Ok so I was just sitting around the other night and I just suddenly got inspiration fom the smallest little things so I figured I'd start writing serious poetry again...Please tell me the ups and downs and I hope you enjoy my poetry ^_^ Ok so this first one I suddenly kept thinking about shooting stars and well I wrote this one. Shooting star Sparkle sparkle way up high. Sparkle sparkle stars in the sky. Wow that moving one is so pretty. High above the dark Grey city. That's a shooting star just up there. Hurry make a wish before it vanishes from the air. Now the wish is made from the star so white. What did you wish for? I wished the sky was this pretty every night. Well this one I just loved the idea of a fallen angel. The fallen angel Accused of the bad but not guilty. Sent right back to earth so filthy. Why is he still here he doesn't belong. I'm telling you the judge was wrong. This fallen angel did nothing wrong he is innocent. Allow him through the gates on the moon of crescent. Innocent until proven guilty wheres the law? Even in the goverment of heaven there is a flaw. Look at this man, do they get any kinder? Watch him suffering he is just being the bider. So this is hell, right under our noses. To stay and watch everyone die under the roses. Ok this one I dedicated to the girl I like...She laughed. Karly Rocks. King I have it all,I have the world And I want more, my heart is curled. Release the lock you hold the key. Listen to the slow rhythm from inside me. You are the sun, your soul shines brighter than ever. Rock out and write a song using the metronome from my chest. Orbs of light from souls of steel and all the rest. Can you feel the eternal rhythm beating forever? Kitty cats purr throughout the night but I never Singing their song with secret messages. Ok this one...Well we've been having lots of a rain lately so I just wrote this to pass some time. Misery downpour It's raining too much more and more. I'm stuck in a misery downpour. Stuck outside in the pouring rain. Rain of tears, tears of pain. Everywhere I look theres no blue skies. I'm sick and tired of nothing but goodbyes. If you want to be friends I know you just want to stab me in the back. So I'll just keep running and not look back. This last one I figured I'd twist something romantic sounding and turn it into something else. Burn in hell. My baby, my hunny I love you so. My sugarbunch, My sweetheart I want you to know. So lets sit outside under the star light. So we can close our eyes and make it through the night. I'm starting to hate you I want a stab at your soul. I'm going to poke the holes through a voodoo doll. So my baby, my sugar happy Halloween. Burn in hell and I hope you scream. So that's all for now but I will be writing more (Weather the comments are bad or good) So I hope you enjoyed and thanks for reading. D: Does nobody find my poetry comment worthy? This is my best (next to misery downpour one or the other) You are poison rest in peace you were so dear. Rest in peace move on without a fear. That's it come into the light. Thats right come without a fight. One look into your eye. One look and I beg to die. Because to me you're poison. Did you think you'd get a happy ever after? You were wrong I'm dragging you to hell with laughter. Do you think it's mean, do you think it's cruel? It's life, it sucks you're nothing but a mule. So you wanna escape, you wanna be free? Well first you have to sell your soul to me. Because to me your soul is poison. Right then let's go, one two three four. Turn around let's go, gimme more gimme more. The deed is done your soul is mine. I won't return it no matter how you whine. Welcome to hell, now get the hell out. Hell is mine and you get nout. Because to me your presence is poison. You turn around and look me dead in the face. If looks could kill you'dve won the human race. Through the sorrow and agony angels cry. They turn to god and beg to die. Did they know that this merciless guy was god? That's right satan and god are one person and that persons me. It just makes it sweeter to watch you see. Because to me good is poison. The land of the living it makes me sick. To watch people becoming good so quick. But I watch them and imagine their future. A future of suffering and pain in the picture. The only things that can make me smile The only things are pain, murder and rape but they only last a while. Every day I hope and pray for one more person tonight. I sit and I wait, I wait for someone else to come to the light. Because to me evil is the cure. Haiku. November brings storms October rolls in silence. December comes peace Heartless Heart of flame, flame of hate. I'm sorry darling, I have no happy fate. Tears of anger, tears of misery. Looking into the eyes of mystery. The brightest of all hearts lies in darkness. The darkest heart lies in the light of the heartless. Hurry up, draw the line Wake me up without a rhyme. Close the book and end the story. Happy ending Once upon a time I was told. I was told the truth so bold. The handsome princes. And the beautiful princesses. They showed me something. And now I only know one thing. It was a huge lie. One day we will all day. Don't tell me you were mending I know it was pretending. There's no such thing as a happy ending. Love. Feel the blood and bone. Please stop before I'm alone. Just take a look who knew? And I'm here to save you. So take of the mask and let me see your eyes. If it means that much to you just stop the lies. The mask is evil, the mask consumes you. Honey I love you so get a clue. I dont want the frown. If you continue to be naive my love may end. That day is dreaded so please try to blend. If you need one I'll give you a hug. I'll lend you my hand to make you snug. Just open your eyes and feel my smile. One day maybe you'll smile for a while. But please hunny let me embrace you. Then you'll get the complete preview. The preview of my love. We move closer, going in for the kiss. This is the one chance neither of us can miss. My body is your body, you can use me. The look in your eyes it fills me with glee. You and me, we have a disease. Just promise me please! Promise me this, because you're divine. You're touch is like the sweetest wine. And the wine is sweet. I have to break the barrier between us. I'm very sensitive so I'll that's a plus. I will write you