My heart longs for the man of my dreams, But I know deep down I may not get my wish... Bruises cover my arms.... An emotional storm breaks my heart's charms.... I feel the rain pour down upon my head... My once cheerful spirits are long dead.... All I want is one guy to see threw my hard core.... Someone who will not see me as another one to ignore.... Someone who stands out.... Cruelty is something he can be without..... One guy, I know for sure..... Will be different from the rest... And love me for who I am..... And will genuinely care for me..... -KTW There are hearts that once they break they can easily be fixed, and hearts that once they break, they can never be mended.
Wow this really touched me, you have no idea.. I can really feel the emotion here. I don't like the periods at the end like that It makes your work look sloppy. But it's good. 8D
Amazing. I love the emotion you put in the poem. But I agree with Skittles. Remover the periods so it looks better. Great job. =3
Great free verse. It doesnt really matter if theres too many periods. I like how you put the emotion into it. Sadness and despair makes the best inspiration.
Very nice work here; it's seriously just oozing with emotion. I do agree with Skittles on the periods though, you might consider taking them out.
