Black. That was the only thing in the boy’s view. Any being that might exist in this world was shut out indefinitely. Not only from sight, but every other sense was numb- a hollow void in his brain being the one thing he could mentally process. He could not wrap his mind around the overwhelming sensation growing speedily and steadily, an emotion perhaps? One not even he had not experienced in his past however-many years he’d been trapped in the dark space that still surrounded his physical and mental body. He winced as he became dully aware of what the anomaly was: pain. It must have been decades since he had felt it so sharply and clearly. It filled not only his mind, but his entire being, as he screamed. For once in his life the skull shattering feeling was the single thing that made sense in the universe. The boy shrieked as he uncovered his eyes and saw what was causing him such torture. No longer could his complexly simple mind comprehend what he witnessed. 'What is this?!?!' He mentally screamed. Sora? A lisped voice called. Be careful, he still has to recover. Once he is accustomed to the light again, his memories will begin to flood back. He will be in more pain then, even compared to what he is experiencing now. Another voice stated matter-of-factly. This voice was different though; not only was it feminine and soft, but melodic and strange. "A-hyuck, is there any way we can prefent it?" Different again, this time southern sounding almost with over its use of slangs. "PREVENT, Goofy, you idiot!" As the pain drifted away, the boy chanced opening his eyes again. This time, the sky-blue colored sight organs stunned him and his head swam as he began processing the room in which he was stationed. The walls were white, as was the floor. Also on the floor were light blue patterns, symbolizing whatever they symbolized and entrancing him as he stared at them. "Sora, are you okay?" The third voice questioned. The boy looked up at the three characters standing before him. A duck… A dog… and a girl were all stood in front of him. The duck and dog were wearing clothes, oddly enough, and also held weapons. The girl could have worn the world’s ugliest pantsuit for all he cared and she would still be the most beautiful person on earth. "Who is Sora?" He asked. "And…who’re you?" "Um, Sora, we’re your friends! Don’t you remember us?" The lisped animal questioned him. "No…. should I? I’m pretty sure that I’ve never seen you before." The boy told them, confused as to why his answer should be any different. ~~~~~ So, yeah. Should I try to continue this or what?
I think it sounds very interesting! That's very well done writing. I just have one complaint...USE QUOTATION MARKS! That would make it all so much easier to understand.
I really like this! But I agree, use quotation marks! I like that part for some reason, it made me smile. (:
Yes, continue writing this, most definitely. You could take this thing a lot further. Only one thing I want to bring up, actually...two. One, please use one more line break. I hate it when people have just one. =( And two, could you use a different color or font? It made it hard for me to read for some reason. =/ Other than those few things, good job! Can't wait to keep reading.
No, Sora was speaking with Namine and the two animals were... you know. The reason why will be reavealed later.
Hmm.....seems to me that this is a CoM related story. It's good so far, normally I wouldn't read fics, but this one is pretty good, fics should be long enough to be interesting and short enough not to be tedious; I think your fic did that. I suggest you keep writting it's good , short and sweet ^_^
Do watch the spam you guys. Sumi,that was very good.Great discription.The only problem,the font and color.It kind of hurt my eyes so please do change it.Other than that,please continue.
And now, for two sentences that DO have to do with the story! The boy looked to the blond girl impatiently, as he tried desperately to grab hold of his situation. Where was he? How could he get to the memories he could feel, nestled deep inside his heart- and why were they so important?
