just a work in progress wht do some of you think?

Always all alone
never felt alive
staring through the dark
dare we even try

Run away
Never come back again
Scream and hide
Just let this all wash over you
Bleed and sigh
this same feeling over and over again
suicide

She was never alone
I stood by her side
looking at her heart
staring though her eyes

Run away
Never come back again
Scream and hide
Just let this all wash over you
Bleed and sigh
this same feeling over and over again
suicide



ya thats all im not sure where im going with it
is it worth continuing with?

V

 

Hmmm. Depends.

Is it just a poem? Or is it a song?
If it's a poem, I think if you used grammar and placed some commas in, it would help the feeling of the poem and it would also help the mood.
If it's a song, I think its a good idea for a one. If you wrote more of it, I'm sure it would sound excellent.

I think you should continue a little more :3

 

like i said im still not sure what i want it to be yet