Gotta get away

Discussion in 'Archives' started by Sumi, Oct 22, 2008.

  1. Sumi suicidé

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    Too smart to be thought of this way
    Too smart, can't live another day
    Gotta get outta this place
    I'm wasting away
    Gotta get it done somehow,
    Gotta get it done right now
    Get far away from here
    Somewhere up in the clouds
    Or down in the ground
    I don't really care now
    Everybody get out
    I'm gonna shout
    Screamin' loud
    Can't hear me now
    I'm done with this show
    Done with playin' in the snow
    And runnin' through the flowers
    Messin' with dumb powers
    Fog and showers
    Natural disasters
    Sun and moon
    Don't shine anymore
    Don't ruin my floor
    The brand new house
    The brand new spouse
    Thoughts driftin' away
    Gotta get away
    From this place
     
  2. Mexony Hollow Bastion Committee

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    That was truly good. I really liked it...good job. With it's word I see some images in my head...use of imagination. Keep it up..looking forward to more of your catchy work.
     
  3. Juicy Chaser

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    That was pretty impressive. Reading it aloud, it flows very well :3

    I love the use of repitition. Its like the icing on the already deliscious cake <3
     
  4. Dem-demmly Merlin's Housekeeper

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    I liked how it flowed as well and it had a great meaning to it as well.
     
  5. Maka Albarn It's called love

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    Pretty impressive. The use of words makes it snappy and awesomey! Keep up the good work. :D
     
  6. Chevalier Crystal Princess

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    Wow..that is a very strong poem

    and it's one of the best ways to vent.
     
  7. Sumi suicidé

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    thanks peeps!