Traditional Art Ao No Exorcist - Rin Okumaru - Fanart

I'm not usually into doing fanarts but since I fell so in love with the show I had to xD
Hope you guys know it.
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My first day at my art college is coming soon \o/
I'm going to be posting more artwork, doodles and observational work from now on.
I'll also be trying new things to experiment with
:3
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Exciting! Art college! I really want to get involved with some kind of art school. I've never really done that yet. Gah! But i'm still in sophomore year! And Summer isn't too close just yet... i wish you luck Taffy! Enjoy yourself c:

Anyway, amazing work as always Taffy. I'm not familiar with the character, but some things bother me a bit. I like the colors you used, it's very nice and they go together well. However, I think you could have added more shading to the folds of his clothes. Also by his weapon. I think I understand that it should be lying on his shoulder? And I see that it does, but I think you could have done better with extra shading so that it really appears that it's lying on his shoulder with a kind of 3-dimensional look. I like how you've done his hair, but the flow of his hair (mainly his fringe) due to the colouring looks kind of odd. It goes forward from the back but suddenly falls. It's nothing much, but just thought you would know it looks a little bit odd. And his side view, it's just a little off. I think it's that his nose and mouth aren't too detailed or something. I can't quite put my finger on this one, there's just something of it.
However, amazing as always Taffy! This is super cute and awesome. Love it c:

 

There are some problems with his head/face. The eye looks to me like it's slightly too far down and into his face. Also, I know it's animez-style and all, but his eye is simply too big. Eyes simply can't fill out half the distance to the ear like it does there.

Nose- mouth- and jaw-areas are also not good. Look at the start of his jaw compared to his chin; they're on the same level. The jaw joints should be higher up. I may be overstepping my bounds here, but it looks like you got lazy with the lips. They don't look like lips at all, but rather like two random floppy-things sticking out. The lower part of his nose seems to be painting sharply upwards - like he would almost look like this http://www.blogcdn.com/www.queersighted.com/media/2008/12/pig_tale_snout.jpg if you were to draw his nostrils (which, by the way, you really should. I know they're hard to do, I can't really do them well myself, but you really shouldn't just cut off parts of the human body.) The ear looks a bit too much like a square.

As for the body, can't really think of much to say other than it seems a little too small. The way the jacket runs down his back looks weird. Why is there suddenly this inwards "bump"? The upper part of the back there is really more of a nice curve: http://chestofbooks.com/reference/A...es/MUSCLES-OF-THE-HUMAN-BODY-PROFILE-VIEW.png Shoulder also looks like it's a bit too low down to support the sword properly, but I might be wrong...

I usually like your stuff, but this one was kind of weak in these aspects, so I hope this helps you out.

 

Thank you Dinny for your awesome critique I realized now a few mistakes I did.
I will keep your helpful words in mind for the future.​

Thank you soo much for your perfect critique.
I actually realized on those mistakes but i had to stick to the similar style of the anime in some ways.
Definitely helpful.
I will try to produce more work following different styles in the future, so please look forward to them.​