Traditional Art Character pictures for my story :v

Yeah, I've written a 7501 word chapter for my story I've began to write.
here is the fraction of the original chapter I posted up. :v

This is the main character, wolfe:

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I drew this so quickly, I doubt I got any of it right. I was going out, and waiting for my taxi to arrive at the house, and it was late. So, to cure my boredom, I drew this.
I might post a better one up soon.

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Here is the second picture of Wolfe. This is based on the idea of the football scene, when the ball is allegedly 'passed' to her, and ends up repeatedly bouncing off of her head. People are approaching her on this, and I tried to get the "oshit" expression pasted upon her face.
Oh, and please ignore my scribbled writing, and the panda in the bottom corner. It's from my awesome notebook xD

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Again, ignore Mr. Panda and the writing. It's just holding his personality traits and name and such. Nothing that will make you jump with glee.
Well, this is Jet. He comes into the story in abouuuuttt.....the 10th chapter. Yes, I know, I plan ahead a lot.
This picture probably took me the longest. Bare in mind that it was 2am, I couldn't sleep and I decided to plan and draw. :v Aren't I lovely.


Well, I would appreciate comments so much, and would like to know where the hell I went wrong with these people xD

For the record, I used:
mechanical pencils, (4B,5B,3H)
Sharpie markers (for the clothes)
Deco colour markers (for Jet's hair)
PROMarkers for the skin tones and skin shading in areas.
Black Gel pen for the wet look on the hair, and easy of freehand styling.

Thanks for reading and viewing my pretties, I hope you can all comment <3

~ Sparkey<3

 

*is laughing at the panda* :v

Well...first reaction. I didn't know whether Wolfe was a boy or girl. Her face seems quite manly and angular (never spelt that word before >>) and only upon reading did I realise she was a girl (the chest was too flat imo for me to be certain she was a lady). Why has her hair changed color between the two pictures? Im curious o:

In general, the heads are too big for the bodies and in the last one he has the world's longest face xD

You've drawn the clothes well though, I like the first and last character's attire.

You also should be careful when drawing hands holding things (e.g the ball), it looks like she isn't gripping it as you cant see her fingers.

<3

 

I agree with Obsessed. The faces are way too big, and wolf seems a bit out of proportion. It looks like you can draw pretty well. I'm just curious...where can I get a notebook that has a cartoon in it like that!?

Pretty decent job, just continue writing....please?