Hello I am the Melodious Nocturne Thank you so much to be In this Thread and Read my story If You Like It Then You will be Welcome In this Thread anytime By the Way here's My Story Chapter 1: Bewilderment A Deadly silence Fallen at The world that never was One nobody Who Wield's A Staff Claymore A 15th Member Who was an Orginal Founder Of The Organization And Two nobodies Who Guard's Beside Hime The Founder's Name is XERULES And His Guards name's is IKAZ and Joge One Of Them Weild's 2 Of Riku's Soul eaters and The Other Weild's A Keyblade That Is Forged With Darkness and Light This Must be Our Castle Said Xerules Think They will be Glad to see Us? Said Ikaz Not a chance Said Xerules Hang on He's Coming Said Joge Hm? Notcied Xerussell What do we do? Get him Cant Argue with That and So the Trio Are The one's out to Attack Two Boy's With no hearts Going Back To Their Twilight Home One Wield's 2 Chakrams And Command's Fire With those Weapons And One Who Weild's Two Keyblades and A Boy Who was Once A Hero who Been Turned Into A Heartless Their name's Axel and Roxas Roxas Do you know Why We Exist? Asked Axel Beacause We are the empty Shell's Left Behind By The Heartless when they taken over our Hearts to darkness Said Roxas A Clang Heard From A Distance Who's There!? Shout Axel Summoning his Chakrams Ah Just what we're Looking For: Said Ikaz What Do you Want? And Who are You?! Said Roxas Let me answer That. We Are the Orginal Founder's Of The Organization My name is Joge And This is Ikaz Our Leader Is Xerules a Portal Suddenly Appear's Xerussell I Know that Name Interupped Xemnas.
Reading this was very good, hearing the beginning was well done. All though there are some mistakes, I was kinda confused on when each character was speaking (" " )<- should be used, but still this was a good story. Overall It's very well done, I'm looking forward to more.:)
I Changed Chapter 2 Beacause I Realized The story didnt Sound Right! Chapter 2: Battle "So if it Isnt Xemnas The 2nd Leader of the Organization" Says Xerules "This my Organization and You are not Part of it!" Says Xemnas "If that's How it's Going to Be. Then i shall snuff them all Out!" Says Xerules Xerules Summons a Huge Beam of Light and Darkness Hits Xemnas. Axel's Throws His Chakrams at Xerules. BUT UNFORTUNATLY Xerules Manages to Catch his Chakrams and Throw it Back at him!. "OOF!" As Axel Falls Down as he Got hit by his own weapons! "Hahahaha!!!! How Pathetic! One of your Nobodies is No match for Us! Says Xerules Ikaz Summons Some Sort of Mechanical Nobodies Mixed With Magic "Xemnas! what the Hell Are those Nobodies?!"Asks Roxas "They Look Damned Familliar. More Like A Magitek Armors From Final Fantasy 6" Replied Axel One of the armor's Uses Ice beam and Fire Beam on Xemnas and Axel. Roxas Get's His Oathkeeper and Oblivion. One Uses thunder Beam On him. But Roxas Reflected The Beam And destroyed The 2 Armors. The Trio Xerules, Ikaz and Joge Escapes. "Why Would Our Orginal Founders Attack us Like that? there must be a leak somewhere!" Say's Roxas "Uuugggghhhh" Xemnas and Axel were seriously Injured By the Magitek Beams. Roxas Uses Some of his Power to Portal Xemnas And Axel to The Room Of Recovery in Castle Oblivion End Of Chapter
