Her

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  1. Sadden Blood Warrior Lost in the mind! Help help me god!!!!! Their afte

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    Her eyes
    Her smile
    Her laugh
    Would make anyone happy
    happier than anyone you've ever seen...

    Your life was useless
    Until she came into the picture
    Happiness
    Enjoyment
    What a feeling...

    First time you've smilled in a while
    A smile
    What is it?
    I really don't know
    Just a rush of happiness?

    A simple jesture
    To show you care
    Something you both can share
    Him
    Her...

    Love her
    Care for her
    Keep her with you
    Keep her happy
    Don't ever leave her...

    She smiles
    You smile
    You both hug
    Until you get the nerve
    Now you kiss...

    Are you happy
    Is she happy?
    You both smile at eachother
    Both thinking of eachother already
    Then you both leave...

    You talk later on
    She's laughing
    Your laughing
    You really care
    And she really cares...

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    Just a poem I wrote...
     
  2. {Vena_Sera}_ The Anti{Saint} King's Apprentice

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    wow i like it, the funny thing is that the title stood out to me it is "Her" just simply the onw repetitive word but speaking so much. I thought it was good but also one girl did come into my life and i like her. that stood out to me. ONE thing to say is to keep writing and also write what you wanta to.
     
  3. Aura Goddess

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    Wow.That was very good.Keep it up.Keep writing :)
     
  4. Sumi suicidé

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    That's really good! dng..i wish I could write good poetry..
     
  5. {Vena_Sera}_ The Anti{Saint} King's Apprentice

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    sasumi i think you can write good poetry
     
  6. {feel.the.wrath} Hollow Bastion Committee

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    I love it! I can write, but just not poetry. Not my type of writing. But that was amazing!
     
  7. Sadden Blood Warrior Lost in the mind! Help help me god!!!!! Their afte

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    THanks for the comments :)