this is what i think might happen in kingdom hearts 3. enjoy! Sora had been home for about a week, and is playing with his friends, just like old times. "come on, kairi!" Sora said. "lets go play in the ocean!" "ok" they walked over to the beach to find riku sitting on a rock, staring out to sea. "what is it, riku?" asked kairi "i was just wondering; Did we Really save the world from darkness?" Sora sat down next to him. "gee , i dunno" he said. "i wouldn't worry" said kairi "I'm sure you guys did a great job!" "you're right" said riku "i shouldn't worry." They walked into the shallow water, tryng to find unique shells with their toes, and, as sora put it, "other Nifty things" "does anyone say 'nifty' anymore?" asked riku. they all laughed. They walked further into the ocean, and kairi said she had found a big hole in the ground. "lets go under. We can get a better look that way." suggested sora. They swam under the water and found that the hole was actually an underwater cavern. They swam inside, and thankfully, there wasn't any water in it, so they could breath.They walked further into the cavern, noticing a tunnel leading to somewhere far away on the other side of the tunnel. "whoa!" said riku. "where are we?" kairi asked. " i dunno. but lets go find out!" sora ran towards the tunnel "Come on guys!" he ran into the tunnel, and kairi decided to follow. "I dunno about this, guys" said riku. he thought. "okay. I'll come." they walked a few feet, only to find that where the tunnel started in the cavern was blocked off, like a wall was in front of it. (to be continued. i already have more, but this seemed like a good place to stop)
Suddenly they heard a loud rumbling sound. "what's that?" Asked Kairi, struggling to stand up. about 2 million heartless appeared out of know where. "oh great!" said Riku. "how much more can we take?" Sora and Riku braced for attack, Sora summoned oathkeeper, and Riku summoned Oblivion. "what about me?" kairi asked. Sora saw a pile of rocks in the corner." Unless you can summon your keyblade..." he pointed to the rocks. For the next 5 hours, there where keyblades slashing, rocks flying, and hearts dissapearing. When they were finally done, Sora was exhausted. Sora leaned on the walls. "Get up." said Riku. "we have to keep going. We don't want to be attacked again." "Fine..." Sora said, sad to have to keep walking."wait a minute, i know!" Sora used his drive into fina from, just to fly.Kairi stuck her toungue out at him. "lucky!" she sad, sad that she couldn't drive, though she had just turned 16. They walked a bit more, and came to the end of the tunnel. They reached a completely white room with many doors. "come on!" Sora flew to one of the doors. Suddenly a small mouse came out of it. "hiya!" Said King mickey. Everyone, even Riku was completely taken back. (that's where i'll stop for right now...)
Nice story, very intriguing plot, but the grammar could use just a little bit of work. For instance, this sentence: "I dunno about this, guys" said riku. he thought. "okay. I'll come." Could be: "I dunno about this, guys," said Riku as he contemplated about it. "...Alright, I'll come." A variety of words keep it fresh, and correct punctuation, and making lengthy sentences is good (not run-over sentences though). Make sure that if the dialogue ends with a period, it should have a comma instead, and the 'he' or 'she' afterwards is lower-cased, except for names. And the start of each dialogue should be capitalized. Otherwise, the story is awesome! The plot is really thickening, and I can't wait to see what happens next. :)
Gee thanks! I'll try to get better grammar. I never thought people would like the story this much, and thanks for the rep too. The King smiled. "I guess I should explain what is going on. That letter you got was written in a language I couldn't decipher, and I was hoping you could. All I could make out of the letter was to dig in Radiant Gardens, so i did. All of a sudden, this blinding light appeared, and then I was here, stepping out of that doorway. By the way... what are you guys doing here?" The King explained, and Riku, Sora, and Kairi were very intrigued. " We found a cavern," said Sora, "We entered a unnle at the end of it, and fought too many Heartless to count. When we finally stopped, we walked some more, and we came here." Sora recalled the tale. " Gee," said King Mickey,"That's a real puzzler... Maybe... we should try going through one of the doors." King Mickey pointed to one, and opened it. He stuck his head inside, but could see nothing. Sora walked through it, his friends following his lead. They were in a completely dark realm, with no floor. "Kingdom... Hearts" said Sora, realizing where they were. Sora started supergliding, but was caught off guard by the strange rumbling. "Wha-" he said but was cut off. "Hello, Sora." Said Marluxia on his Nobody ship and Xemnas in his armor simultaneously(sp). " How did..." Sora summoned Oathkeeper." How are you back?!?!?!?!?Tell me!!!!How are you back!!!" "Sora..." said Kairi, falling into the darkness of kingdom hearts. "There's no time for questions..." said Xemnas, with an evil smile on his face. "you want to save kairi, don't you?" said Marluxia. "We'll help you!" said Riku and the King. Riku transformed into dark mode, and mickey summoned his keyblade. Sora ran behind Xemnas at an extremely fast pace. He hit his armor with a bunch of quick jabs, barely denting his armor. Riku went for Marluxia, and flipped onto the platform which marluxia was standing on. "so..." he said. "the lord of castle Oblivion." said Riku, summoning way to dawn. He tried to hack at Marluxia's head, but Marluxia only blocked it with his scythe. "Hello, Riku" said Marluxia... (well, that's the end of the chapter. what's gonna happen next?I dunno. I'm making this up as i go along. Remember, it's gonna be long due to the fact that it's a whole 'nother game.
