Her Prince

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  1. Asylum Destiny Islands Resident

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    My very first fan fiction so be as mean as you like XD.
    I hope you like it, never really wrote a story before but it seems there's nothing to now a days...

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    Chapter 1
    Home

    Red haired, blue eyed, peach skinned, slim, and kind Princess Kairi leaned against her windowsill.
    It was a normal day, a regular day. Kairi had woken up, dressed in one of my many outfits, walked to her father room and kissed him good mourning, grabbed a apple and ran to her favorite rooms of the castle.
    The wind whipped passed her light skinned face as Kairi took another bite into the fruit. She chewed leisurely on the piece in her mouth. Her red locks followed the blow while she ate.
    Yup, just another day normal, regular day in Hollow Bastion.
    Kairi looked down, only to see people working about the in the castle.
    "They look happy," Kairi mumbled to herself.
    She looked back at her apple and realized she had finished it off.
    "Guess I'll go see him."

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    "Where's Riku?" Sora muttered to himself. He wiped sweat from his forehead with the back of his gloved hand. As usual, it was an average day as Hollow Bastion. Sora was waiting for Riku to appear out of now where as he always did in the Marketplace.
    Sora sighed and threw his hands behind his head of spiky brown hair, crossed his legs, and stared up at the sky.
    The soft blue clouds floated slowly in the air, blocking some the heat from the sun. Just an ordinary day.
    "Sora."
    The brunette whirled around at the sound of his name. He grinned when he saw a pretty red head dressed in pink and white smile. "Hi Kairi, what's up?"
    "Nothing much," Kairi smiled. "Just decided to see what you and Riku are doing? ... Where is Riku?"
    "Who knows. This is his daily routine," Sora explained. "He always makes sure I'm not looking and ten pops out of now where acting all cool... Stupid Riku."
    Kairi giggled at Sora's fuming. "I'm sure you'll catch him eventually."
    "Yeah," Sora smiled. "Hopefully eventually is today."
    "So what do you do while you wait?"
    "Nothing."
    "Nothing?"
    "Nothing."
    "Oh," Kairi muttered. "You really need a hobby."
    Sora rolled his playfully, "Anything new at castle?"
    "Nope," Kairi said. "Well, Namine's engaged."

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    Well that's the first chapter (Yeah, I know it's short and VERY different from the actually Kingdom Hearts Story but isn't that what fanfictions are about XD). I hope you enjoyed it.
     
  2. P E A N U T ~*~Never Surrender~*~

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    Yes, it was VERY short. In the future, I recommend you make it longer. It's harder to stay interested in a fanfic where the chapters are so short. Also, be sure to check your grammer. I saw a few spelling mistakes in there.
     
  3. zexykupo Gummi Ship Junkie

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    A couple of spelling mistakes, but the story is okay, for a starter.