Broken Savior

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  1. The Fuk? Dead

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    Poetry combined with hip-hop. A little bit more straight forward, but still using literary elements.

    Same gun from day one, it’s hard to pull it
    Same look then, except for one departed bullet
    Different situation, expected consequences
    Duckin’ and dodging life, oh yeah and not to mention,
    Mental, the stability’s all up in the air
    Plus line might be crossed between what’s wrong and fair
    Knowin’ what’s gone’s a longer scare, the big
    Mistake was to act out and stop and stare
    Thinkin’ back things used to be so loose and clean
    But this nightmare can seem just like a lucid dream
    It’s hard to believe something like this was achieved
    Payback wasn’t that great, the victory teased
    And told it was all ya need, I guess not
    The questions, who really deserves to get shot?
    Doesn’t it the make ya the same? to react dumb?
    That scumbag you hate, then you turn into that scum
    Just to look in the face of life and blow smoke in
    In slow motion, though it’s ugly and so broken
    God comes to mind, it’s said that you should pray
    But all I got back was what is thought that he would say
    If any consolation, there was colossal faith in
    The whole thing, but no match for trauma facin’
    This black hole parallel can look so releivin’
    A gateway to a place that’s beyond dreamin’
    So close, it seems like the way’s in sight
    That road to dark can seem like a fade to light
    Filled up with an empty view, why bother
    With choice when this life is already simply through
    The thought process can seem like an illusion
    But the method has brought things to one conclusion
    There’s really no way back, but one way out
    And the way is calling so close, no doubt
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    Something you'd never get, most wish they didn't either
    dark and lonely thoughts is what this sin'll feed ya
    a tapeworm in the reasoning makes 'em collect
    more and more regret, but's it's not the worst yet
    sweating happy thoughts.....coughin' blood
    loss of love....not as bad as the thoughts above
    in the form of rain clouds, some forgot in the flood
    can't make it to the boat, feet caught in the mud
    the more thoughts, the more it's realized the choice locks
    can't call for help, too much decay in the voice box
    will this be the first or last life decision ever made?
    no deadline, no guarantee in seven days
    they call it selfish, the intelligent could plee
    but they can't relate and don't need to be set free
    revenge is sweet, or it pretends to be
    it's never how the story really ends you see
    always the satisfaction, never the reaction
    the good hearted soul never is the one relaxin'
    always the one feelin bad for the destruction
    in the end though he's the only one who's really stuck with
    a hard choice, it doesn't matter who's lovein to stay
    cause when emotion ever really come into play?
    can't be seen, there''s really no time time to lose
    life's a right, property, time to choose
    -----
    stumble around around, try to load up the bullets in
    death metal it's called, the piece is now full of it
    pull the hammer, it starts lookin a little familiar
    this should be really easy for a villian, a killer
    take a deep breath, and think about the logic
    mind's empty, nothin but this object
    talk is cheap, but the choice won't be doin' the least
    speakin from the heart, sincerely the newly deceased...

    This is a true story about a young killer and a battle with thoughts of suicide because of his conscience and good heart. The last line said "speakin from the heart, sincerely the newly deceased" and suggests more of his heart being dead so to speak, and not actually going through with it.