I dedicated this to a Senior who just graduated yesterday. I showed this to him and, apparently, he likes it. My Fallen Angel Each little second ticks by grows heavier in my heart I don't understand why destiny brought us together like this I wish I could turn back the time to do things I never said or did Somehow, the only thing I need is your presence to keep me calm Can't you tell the difference in my behavior when you are there and not? I whirl my head to expect you, only you but you are not there Just watching you walk out of my life Makes me want to cry out your name towards your back until my voice becomes hoarse Those wings... I could see the ones of a fallen angel Just how I like it The feathers still hold together Ready to fly to the sky I can't take flight Perhaps you plucked mine To make me see things the way you do You showed me wonders Even though it is just little They still awed me You are irreplaceable to me No one could make me show emotions the way you do Such as ruffling my feathers Those astute eyes of yours pointed out One of the few things that held me back To get close to you I'm glad I have your attention If there's any way I could fly with you I'd be happy to be there by your side If not, I'll be waiting for your return, Kira From, Lauren A/N: Kira is his middle name and Lauren is my real name. I wanted to keep him as anonymus in case anyone finds it before he does.
...wow. There are very few poems that can actually take my breath away, and yours just made that list. Bravo. I do have to ask though: Is there a story behind this? I can take a stab in the dark as to what it means, but is there a reason why you felt you had to write this, aside from showing the senior I mean?
Thank you very much, darkcloud. I had a crush on him four years ago and we were in the same class since our school is small. He is the reason I'm here or I'd be doing something else and my English teacher wanted me to make five poems as a final grade. This is one of them and she says they are getting better.
Ah, I see. Did you ever tell him that you had a crush on him (none of my business, I know, but I'm curious now) You've gotta post more poems, Dawn. This is really good.
After I posted this, he called me! I told him I had a crush on him and he finds it weird that I'm loud when he's far away but once I notice he's close by, I become quiet. Apparently he's not leaving until next year's spring so I could spend time with him.
Ah, sounds promising! Well, I hope it goes well for you. Who knows, maybe another poem might help out (not trying to pressure you into making another one for our sake, just trying to be helpful...but sometimes suggestions sound weird...darn it...XP). :)
