THAT right there was teh EPIC-EST spoiler evar!!!! all those question marks. :blink: its epic because it spoils nothing!!! NOTHING I SAY!!!!! Does Alia need someone to save her from the Grimms scientists? will it be one of the other characters? do these questions have very obvious answers (obvious being yes)? we Will FInd OUT!!! :ninjacat:
3Ds will be a sequel. technically. i realize that the trailer showed Sora and Riku in their KH1 outfits, but the game itself takes place after KH2, from what i can see.
i would do any number of stupid things to get onto that youtube channel. ANY. NUMBER. :) im glad youre going to continue this. its such a great story.
dont worry about it Maka. taking care of yourself comes first. the story is a close second, but it is still second. @Garxena, Change. EDIT speaking of change, i just realised: i havent changed my avatar since i joined the site... O.o ...meh. ill do it later.
i couldnt get any of the audio!!!! D: i mean, i heard the background music, but i coudlnt get any words. just really weird snatches of voice, not even a whole sound i could describe. ill try again on a diferent computer later though. EDIT k, got it. and i agree with sora969. Roxas has never done any calcualting. as Sora's nobody, wouldnt calculating be WAY over his head? like, way, WAY over his head?
YAY!!! im part of a family now!!! how is it possible that every time ive tried to come on, i get a DBE? it doesnt seem possible... i just wanted to say, Zeni seems like the instigator of the 'problem' (whatever that is). just cause of the cryptic "It's show time" line he says at the end of chapter 1 and cause his appearance is most obviously abnormal.
I rather liked the game. i realize that many people were angry that it wasnt KH3, but i prefer that it wasnt, really. it answered a lot of questions i had from KH2. i played KH2 before CoM, and for most of the game my only thought was "WHAT THE F*** IS GOING ON?!?!?" so, yeah, id rather get all of the answers out of the way before i have to ask them.
Hello. since you asked for what you did wrong, im going to edit the errors that i noticed. edits in red. thats it. i told you there werent many.
Yes!!! Kaida is just as i imagined her when i wrote her profile!!! im glad she's met someone already. i dont know what you mean, rushed. psh. I noticed a few errors, but nothing too big. Great job!!! heres a link to a map of a whole bunch of malls in Chicago: http://www.chicagotraveler.com/maps/chicago-suburban-shopping-center-map.htm hope it helps. ^-^ Ima go read it again!!! hehe, shark tank.
THIS IS GOING TO BE AWESOME!!! so stoked. ^-^ dont mind me, im just going to quietly express my joy. ^_^ :) (: BTW Maka, you said your doing a zombie character. when do we get to see that profile?
Haha! mines not short tempered at all!!! i dont think i mentioned anything about fighting though. Kaida (my character) has probably seen the other characters around (because of her delivery job) but doesnt really interact with them until the story starts. EDIT just realized, i never answered your other question. the Grimms one. hmmm... she escaped when she was 4 and only has vague memories which she currently believes is just a childhood nightmare and not a memory. hope this doesnt mess with anything!
WELCOME!!!! i hope you'll have fun with us here at KHV!!! i dont think theres a chat room, but there is a visitor message area on your profile. theres also PMs and, of course, posting. but no chat room, as far as i know. anyone? confirmation on my knowledge and/or ignorance?
currently reading Warrior Heir trilogy and Hitchhickers Guide to the Galaxy trilogy (actually 5-6 books). probably going to re read every book on my shelf at some point as well cause i dont have access to a good library during the summer months. ...every book on my brothers shlef as well.
no, thats just what Xion looked like when she was overflowing with Sora's memories. if you look, it still kinda looks like Sora. Spikey hair-thing, red pants, yellow shoes, jacket. thats the form she took so that she could fight Roxas. Rikus replica always looked like Riku cause thats how he was designed. Xion's image was designed to change based on how people looked at her and how many memories she had absorbed from Roxas.
