Eclipse

Eclipse

Pale face up in the sky,
You shine down this night,
You are an ever watchful eye,
Usually bright white.

But on this night my dear friend, moon,
A dark and eerie carmine,
While you are here this night in June,
That colour is your moonshine.

And almost as if the sun,
Has stabbed you in the heart,
And has stalked off, its vile deed done,
Leaving you to bleed and smart.

And though crimson is not your colour,
I like it in a way,
Even though it is duller,
Than the light of day.

I think the colour suits you,
In this ecliptic night,
It lends a certain abeyance to,
This good midsummer night.
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What do you think. It's about a total lunar eclipse.

 

Good job.

I like the big text XD

I like the third verse the best.
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yea. I like the fact that I portrayed the sun, mother of earth and giver of life and a heartless b****.

I even made up a word. ecliptic, at least I don't think it's a word.

 

Ooh nice...love the large text, word choices, and how everything just flows together. I especially loved the part "A dark and eerie carmine"...and don't worry, ecliptic is a word. lol Anyway, great job! So were you thinking of a lunar eclipse that inspired this, or were you just looking for a subject to write about?​

 

Good job, and I like the large text ^^.

 

there was a lunar eclipse showing in my area in June and I though like 6 months later "Hey why don't I white a peom in rhyming couplets of Iambic Pentameter about it !!!"

Thank for the comments btw.

 

Cool! I lke the 3rd verse!

 

thnx RR13 ^_^