Roxas makes a stand Sora!Let me take over! said Roxas, in Sora's mind. I wanna fight Xemnas!You've fought enough, all those heartless. "Wait, wait, wait!" said Sora, "You can take over my body?" Yeah.Watch Roxas appeared, leaving Sora in his mind."Just stay there until I'm done." Roxas said.'' You mean i can't do anything?!?!?!?!?Roxas let me- Roxas blocked Sora out of his mind.He jumped onto Xemnas's armor. "Long time no see, Roxas." Xemnas said, calmly."Why did you turn against us?The organization could have been unstoppable with a keyblade master!" "Yeah, well...." Roxas said, "Sitting around in a black cloak wondering why I was the keyblade master while occasionly carrying around Xigbar's stuff because he 'had a gun' doesn't really interest me.I'd much rather kick your--" Xemnas knocked Roxas off of his armor with his gigantic sized armored hand."You insolent fool!You will join me or die!" Xemnas tried to crush Roxas with his hand, but Roxas quickly dodged out of the way. ~~~ Sora ran around in Roxas's mind. "What a jerk!" Sora thought out loud. "Can't believe he locked me in his mind!" He came upon a figure that looked like... Olette. "Hello... Have you seen Roxas?" she asked. "I wanted to give him a kiss. He's just soo yummy!" Sora ran away as fast as he could. EWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! he thought. Roxas has a crush on Olette!I thought he was supposed to like Namine! (that's the end of this chapter.The next one will come in a few days.Also, sorry for double-posting. I didn't realize i did until I posted it, and I don't know how to edit these posts into 1)
I'm working on a new chapter. Even though i make it up as I go along, I still need to plan out the basic layout of it.It'll probably be up by tomorrow. here it is: ~~~ Riku was having fun fighting Marluxia. he is sooo easy! he thought. Marluxia shot some flowers at Riku, but he easily dodged them. He had an idea to beat Marluxia... "Haha!Is that the best you can do?" he yelled. "You're a fool to taunt me!Don't you know I'm the LORD of Castle Oblivion?"said Marluxia. "Oh really?I thought you were the lord of PINK!I mean, what's up with your pink hair?And your pink scythe!I mean, are you a GAY boy, or a girl?!" yelled Riku, clearly loving this. "Who are you to talk?Your hair isn't exactly the manliest in all the worlds!" Marluxia shot back. Riku looked down at his hair, while Marluxia was glad to finally have the upper hand. Without Riku noticing, Marluxia shot some homing flower daggers at him."Well...Uh..-" stammered Riku, but he got hit in the heart with the flowers.He suffered a fatal wound to his heart, and fell unconscious, fell off the giagantic nobody ship into nothingness...and was dead.or is he? ~~~ Roxas noticed Riku falling, and bleeding, and immediately let Sora take control."Sora, look!" he shouted, and Sora flew down to try to catch Riku. "I can't let my two best friends fall into Kingdom Hearts.I have to save them!" Sora said to Roxas. "But Sora, remember what Marluxia said about Kairi?If you wanna save her, you have to defeat them first!" Said Roxas, but Sora wasn't listening.He flew onward. ~~~ Namine woke up in Kairi's mind, noticing Kairi was asleep."Kairi wake up!You're falling!" but Kairi didn't wake up."KAiRI!" Namine shouted and she took over her body. Kairi woke up in Namine's mind, wondering why she was here. "Na...Namine, what's going on?Why are we falling?Why is it dar-" But Kairi realised what was happening. "We're in Kingdom Hearts, aren't we?" Namine nodded. "We have to do something about us falling!" Namine said, but it was too late. They hit the ground, and wondered where they were. They looked around, and were in Twilight Town. "Why are we here?" Kairi asked retoricly. (that's it for now. Keeps you wondering, doesn't it?)