yeah, of course i do. why wouldnt i? best game series ever. you could do this: play the 3 hour tutorial, then, at the part you want to start at each time (eg, just before Sora wakes up or before the Roxas/Axel fight) save it. keep that save file permanently and start from there for each new game you want to play. just remember to save on a different file after or youll lose your starting place
not bad for an eight year old. very morbid. when you said 'A Magical Adventure' i was thinking you would get out alive, as most adventure protagonists do. you never explained why there was a time limit on the spell and you never explained how you lost your necklace. im surprised that you new such advanced words that young. i wont comment on grammar, partly because eight year olds dont care much about such things, and partly because there were no errors that i could see. now that i think about it, you also didnt explain why the mermaid killed you. sure, youre Elfin (which you also didnt explain... and you spelled it wrong. its Elven), but is that any reason to kill you? anyways, the summary is: very good (surprisingly so for an eight year olds work), shockingly morbid, and lots of gaps.
Hello again. i will be editing you work. enjoy! Spoiler k, your punctuation is off, like, a lot. For this ^ one, proper punctuation would be 'Chris, just standing there.' only one comma. again, punctuation. dont put a comma after a quotation mark. there should be a space in between these two paragraphs. Different speaker and all. since there isnt a change in speakers or ideas, it shouldnt be 2 paragraphs, only one. Also, thoughts should be italicized. Like this: ugh. i forgot. qutations automatically italicize. im going to bold it, but read it as italics, ok? technically, Namine and Kairi are 2 different speakers, so put an extra space in there as well. both the period and the comma in the first sentence are unnecessary. first sentence: 'now now, no need...' last sentence: you forgot a quotation mark. And, since i dislike repeating myself, this is the last ill bring up punctuation, unless its really necessary. Also, why did Kairi agree? Just cause he can see Nobodies? this has nothing to do with edits, but it must be said: AHAHAHA HAHA AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!! HITCHHIKER'S GUIDE TO THE GALAXY REFERENCE!!!! there, done. the sixteen year old wondered, or the sixteen year old silver-haired-wonder. Something like that. That^ is an incomplete sentence as is. WHOA! Is that OPEN HOSTILITY? Did NOT expect that from Sora. interesting place to bring up his eye color, but hey! It works. NEXT!! question mark after month, not exclamation mark. Or both if you wish. this ^ part doesnt make sense to me. Explain? what, theyve never been on a mini field trip before? Whats so exciting and shocking that Sora and Kairi are so freaked about it? again, italicize thoughts. Otherwise, it seems like hes voicing his thoughts aloud, which doesnt make sense in context. oddly? It isnt odd if Riku and Sora both did it too. And you said, a few paragraphs ago, “However, exactly when Xion said her name, Roxas, Sora , and Riku started clutching their head as pain, no, memories flooded thei sub-conscious at a rate to fast to comprehend, let alone keep up.”, which justifies Roxas and Namine's pain. ok, i know i said i wouldnt repeat myself, but this is really bugging me. dont use commas after quotation marks. Before maybe, but not after. for 'yes theyre different' and 'i can control the energy behind them', dont use a question mark. It sounds like hes second guessing himself. ellipses, those dot-dot-dot things (...) use 3 dots, not 2. wow. Great KH3 reference there. No seriously, no sarcasm here, its a really good one. Blatant, but good. Although, the thought makes Sora seem very scatterbrained. i dont understand this one either. Explain please? incomprehensible? Im pretty sure it was comprehended. They collapsed because they were having a memory lapse. 'silver teen'? Again, silver-haired teen maybe. That ^ sentence just reminds me of the silver surfer. excused OMG ITS AXEL!!!!! ok, so, beyond my edits, i think this was a really great chapter. I didnt mention the spelling mistakes, but there was a LOT of them. I could probably list them, but im too lazy to do that. My advice? Use a word processor, like Microsoft Word or the Mac equivalent of Microsoft Word (sorry Mac users for my ignorance) or pretty much anything that has spell check. If you get a good one, it can also correct your grammar, but i didnt see many grammar mistakes. Its mostly just punctuation and spelling. The story is great, the ideas are presented clearly and the story has good 'flow', i suppose youd call it. if you think im being hypocritical because of the times when i mentioned the commas after quotes, then used them myself, the way i used them was grammatically correct, your way, not so much. You used it to separate a quotation from the speaker. I used it to separate a quote from a different idea, or to signify a pause in reading. If you dont know what m talking about, id sugest reading some of the other fanfics on the site, like The Flurry or ~Destiny Unlocked~. Actually, id suggest reading them anyways because theyre very good fanfics. Keep going cause id love to see the end of this story.
