You don't always fit in, With the crowd or with friends, Some say that you're right, While others say that you've sinned, Some days your friends turn into foes, Appearing right out of the blue, But no matter which they may be, They both are gunning for you, Because you tried to do your best, At who you've chosen to be, Because you dared to be different, You wanted to be able to say 'I am me', Now the question of 'who is really who' to you, Is hanging up in the air, While those you know are against you are determined, To make sure you're not spared, You know you're doing the right thing, Even with all the pain that's been spent, But there are times, even days, When you can't figure out why everyone hates the fact that, You dared to be different. Something I needed to get off my chest for awhile now. Sorry if it looks a little weird, it was originally going to be a song.
*CLAP* AMAZING! I like the rhyming scheme and the flow. Mostly the topic and emotion you put into it. I'd like to see more work from you ^^
Wow. that perfectly describes me, except, nobody says i'm right. lol. Anyways, awesome poetry, i could not do better, and keep goin on! ^_^ =(>.<)= (_ _)_/ DEMENTED KITTY CAT
I had a bit of problem with the flow... but it might've just been the way I read it *shrugs* anyways, I like it! it's a great poem! And this is really your first try? O_o Seems more like you've been practicing forever! It's really good! ^.^ I'd like to see more from ya, too :P
Yeah, as I said earlier, this was supposed to be a song originally (not sure if that makes much difference). I didn't really know how to make it flow correctly. I had a hard time with some of the rhymes, so trying to get it to do that was a challenge. I'll think about whether or not I'll make another poem.
Not bad, darkcloud. Not bad at all. I can relate though. Tough times we must go through. The flow was the only problem for me, but (considering what you posted above) it's not that big of a deal. Good job. Perhaps another? -Kairi
