OOC: Sorry, what's happening? Did Deathsight reply back? And Firekeyblade...aww! You've made Zexion a sandwich! lol Absorbed in his thoughts, Zexion transported into the kitchen, running a hand wearily through his light blue-silver hair. Hearing the sounds of footsteps, he tilted his head up to see Xangel, rushing to and fro. "What are you doing, Xangel?" he asked, absent-mindedly, tilting his head to the side slightly.
OOC: Sorry, what happened? lol
How is everyone? :)
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OOC: lol I know...I'm just very weak. xDD Laying Meg down upon her soft, fluffy bed, Nymph gave a sigh. Looking at her, frowning, she wondered what had happened. Placing the covers over her, she turned and left, heading back to the guest room. Approaching the can of sunkist, she picked it up, looking it over. Now...what could be in a tiny can?
I couldn't tell - there was no mirror and I didn't ask anyone...and of course with my teacher, she's always nice so I have no idea...but I bet it was like an amateur...xD Anyway, I've gotta go so...talk to you later! I'll be on earlier tomorrow!! :glomp: lol
OOC: Go ahead and change it then. xD Although Firekeyblade is already called "Angel"... Glancing down, she saw a pool of liquid, inching close to her. Nymph took a step back, her eyes wide. A Sunkist...drink? What...what was in it? With a trembling hand, she bent down and picked it up, looking it over. Giving a small sniff, she could only breath in the strong citric scent. Tilting her head up, she stepped over the puddle of liquid, and struggled to lift Mega into her arms. Turning, she headed down the hallway, heading for her room...
*gasp* That sounds awesome...reminds me of when I once tried to do this Chinese dance with the fluttery, transparent veil-like pieces of cloth...
Ah...you're torturing me...the music...! lol And well, I do play piano too, but I don't want to bring out my instrument right now. xDD
Hearing no answer, Nymph felt a cold frission of fear skate down her spine. Relax...maybe she couldn't hear me through the door...or she walked to a different room, she tried to reassure herself. With her hand outstretched, the bottle of tonic still clenched tightly in her right fist, she edged towards the kitchen door...only into the turn around it. Chuckling at her own foolishness, she was now emboldened to swing open the door and back into the guest room. "Mega?" she called. "Mega...where are you?" Lightning flashed outside, an all the lights turned back on. Blinking, she gasped, her hand flying to cover her mouth, the bottle of tunic dropping to the floor. Mega was there, lying as if unconscious. "Mega!" she screamed.
It sounds good so far! Although, the structure has improved, it could still be better...for instance, in the last paragraph, it should be more like: Kiryu fell at an alarming rapid speed, but he then grabbed a cord on the equipment on his back and pulled it. The parachute opened up, and Kiryu slowly glided down to the beach of the island, and landed soundly. If a sentence can be combined, then do it with a nice conjunction, and if it's a compound sentence, then add a comma before the 'and'. Also, try not to repeat a name too many times, a 'he' or a 'she' would be suffice, and don't forget to add adjectives to certain verbs/nouns and use specific target words, as it will help to make the imagery clearer. Otherwise, you did awesome, and again, the idea sounds very original, particularly with the concept of using kh-vids members, and I can't wait to see more! :)
*dazed* Is...is that...music I hear?
OOC: lol Yay for drama! And to thicken the plot... Trotting over to the cabinets, Nymph reached up to open one of them, the long tail of her cat costume brushing by the floor. Hearing a rustle outside, she turned her head sharply...only to find the bush, hitting against the window being blown by the wind. Giving a sigh of relief, she turned back, grabbing a bottle of tonic. At that very moment, all the lights turned off, and Nymph gave a small jump. "It's just a black-out, don't worry," she reassured herself. Turning, she blinked, unable to see through the inky darkness. "Uh...Mega? Are you still there?" she asked, her voice sounding small and frightened.
Larxene please. :)
"Um...let me just...get you something though," Nymph said, as she turned, heading for the kitchen.
lol Well, no, that'd be good actually...right now, there's something wrong with the sound levels in my computer or something and I can't listen to any music...not from my iTunes nor youtube...it's terrible!! Even Spongebob music would be fine!! *runs around in circles and then faints*
They don't feel like it. Why is the water slippery?
lol We were bored out of our minds. xDD My...I'm going insane here...guess why. xD
Neither! It's me! :D lol Just kidding. xD Why am I always smiling so much?
"Are you...are you sick?" Nymph asked, worried. "Do you need some medicine or...?"