New chapter. sorry its been so long, ive been busy with exams and last minute assignments and such. this ones really long, now that i realize it. anyways, enjoy! Chapter 5 Departure “You're sure that's what she said?†Mrs. D narrowed her eyes. If this was true, then this village was in danger simply by her being here. That, she could not abide. “Yes Mrs. D. She said that since she's returned to the village, her energy boost has been wearing off.†Terin stood in front of Mrs. D's chair and shifted nervously from foot to foot. Mrs. D sighed and stood. “We can't do anything about it besides getting Ferax out of the village. The sooner she's gone, the sooner both she and the village will be safe.†She turned away from him in a silent dismissal. When he didn't leave, she turned back towards him and gave him a weary nod. Quickly, he clamoured to ask his question. “Mrs. D, could it really happen? Could The Cave really...?†He was clearly going to keep pressing the matter, so she answered honestly. “Yes, it could. Through your own stupidity, you know full well what's in there. It can and will take what remains of Ferax's heart. And if it does that... I can't tell you what will happen. It's bad enough that you know what's in The Cave. Now, remove yourself from my presence, Half-Light, and take your other half with you.†Her dismissal more obvious this time, he picked up Kyle and walked in the direction of the village. “Kyle, what can we do?†His voice was desperate, he knew. Kyle looked up at him with those round glowing eyes and, as always, spoke directly to Terin's heart. We can go ahead with the mission. The sooner we get Ferax out of here, the better for everyone. For her too. Let's just trust that Mrs. D can fix this before we get back. Terin smiled. “You're right. When did you get so smart?†I've always been smart. I'm the logical half of your heart, remember? You kept all the emotions. A wicked grin crossed the teen's face. “If you have no emotions, then why can't you stay away from Ferax?†What!? I... She... ...why would you ask that? You suck. Terin could almost swear that the Shadow was blushing. I blame you. It's your fault I can't stay away from her. So there. It was a little known fact that Shadows have tongues, stemming from the even less known fact that Shadows have mouths. But Kyle single-handedly proved both were true as he stuck out his tongue at Terin, something he had picked up from the village children. Despite Kyle's childishness, Terin could not deny the truth of his statement. “Can she hear you yet?†Kyle shook his head sadly. No, not yet. Terin allowed himself a moment to be sad, then shook his head and smiled. “Well, we'd better get on with that mission then.†“Are you sure you're okay to go? You didn't get any sleep.†“I can sleep on the train. Besides, the mission is more important than my sleep. And,†Terin gave her a knowing smile, “I'll bet you didn't get any sleep either.†Ferax probably would have blushed if she could have. “It's different for me. I only need 3 hours of sleep. You need 12. See the difference?†“Don' lie to yerself luv, ye need 't least 6.†He adopted the accent to tease her. “Come now, th' train's awaitin' and we 'ave a mission.†He dodged her elbow as it sailed towards his ribs and ran ahead, laughing. “Come on, hurry! If we get there early, we can get the good seat!†Ferax raced on, quick to catch up. When they reached the station, at the same time and both barely winded, a voice called Ferax's name. She twisted to see Justine running towards her. Terin smiled. “Don't look like that. She's probably come to apologize.†When her face showed disbelief, he laughed and said, “As faith that she's just come to apologize, I'm going to get the good seat. Have a nice conversation.â€and with that, he shouldered his backpack and walked into the train station. After a moment, Justine skidded to a stop in front of Ferax. Her blonde hair was pulled up into two pony tails, one over each ear. She wore a red dress that came down to mid-thigh and was slitted up the side for ease of movement. Black leggings and pink knee high boots covered most of her legs. “Ferax,†Justine was incredibly winded. A Snipe like her didn't need to run as much as a Shadow did. “I wanted to apologize for my behaviour yesterday. A simple emotion like anger is not a proper excuse for attacking a comrade. I'm very sorry.