for instane:

NeofluxSide effects may include: drowsiness, diarhea, spontaneous combustion, spontaneous removal of the nose, sickness, severe vomiting, increased risk of falling apart, botox removal, extreme shrinking of the left ear. Ask your third spouse if Neoflux is right for you. While taking Neoflux, please do not drive, operate machinery, crate balls of dough, blow smoke out your ears, brush your hair, or sneeze. Neoflux. Becuase you're worth it.

WORTH WHAT?!!? In the end, I just took this wolrd's equivelent to Advil and left. I gave it to Lexi, and she felt better almost automaticly. "that was too close. Lexi, I want you to know something. I promsie I'll always protect you, no matter what."

A promise is meant to be kept.

 

The next mroning, I was about to leave when Lexi said something to me after breakfast. "Listen, Ev, if this is the land of fairies, then what do we do now? And how do we know we're in the land of fairies?" She said.

"Check the book. Hopefully, there'll be s'more clues." We looked in the book. The next clue was:

"fiuyr'eohreethekchetntcral"

"If you're there, check the central." Lexi said immediately after she read the clue." How do you DO that?!?!" I shouted. She shrugged and said "it's a gift".

We got ll our gear, which wans't much, and headed to the enter of town, like before. People were still trying to reconstruct buildings and things when we got there, from the recent monster attack. A kid ran up to me, and asked me a question. "Vampires, or werewolves?" He asked.

"Huh?" I said. "Which is your favorite. Vampires, or Werewolves?" "Vampires." I said. Huh, why do I like Vampires best? The kid wrote something down on a notepad, and left. "Well that was weird..." Lexi said.

Suddenly, another green flash appeared. Something that looked like this:

everyone screamed, and I heard one person shout "it's the same monster from before!" lexi and I got out swords out, nd prepared for battle.

 

Just a heads up, check for spelling errors here and there, but you're doing good. :)

 

I've only just read this story, I will admit I wasn't sure what to expect.

I have to say I was surprised, it is actually really good, it can be hard to pull off narration effectively but you are doing a great job <3 I also like your use of actual images to help with the story. Though I would suggest working more on imagery within the words. Good use of imagery can greatly improve the flow and style of a story :3

I can't wait for the next part.​

 

{ZOMG! I'm so glad you guys like my story. Thanks for the rep by the way, CtR, I now only need 100 posts and i can be premium. Also, thanks for the suggestions, guys.}

Lexi and I looked at each other, both having the same thought. "Most likely tougher than it looks." Why can't anything in our lives by easy? Just for once, I'd like to be able to live a normal life, not running from stalkers in black, and fighting monsters in parallel diensions. But it's more fun this way.

I nodded at Lexi, and she winked back to me. One of our secret battle plan codes. I went left, and she went right, confusing the terrible Leviathan. It wasn't very bright if it were stumped by that.

As if out of nowhere, the weird shadow lady who was in black showed up, this time looking worn out and scarred. She still had on a black dress, but this time it was ragged and torn. I wondered if she had fought this thing earlier.

She also carried two guns that looked likew something from those "Time Crisis" games you see at an arcade. Only these guns were real, and incredibly powerful. "Anyone with good combat skills, FIGHT!" The lady sreamed at the crowd, staring in horror.

Noone came out, to nobody's suprise. Lexi and I were made to be brave, and that lady was probably just crazy, but everyone else had too much "sense" and "sanity" to fight against this strong creature. The wimps.

Crazy lady in black, or CLB, as we'll call her, jumped on top of the monster, making it swat at it's own head. CLB dodged all it's swatting attaks, making it hurt itself.

It roared and shook CLB off, and she was knocked unconscious when she hit the ground. "I guess it's time to butt in!" Lexi shouted to me, and I nodded, winked, and punched my palm. A signal that meant "Jump 28 feet, distracting it, while I slash at it's butt" Why were we using our own language? Why weren't we just speaking? No idea.

We executed our plan, and it worked. while Lexi was jumping, the leviathan was focusing on her, while I slashe at it's butt with my sword. I actually cut it, andit started bleeding, or should I say oozing, pruple blood everywhere.

We both jumped on top of it, just as it flew away, crashing into buildings and destroying construction sites and cranes. It was a nice monster. Note my sarcasm.

 

I grabbed onto it's weird horn thingys, an Lexi did the same. I thought about someway to stop it, but it would be really cruel. Wait a second... when I\have I ever been known to be nice?

I climbed onto it's weird, slimy head, and stabbed it's eye with my sword. It screeched a deafening screech in agony, and started moving it's head around wildly, while falling becuase it didn't bother to fly anymore. Another one of those stupid flashes appeared, and Lexi and I got knocked out because of it.

I woke up in a deep, dark cave, just as the monster flew out of it. "Lexi, Lexi wake up..." I shook her a little bit. We were in shackles, uncomfortably close together, so it was hard to shake her. "Ugh...." She moaned, and lifted her head up. Her hair was no longer in a bun, and part of it was draped over her face. She looked good this way.

"Ev... Evan... Where are we?" "I have absolutly no idea. after another one of those flashes, we ended up here." Lexi shook her head, getting the hair out of her eyes. "Oh yea, that's right, the monster..."

Suddenly her eyes got big and wide and she put her head up straight, alert of what was going on. "DO YOU KNOW WHAT YOU DID!?!?!" She screamed.

"WE WOULD"VE BEEN BETTER OFF ON EARTH, YOU... YOU FUB!" Fub was something she promised never to call me, because I hated it. A tear came into my eyes, and she burst into sobbs.

"I SHOULD"VE KNOWN NEVER TO TRUST YOU! I"M THE SMARTER ONE! I SHOULD BE THE LEADER! I'M-- I"LL BE BETTER OFF ON MY OWN!" She mae an explosion of darkness around her and only jher, blowing up her shackles. She stromed out of the cave and started jumping onto peks of Earth she made appear.

She was really mad, and she blamed me for all this. I felt like my hearts was taken out, ripped to shreds, served with ketchup, eaten, digested, and then exploded before coming out the other end. Nice visual, huh?

 

I have finished reading this and i think you are a fantastic writer and are really good at description.