CnC please. I don't know if this will be a good poem or not, but... Hope you guys like it. When the clouds blot the sun; Turn on the lights. If I have trouble sleeping; I Glance out at the moon. I wander around just to look; For that comet in the night. But as I run through the night; A sudden darkness takes over. One which can not be seen; Nor can it be heard from the peaks. But one of absoulte trannquility; The one of fallen night. I want to call this my place; Though I have much fear of that; Once I find my place; I'm just another star in the sky.
I REALLY liked it. Short but still touching. You kind of used ";" a lot though xD. Other than that...wow!
Very pretty, and touching. I feel like I can relate to that poem. <3 Only thing is, try not to use too many puncutations in a poem.
Wow... that was so nicely put. You have great talent. I'm not going to critize because... uh... that's already been done. :D Nicely done.
It was well written and you have used good description but the flow just wasn't there for me.. I didn't really connect with it. To me it didn't really tell me a story.. which most good poems do.