†A sigh that had more to do with Terin being right than annoyance at Justine escaped Ferax's lips. She painted on one of her best smiles. “It's okay Justine. I understand.†Justine looked up at her, brown eyes sad. “Right. You lost someone too. I'm sorry.†“Really, it's alright. Stop apologizing.†Suddenly the train whistle went off, the final warning that the train was leaving. “Gotta go Justine. Good luck with your archery!†As she dashed onto the train, the phrase “saved by the bell†passed through her mind. The “good seat†as Terin had put it was in the back of the train. All the cargo was carried in the car behind the engine, so the last car had been set with a large window that curved around the train. As such, the back of the train was both the most coveted and most despised car. Coveted for it's view, and despised because it reminded people of what they were running from: constant battles, strange people with only partial hearts, and eerie lighting. Today, it was empty. “Looks like the train is full of runners today. Pity. The village's population had just broken 400.†Terin's cursory glance of the train was habitual. Checking all exits, points of entry, possible sites of darkness where a Heartless could easily appear. Ferax's eyes followed his as she performed a similar check. They settled themselves on either sides of the cabin, on the far side of the door. Terin grabbed a table from the side as Ferax pulled the mission files from her bag. “How long has it been since I started my last mission? In Standard Time, not Village Time.†As she spoke, the train started to move. Terin checked his Truewatch. “Three months exactly. Why?†“I have some documents to pick up from Twilight Town. And, last time I was there, I picked up a dark trail. I'd like to check out where it leads.†She spread the papers on the table; a map of the worlds, a copy of the papers she had taken from that mansion and the mission statement, which Terin picked up. “Huh. Look what it says here. We've got no restrictions on this mission. No 'preserving the world border', no keeping our world a secret. We're even allowed to be seen by people in the other worlds.†His glowing yellow eyes widened as he read on. “Munnetary expenses are covered, permission to use force on world residents, lethal if necessary, what is this? I've never seen this before.†Ferax nodded her head. “I know. It was the same on my last mission. Is it really so important that we catch the person responsible for the Organization's deaths?†He smiled. “That's what we're supposed to find out, remember?†“Good point. Here. These are for you.†She held out a pair of sunglasses. Terin took them, inspecting the darkened lenses. “What are these for?†“Your eyes. They stand out too much, so you have to wear those.†She picked up another pair for herself. “I get to wear these, so that you don't stand out wearing them. What do you think?†She plopped them over her eyes. “Oh, yes, very inconspicuous.†He put on his own pair, and looked around. “I don't think these are helping much. I can barely see. And Kyle can't navigate for me because he attracts attention too.†Indeed, the glow from his eyes was barely diminished. “Well, I'm sorry, but that's the best we have for now. Kyle can stay in your pack. There's enough room for him. Or he can stay in your shadow. He seems to like it there.†Kyle nodded vigorously, a third set of Shadow-sized sunglasses in his claw. He slipped them over his eyes and looked around the cabin, copying Terin. Terin laughed at his Heartless' antics. “Alright,†he said, abruptly serious, “so, where are we going to go after Twilight Town?†She pointed to the map of the worlds. “I was thinking this place.†She pointed to a world on the map. Terin leaned in to read the inscription on the map. “ 'Destiny Islands'. Sounds fancy. Why there of all places?†“It was the only place I didn't have time to check on my last mission. It seems like a good place to start.†“Right you are. Destiny Islands it is.†He paused, then asked, “Since it's an island, do you want to go swimming?†“What?†“The Meridian Ocean is the only place place a person can swim in Despair Village and it's always too cold for it to be any fun. I would like to swim somewhere where I don't have to sit next to a bonfire afterwards to defrost for once.†She paused to think about this. While it would be nice to swim in warm water for once, as Terin said, the mission was definitely more important than their own personal enjoyment. “Sorry Terin, I don't think so. The mission is more important right now and besides, I didn't bring my swimsuit.