Video Breathe Into Me Preview Opinions/Advicee

KH Vid Link: http://video.kh-vids.net/video/6406010d-b5ee-47b0-a7dd-9a6c018423fc.htm

Youtube Link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KjrEk8K5PbU

This preview video is currently my most worked on out of the 3 i have made so far.
I hope you like it.
Advice/Opinions are welcome.