Despair(a poem)

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  1. nobodynerd100 Traverse Town Homebody

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    Here is a poem that I wrote in school

    I'm trapped in this dispair
    Somewhere far away
    No one seems to care
    They just push me out of the way

    So I'm all alone
    Seeing no one in sight
    That I can be with someone
    That I can tell them my plight
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    Please tell me if you like it or not and give suggestions
     
    nobodynerd100, Nov 2, 2008
    nobodynerd100, Nov 2, 2008
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  2. Sumi suicidé

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    Nice, but read over it and correct some of your grammar.
     
    Sumi, Nov 2, 2008
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