CHAPTER ONE Darkness takes over five years later after Sora and Riku kill Xemneas and give peace to the worlds in that time a war has begun. Sora must fight Xehoadrt so the worlds won't fall to darkness but Xehonort was a step ahead and set darkness around the world it has taken over many world and few are left. Chapter Two The new Keyblade wealders but their five wealders who don't know their powers. Their names are Rudy, Joseph, Robert and Estaban Chapter Three - Fates Sealed Rudy jumped off the tree and said tonight we leave to the keyblade graveyard to help Sora! He said load Robert said no way right now! sure said Joseph. Estaban is quiet and then says alright let's go! And they left unaware of there fates. If this is good so far give me ex and i will right more by Rudy Archuleta
ok, im not even sure if this is, well it, or if this is just an outline. if this is the actual story... well, i cant really say what i want to say without destroying your creative spirit. lets just leave it at that. if its an outline, this is a neat idea, but it needs serious expanding. i would suggest reading some of the other fanfics on the site, like The Flurry: Axel's Story, KH: Nobodes Become Somebodies or ~Destiny Unlocked~. all great fanfics. heck, read mine, Despair Village. at least its grammatically correct. also, you really need to watch your spelling. i counted at least 8 mistakes. Xemnas is spelled Xemnas, Xehanort is spelled Xehanort, wielders is spelled wielders. use quotation marks ("...") when people are speaking. use periods more often. you keep doing run-on sentences. why is Chapter 3 the only one with a title? also, in Chapter 2, you said there were 5 Keyblade Wielders who didn't know their own powers, then you only give 4 names. and how did these 4 (5?) Wielders know about Sora? as i said, neat idea, but it needs ALOT more detail, ALOT more spellchecking. i would suggest giving your characters more detail. what do they look like, what are their personalities like, what are their fighting styles, what do their Keybaldes look like? if you can expand this, it could become one of the great ones. could. no guarantees.
