You've got an interesting idea here, taking everything out of the normal cannon and adding your own spice to it. Saying that, the chapters are a bit short and too blocky, making it slightly hard to read. There is an easy fix to this, just create paragraphs, maybe lower the number of chapters from 13 to five or six. You seem to easily encorperate humor in this which is a strength to this story. Generally I like it, just try to watch your structure.
