Black Wings And Golden Lies

I'm proud of this, whatever this is, since I rarely ever do stuff of the like.
I'm not really looking for cnc, but more so to see if it's any good. May use this for something for school.
As you can tell I like to repeat things. ^^"​

Black Wings and Golden Lies​

He was like a raven, in every aspect.​

He had large black wings, that, despite their size, never made a noise, never made rustle, no matter how much he would move. ​

He moved like a ghost, a ghost that haunted my dreams.​

Death followed him where ever he went. He was truly an omen, an omen of the end. I feared that my end would surely come if he ever left my side.​

I didn’t speak, I couldn’t speak. I couldn’t whisper, I couldn’t think. He holds my voice, my breath. It all belongs to him.​

He moved and I followed. I never wished to leave his side. Was it only because of fear? Or was there something more to this nightmare?​

His mouth spoke little, his eyes said less. I wish to hear it, I need to hear it. The words of his soul must be mine.​

The day came when I simply had to ask. Will you leave me? Will I be alone when I die? The seconds I wait for a reply seem like years. They all past too quickly and too slowly, too quietly and too loudly.​

They were golden, those eyes that saw me for me. I could hide nothing from them and yet they hid everything from me.​

I’ll never leave. He said it. He’ll never leave. I cannot help to smile. And I cannot help to cry. Can this really be so, when he has wings and I do not?​

And eternity with you is nothing more than suffering if I can never fly by your side.​

Inspired by:
Nothing farther than he uttered – not a feather then he fluttered –
Till I scarely more than muttered, “Other friends have flown before-
On the morrow he will leave me, as my Hopes have flown before.â€
Then the bird said, “Nevermore.â€

“The Raven†by Edgar Allen Poe​

 

I'm a fan of poetry, myself.
C:
I write quite a lot of it, and I think that this is an excellent sample.
Interesting use of repetition, and although the syntax is a little choppy and some of the phrasing can be a little bit better (things that aren't real major, it's still awesome), I still really like the poem.

 

Didn't think I'd be so happy to see a reply. I even forgot I posted it here. XDX

Thank you very much <3​

 

Haha!
I understand the feeling!
I posted a prologue up here and I wasn't expecting to get a reply. It made me happy when I did.
Anytime! Post more, please~!