I am alone in this world

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  1. Laplace TSUKI NO SHIHAI

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    I am a memory that is going to be forgetted

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    Nobody wants me here
    Everybody wants me to leave
    I will ovey them
    Because I even hate myself

    I question all that I have done
    Is my fault? But I can´t change what I did before
    If they want me to leave, then I won´t say "No"
    Is the better for them, who will ever care for me?

    Everything is erazed now
    Everything dies and fades
    I will dissapear too
    I have been too rough?

    I am just like a memory
    Just I fade in oblivion
    Nobody wants to remember me
    Anyways I don´t deserve it

    What this means?
    Why everybody hates me!?
    What I did, I deserve this!?
    Is my punishment for nothing

    My heart is arrowed in fire
    Fire to soon consume it
    Nobody helps me to put out the flames
    So alone I will die

    Everything in now blurred and torn
    I shall die now
    I won´t stop this
    Because is my punishment for nothing

    Nobody wants me anyways
    And too I hate myself
    So I will make everybody happy
    Happy with my death

    I remember everything a last time
    I do it before die
    I remember how painful is my life
    I want that the flames kill me now

    I feel my heart being consumed in fire
    That this fire doesn´t kills me painfully
    I want a quick death
    Because everyone wants to forget me

    Before I die
    I want to say "Sorry"
    For everything that I had done
    But I don´t deserve another chance
    ***************************​


    Do you ever feel like nobody wants you alive? I feel that lots of times, and...

    ^This is true^
    ^This too is true^

    And I know, the title is the same of another of my poems, I didn´t noticed that.
     
  2. White_Rook Looser than a wizard's sleeve.

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    You should try getting out of this cliche rut. It's good to write poems based on your feelings, but not all the time and especially when you're usually in an angst ridden state. Try working with something more abstract. Use a thesaurus and search for other concepts. Try making a story out of it.
     
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