a love song knowing you prefer sweet rock and roll. One touch could kill my control. Maybe some day soon we can be together. And then I could love you forever. Because I love you. Justice They call me a ******. But I think they're just on guard. They hate me, they fear me. Yet they don't here my silent plee. One day I'll stand up for everyone. One day I'll be the hero and the pain is gone. I'm a knight in shining armor. But I forgot to say "No more". I take it, I don't complain. I hate it but my efforts are in vain. If just for today I could win. They would all see I dont live in a bin! Flame of roses. DO you feel the heat of the flame? Can you feel the sunshine through the rain? I want your soul but I can't touch. This incredible urge is getting too much. You say I'm a freak. But I think yur being too bleak. You can't live without your poses. So keep dancing in the field of roses. Red as blood, my hands are stained. The fire burns, the roses alight. You can't expect me to go down without a fight. I'll keep fighting for you. What's wrong? you look a bit blue. What's wrong do you want to die? Tell the truth now, don't tell a lie. We can do anything you just have to beleive. Whoops I lied please don;t greive. We can run, we can fly but I hat to admit it. Sorry darling there's no magic, not one bit. But the roses are the next best thing. So keep dancing and though it's for nothing. You're as pretty as the flames in the roses. Heart ache. Dont't stop, don't turn. Keep running or you will burn. Would it make you feel better if i promise? I promise not to hurt you if we kiss. Our lips meet and the angels cry. I'm on your cloud in this deep blue sky. We're in this together forever sweetie. From now until forever deeply. So why do we have to wait. You back down, you run away. You're stronger than this just sit back and play. I live your you but you know i'd die for you. And I'd kill for you too. But just so you know theres one thing i wont do. I won't kill you I just cant i'd feel blue. Do we relate? You say your fine but you want my help. I want to save you but you can't yelp. I'll keep praying for you. I'm probably making this up it's true. One day we'll move apart. When that day comes you'll lose your heart. I pray for you in hopes you pray for me. It's my love for you thats a pain you see. Such a drawback, such a pain. But it's a blessing looking beyond the pain. Because love is a heartache. One of us. We burn together in the black flame. Black for death, black for pain. I can't contain the craving. The craving for you that I'm saving. I'm saving for when the hard times are over. But 'till then I'll give you compassion and a four leaf clover. To give you the luck for things to go better. But on the contrary whatever the weather. There's no cure for the pain. And no shelter from the rain. You start with nothing, you got nothing to lose. But beware of the great black cat, or you'll take the cruise. The cruise to hell where the dead man lays. Down below impenetrable by the suns rays. Please come join us. Join me in death you know you want to die. No matter how long you live you still won't fly. I'll send three pure black roses. Stop resisting, the black door never closes. You will be welcomed in death. Baby I love you so please make your last breath. I'm death we both know. But please my dearest it won't blow. It maybe hell but it's no trick. Theres no flames here just some rocks and a stick. We have divine cuisine and eat what we want. There's no rules yet nobody will vaunt. This is a holiday...You live in a trash pit you call home. I know you feel it moving through blood and bone. So baby just be one of us.
You are poison and Burn in Hell are pretty good. You seem very intent on sticking with similar rhythm and using rhyming couplets in all of your poems- you should try experimenting with different rhyme schemes. It'll make things a lot more intresting, trust me. Shooting Star is a bit childish for somebody of your wit with poetry. Nice work, though.
Thanks hun. Right now I'm just experimenting with moods...I write down whatevers in my mood. But yeah I will try different kinds of poetry at some point. I get inspiration from the smallest things (Quite literally...I was staring at the stars suddenly crossed my mind I'd love to see a shooting star, got inspiration, I'm now wrting serious poetry for the first time. Anyway thanks Cariad I'll use your advice to improve in the future ^^. EDIT: Ok since I cant find a style to fit me yet I'l keep with the rhyming couplets and mess with moods some more Heartless Heart of flame, flame of hate. I'm sorry darling, I have no happy fate. Tears of anger, tears of misery. Looking into the eyes of mystery. The brightest of all hearts lies in darkness. The darkest heart lirsin the light of the heartless. Hurry up, draw the line Wake me up without a rhyme. Close the book and end the story. Happy ending Once upon a time I was told. I was told the truth so bold. The handsome princes. And the beautiful princesses. They showed me something. And now I only know one thing. It was a huge lie. One day we will all day. Don't tell me you were mending I know it was pretending. There's no such thing as a happy ending.
Most of them are repeptive they could almost be one giant ppoem...MIX IT UP A LITTLE! That would make this thread so much better! I do like it but twist so its more than just burning roses and broken hearts.
Thanks I'll use that I think. More to life than broken hearts and burning roses In life it seems hopeless. But in truth it's more than broken hearts and burning roses. T shows and sitcoms some truth but more lies. But reality shows you need more than whores to start feeling alive. You see the burning roses all in vain. Sometimes you have to look beyond the flame Too many people these days are non-beleivers. But we don't give up our hopes and dreams like the grievers. Maybe if you let the music take you. You will find the perfect lyrics to save you. A little more rhythm and a little more pulse. And you'll forget the pain, of course. Some will tell you pain is a happy thing. Some will tell you they can't live without da bling. But they're deluded beyond all hope. Their song is a lie, they let go of the rope. If you don't make haste it'll be too late. Hurry or you can't be saved. Just let the music enter your veins.
