Not a single person came to claim her. She was all alone. She didn't want to talk anymore. The tears in her eyes stopped flowing. She needed to remember her name. Tears?? Oh yes, her name had tears.... Ankoku Ikami Namida Chi Maaka. That was her name. It meant, Darkness pain tears blood red. She was only 16. No one told her anything. All they did was stared. She limped all the way to the nearest town, trying to find a hospital for emergency care. She was almost there, a man saw her limping towards the town gate and said something to his friend. She blacked out. "Lady Tsunade, who's this girl?" mumbled a female about 5'4" in height. "I don't know yet. When shes awake and fully healed, we'll have the ANBU talk to her. A man walked into the room with a mask on his face. "Ah, Kakashi, hows Naruto's training going?" This "Tsunade" asked the man. "Hmm, good. He's progressing faster than expected." the man said, his eyes drifting to me. "Who's that girl?" he asked." Don't know yet...."replied Tsunade. The man walked up to her and looked into her eyes. "Well, look who's awake. Now, what's your name?" he questioned, noticing she was awake. "Ankoku." was the word that she mouthed. All of a sudden, a very annoying voice started to ring threw the air. "KAKASHI-SENSEI!!! WHEN ARE GOING TO CONTINUE MY TRAINING?!!" yelled an obnixious blond haired boy. -_-"
Well the title caught my attention, I figured the story your typing would be interesting. I was right. But I have to say, polls are not aloud in Creativity Corner. To give out some points, you should've put some paragraphs seperating them, it'd be a little more easier to read. I can also see that you mispelled one word ( from my view) But, overall I like the story and I'm hoping to see more of it.
:O KOKO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I order you to write more!!! >.< ..........................please?
Okay... in the thread you posted about no one reading your story.. it's bull :/ you've got views and repliers.... CnC It didn't really catch my attention... Try writing more descriptive... The "all-caps" only emphasizes that someone is startled, yelling, etc.. and so does an exclamation mark use the 5 senses when you write, and try to write longer... The title was very catchy, but the story wasn't.... keep trying though
OMG. You people eat me alive. My writing muse is bruised.. T^T anyways. She sat upright in the hospital bed, startled by the noise. The boy walking into the room, followed by another boy and girl. "Shh! Naruto! You might wake someone up!" A girl whisper/yelled in the boy's ear. Ankoku noticed the other boy with his nose in a book. She glared at the loud-mouthed boy. "What's your problem?!" The boy questioned, offended. "Well, you woke her up of course,Naruto!" murmured the girl, pulling at his ear. "OW!" yelped "Naruto". How was Ankoku to get back to sleep now? [Ankoku's POV] (point of view) I had been forced to tag along with kakashi-sensai ALL day....
