Flow sick Like critical condition So sick It’ll need a new edition Originality You can’t copy If you did It would turn out sloppy So watch me But you cannot see Unlike the last verse I have reversed This is the inverse Of your universe Organized confusion Oh so amusing The words I am using Will leave your blood oozing No points; you’re losing I could beat you while I’m snoozing But my eyes are wide open And you are just hoping not emo, No moping Go so hard I’ll leave your ears broken Bloody shirt soakin And now I have spoken Wrote it while listening to the shoot me down instrumental, getting ready to record it. Second of three verses.
I know **** all about rap, but it all looks awesome except for the line "It would turn out sloppy" which just seems kind of...lame. All the other endings seem effective but the word sloppy just seems to fail >.>
You have the talent to really tickle ears with an extreeme word flow that seems to come together very nicely. I know many people do not think that being able to rhyme and make words flow in a rap-style is a 'talent', but let me tell you, that is a very precious gift and you have it. Please never stop bringing these on. You are simply amazing.
Lol sloppy is the only thing I could think of xD Thank you very much, and I'm not stopping any time soon.
