Kill

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  1. Sadden Blood Warrior Lost in the mind! Help help me god!!!!! Their afte

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    Killing out of love

    Rage

    Anger

    Was it

    Worth it?



    I really don’t know

    Was it over passion

    Desire

    Honor

    Was it all worth it



    Now you’ll go to hell

    Burning in flames

    While the devil eats your soul

    While you yell for help

    No one can hear you...



    Yell all you want

    It doesn’t really matter

    You’ll be in blood

    Body parts everywhere

    Death



    Dispair

    Do you care?

    I don’t care if you do

    You got what came to you

    Justice



    Only thing to describe it

    Fustrating

    Devisation

    Look at your eyes

    You can’t belive what you did



    Your alone

    Just like me

    Both need to stand up to the world

    The anger is growing

    The devil controls us



    Shout at the world

    Call apon your demons

    Keep yourself out

    All alone

    Go for the kill

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  2. KnightReaper Traverse Town Homebody

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    Rather exhilarating to read and makes my heart pump fast while reading it.
     
  3. Desaray Traverse Town Homebody

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    =slowly tilts head while reading and eventually falls of chair=

    =blink=blink=

    AWESOME!!! XD
     
  4. Falling Star Gummi Ship Junkie

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    Very descriptive and frightning! Its a really good poem but you might want to think about punctuation. Like periodes, because I dont see any in here....
     
  5. Sadden Blood Warrior Lost in the mind! Help help me god!!!!! Their afte

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    Accaully, in a poem you don't need periods just ! and ? thats about the only ones you use...
     
  6. T3F Chaser

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    I love it! It's really...um...Words can't describe how amazing it is! you're a really good writer!
     
  7. Sadden Blood Warrior Lost in the mind! Help help me god!!!!! Their afte

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    Thanks :D, to tell you the truth this is my first poem after i stopped writing for 3 months