Just a Little Longer

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  1. Donaut Banned

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    Desolation,
    Wide open space,
    Between the trees and me,
    Emptiness and me,
    Confusion and decisions,
    Feelings hard to define,
    And I say to myself,
    Just a little longer,

    Coldness seeps
    Its way in,
    I am falling deeper,
    Into what I fear most,
    As I reach out,
    There is nothing there,
    As possible there was something once,
    Only to be gone,
    And I say to myself,
    Just a little longer,

    The sun drops,
    The last inch of light falls,
    The squirrels more likely to be huddled up,
    But not me,
    Something I never possessed,
    And I say to myself,
    Just a little longer,

    Then the sun has gone,
    Darkness spreads its wings over me,
    I see nothing so no one sees me,
    Feeling of bitterness only,
    And I say to myself,
    Just a little longer,

    An Owl peers down,
    With question in her eyes,
    She doesn't have a hope,
    In helping me,
    As she doesn't see my pain,
    Spreads her wings,
    Passes me by,
    And I say to myself,
    Just a little longer,

    The soft earth,
    Seems the only thing holding me up,
    Even then I could slip,
    And wondering takes me,
    To why and how I got here,
    Without even knowing it,
    Yet no one notices,
    As they didn't see before,
    So I say to myself,
    Just a little longer,

    Shimmering in the darkness,
    I see two moons,
    Reflecting off a stream of thoughts,
    Ongoing forever more,
    Along a rocky road,
    Slowly giving in to finding a way out,
    I take the plunge under the river,
    Then the wind carries a whisper,
    Gently on a breeze,
    'Just a little longer.'
     
  2. Nailpolish <3 Hollow Bastion Committee

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    Its really good. I love it =] It has a lot of emotion.
     
  3. Peyton Goddess Of Love ♥

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    Wow, this remind me of myself when I do championships. That I have to go just a little longer.
    Again, I like it. You're good with the modern type of poems.
    Even though they don't have rhymes they are beautiful.
     
  4. Donaut Banned

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    I really am enjoying the positive feedback that you people send me. Thank you. =D
     
  5. Nymph of Destiny Chaser

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    Wow...this poem...it's wonderful! It just sounds so deep...it reminds me of one of my poems actually. lol And it's nice and long too. :) Great job! :glomp:
     
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