Rated PG. This story is about a young, blonde girl with glasses, who falls in love with a young, gray hair teenage boy named Zero. The young girl's name was Roya. Roya was a smart girl growing up, and soon became great friends with Zero. Their relationship grew stronger, until eventually they became boyfriend and girlfriend. However, it all ended one day when a friend of Zero's, named Deviant, filled Roya's head with lies, convincing her that Zero was cheating on her. Later on, Roya and Zero break up due to Roya accusing him of cheating. But the day before, they took their relationship to the next level. Roya just found out recently she was pregnant with his baby. This one shot it based upon Roya's pregnancy. "Zero...." She said, grabbing his shoulder. Zero was busy laughing with his new girlfriend, Hope. He turned and saw the depressed eyes of Roya through her glasses. "May I talk to you...?" She said, looking down and blushing. Lately, her stomach has been getting much larger, and she has been rather grumpy near her friends and, mainly, Zero. "Sure, Roya..." He said, opening the door, letting Roya out first. Roya stood in the snow while Zero leaned against the wall. "So, what do you want?" He said in an angry voice. Roya put her hands together and looked down. "I'm sorry, Zero....." She said, a small tear running down her cheek. "I am deeply sorry...." "For what?" Roya walked up to him and wrapped her arms around his stomach, as he was very tall compared to her. "I should have told you earlier... but you were so happy and all.... I couldn't bear to see how you reacted..." Zero gave her a puzzled look. "What are you talking about?" Roya looked up at his eyes. They were the same eyes as when she first cried. Eyes of genuine concern, kindness. "Zero...." She began. "That night.. the night before we broke up... remember when the condom broke...?" Zero nodded his head. "Yeah, what about it?" Roya looked down and cried again. "Zero... I-i-.." She looked up at him. "You are going to be a father!" She quickly clasped her hands over her mouth and ran. "Roya, wait!" He yeled, chasing after her. He was much faster than her, so he grabbed her shoulder. Roya turned around and felt him wrap his arms around her. "Z-Zero...?" He hugged her a bit tighter. "It's ok, Roya...." He said, smiling. "You are pregnant with my baby, aren't you..?" She looked down again. He hugged her just a little tighter. "Don't be ashamed, Roya..... I'm just happy that I know I am the father..." She looked up at him, smiling. "Thank you, Zero..." She said, hugging him. Nine months later, Roya flashed a silver ring on her finger, and help up a baby boy, in which she named Hayden. Ok, most of you are going to wonder what I am trying to say. It was simply a fanfic I felt like writing. Nothing more. It's a wokr-in-progress. If there is anything I need to improve, please let me know.
To begin with....I believe that the first part explaining everything was rather unnecessary, it could have been more organized and interesting to add those parts into the narrative. There are little mistakes you should check, and the layout doesn't feel organized; there's not space between dialogue and, well... I think overall you were trying to do something nice, but the execution on it could have been better. If I were you I'd explain Deviant and Hope's involvement in the story, since they just seem rather devoid of any sense, other than being there to be a stepping stone for the lovers. Overall it's a good try, just need more practice, since it's not a bad idea what you've got here.
Wait, what is this a fanfic of? I don't recognise the characters. x3 It was sweet, despite being simple. In my opinion the transition from Zero being angry to Zero being gentle was too quick and not detailed enough. Details are what make a story intresting- use them! :3 Contrary to Chevalier I didn't mind the opening, it reminded me of the scene setting in a play. But you should get rid of the italics in a story, Its quite offputting.
