Yea...so I got kinda bored and decided to write about something... Chapter 0 Part 1: Prolouge-Fate... "Hang in there Riku!" Sora exclaimed as he dragged his friend into a cave. A trail of blood streamed from his friend's right leg as Riku gasped heavily for air. His hair was dishoveled with his own red blood and his face was dirt covered. "Sorry Sora..." He said weakly. "This isn't the time..." Sora replied as he took off his jacket and tore it into long strips. Riku let out a scream of pain as blood bursted from his leg once again. Sora knew the condition of his friend and frantically tied the strips together. He grabbed a pack of non-injectable morphine and healing suave-a new invention, and smeared it onto the wound. Then he wrapped the cloth around the leg, forming a temporary cast. "I'm...starting to...feel cold..." Riku spoke weakly. "NO. Riku, say no more. You'll get better, I promise." Sora asserted his friend as he frantically turned around to watch for enemies while attending care for Riku's wound. Sora tucked the end of the cloth into the cast and summoned his keyblade. "Curaga." He mumbled as he focused the spell's power onto the wound. The bleeding slowed down as the medicine began to swell in. "There, this should last for a while." Sora stated. A small grin appeared on Riku's face as his breathing got harder. "Heh...so like you Sora..." A confused look on Sora face appeared as Riku rolled up his sleeve. His entire upper arm was green...and the color slowly made it's way to the elbows. "This is..." "Yeah..." Riku jumped in. "It's the Virus poison. This slowly makes it way throughout the body, eventually destroying all internal organs. At this rate, I won't last for another 5 minutes." "No...Riku...you can't..." Sora replied as his eyes grew watery. "Heh...I told you to leave me out there...I probably would've stall a few lines long enough for you to leave...But it's just like you...to care for your friends..." Riku vomited a mouthful of blood onto his friend. "But...it looks like...you're on your own now..." Sora heard sounds from behind and turn his head back. He saw a horde of enemies approach the cave, ready to finish off their prey. "N-NO! They'll pay!" Sora screamed as he dashed towards the dark creatures. Riku look at his right hand. *Looks like I still have a little of energy left...* A smile came up on his face. "Sora...Make a run for the exit..." Riku uttered as Sora stopped his sprint. "But!..." "Don't worry...I'll be fine..." Riku smirked as he launched a large fiagra blast at the creatures. Immediately, they shift their attention on the injured keyblader and approached Sora's friend. Before Sora could react, Riku shot his final blast toward the cave ceiling, causing a huge rock slide that destroyed the front group. "RIKU!" Sora exclaimed as he dashed for his friend, disregarding the fissure. "You moron...GO!" Riku replied as he infused his keyblade with the magnega spell and threw it at Sora. The force sent Sora flying out of the cave right before it crumbled onto him. Within seconds, the cave was covered in bolders and everything in it had died. "NO, RIKU!!" Sora screamed as he bashed on the rocks, attempting to return back into the cave. Before he got very far, a firing squad spotted Sora and prepared for fire. Sora detected their presence and dashed for the forest that resided nearby. The creatures chased after their target but Sora had disappeared into the thick woods. ******** After ten minutes of running, he reached a huge ravine. Before he made his next move, he saw the enemies flying his ship. He realized without Riku's help, it was best to retreat back home. He summoned his keyblade and with precision, shot a fiagra blast. The attack didn't harm the ship but got their attention. They descended the ship towards the keyblader's direction at high speed. Little did they know, the roof door was still open as Sora saw his opportunity to hijack the plane. When they got within distance, Sora climbed a tall redwood and jumped from the top. He slipped through the door and began liberating the 3 creatures piloting the ship. "That's the last of it..." Sora mumbled as he landed his ship and tossed the unwanted visitors out of the ship. Without hesitation, he put the gear into full throttle and ascended into space. The ride was a lengthy 3 hour between the battle field and Destiny Islands. Sora, concerned about his home, sped to maximum speed towards his destination... "Why Riku...why..." A tear dropped from his eye... Yea...it might sound a bit confusing now. But things will get clarified once I think of something... :sweat:
that is definitely....different. You've got all the elements in place to lure readers, a death of a main character in the prologue, a mysterious virus, a new creature. I'd like there to be more.
Well there was nothing bad about this. The title caught my eyes attention, when reading this I can imagine all this happening. The was surely a good prolouge.:) I'm looking forward to read more of this story.
O.o, Why did Riku have to die? Why, why, why! Sora should die! You know how much storys I've read that Riku died in? A LOT!
Why? Why do the cool characters die? *crying* This reminds me of Zack's death in Crisis Core so much it isn't funny. Riku... WHY DID YOU HAVE TO LEAVE! Now Roxas will have to take over as coolest character in Kingdom Hearts! WAAAAAAAAHHHHH!
Amazing It's the first time that I've read, that Riku, well dies. Cliffhanger... very good one. Now I want to read More. lol WRITE!
I definitely say that you continue this. Riku dying....I took it harder than I could've imagined. It was sad, which is bonus points for you...because, I imagine, that's the type of reaction you were looking for. Although, some readers are a little angry about it. Don't worry, though. He didn't really die!! With a Virus, new enemies and obviously a new world along with a new journey, this is going to be good. The only complaint I have is to make another line break when a character speaks. One space annoys the crap outta me. -Kairi
O_O I really never expected this. Moving on, I have some gd news and bad news. Bad News: I wrote Part 2 on paper as a draft. Unfortunately, I lost it while I was clearing my school binder and I completely forgot the plot. Also, if things don't go well, (with homework and stuff) I might not finish rewriting the second part until the beginning of June. Good News: Although I don't remember the plot, I didn't think very highly of it to be honest. So this'll give me a chance to rewrite things and make it look better. And if things Do go well, expected the second part between the end of this week and somewhere in next week. That is all. Thank you all for your comments.