†She grimaced when he flopped down onto the seat and started making the same whiny noises a four year old would make when denied ice cream. “We can go after we complete the mission.†Instantly, the whiny noises stopped. Terin's eyes popped up over the edge of the table, narrowed with suspicion. “Promise?†“Promise.†Ferax confirmed. Terin bolted upright, a wide smile stretching across his face. “Yes! Come on, let's finish planning. Where to after the Destiny Islands?†“I was thinking we could go back to The Castle That Never Was. I want you to take a look around as well, in case I missed something.†“Great, and after we can go to...†“Is that...?†Ferax smiled at the look on Terin's face. Her expression couldn't have been far off, albeit more subdued. First sunsets will do that to a person. Second sunsets too. “Yup. Isn't it beautiful?†Terin nodded in agreement. They were standing on top of the clock tower, where the dark corridor had deposited them. The sky was filled with fire and the sun turned the gleaming ocean red. His eyes wandered over to Ferax, her hair glowing crimson, ice blue eyes made softer, less intense as she watched the sunset. “Yeah,†he said softly, eyes returning to the sun, “beautiful.†Kyle poked his head out of Terin's backpack They stood atop the tower for a few minutes more, enjoying the view. Finally, Ferax sighed. “Come on. It's time to go.†Rather than take the stairs, they jumped down from the top of the tower. Landing gently on the balls of her feet, Ferax waited until Kyle had hidden himself in Terin's shadow, then led the way down from Station Heights. “So, where to?†Ferax looked over her shoulder at Terin. “I have to check in with someone. I asked them to decode some papers when I was last here and I want to see if they're done. Then we have to check on a trail I found.†Terin cocked an eyebrow. “Trail?†“I mentioned it on the train. Last time I was here, I picked up a left over trace from an old dark corridor in an alleyway. I didn't have time then, so I want to see where it goes now.†“Okay. So, let's go find this codebreaker of yours.†Finding the codebreaker she had met last time – what was his name? Pence? - was difficult, but no more so than she had expected. They didn't know where he lived, didn't know his usual hangouts and definitely didn't know whether he was even in town or not. It was a weekend here; he could be on vacation. In the end, they couldn't find Pence, so they went to check on the dark trail. They were walking in the alleyway when Olette's voice drifted from behind a chain link fence. “So when do you think Sora and Kairi are going to visit?†Ferax froze at the name. Sora? They knew him? And who's Kairi? “Who cares?†Hayner's voice this time. It was full of sarcasm but Ferax could tell it was insincere. “Should be soon. Sora said he would.†Pence's voice floated from the same area. Ferax motioned for Terin to move back as talk retreated from Sora to winter break and upcoming exams. “That name again. Sora. What's his part in all of this?†Terin mused, his shades slipping down his nose. “And how did he get from Castle Oblivion, to The World That Never Was, to here? Can he use dark corridors?†“Maybe. Either way, we can't ask them.†Ferax sighed. “We have to go in anyways. Both my codebreaker and the trail are in there.†“Alright, so we go in and don't ask about Sora. We go in and you ask about the papers and distract them, while I check on the trail.†“It's on the left hand wall, in front of a furnace.†“Hey everyone. Long time no see.†Ferax strode into the area with Terin following closely behind. Hayner was sitting on a yellow power box right in front of the entrance, Pence on a crate in the corner and Olette on the sofa. “Oh, it's you!†Pence sounded happy, as he did last time she saw him. He'd gotten a new shirt. Actually, it was the same shirt, but it was more orangey-red than red. “I finished decoding those papers you gave me.†He reached for a bag sitting behind the crate. Olette gave a warm smile. “You're just in time. He just finished today.†She'd also gotten a new outfit: longer pants of the same color and a white T shirt. “Who invited you? You can't just barge in here without permission.†Hayner had gotten a longer sleeved shirt, still black, and had replaced his camo pants with solid green long pants. His vest was still there though. “Hayner!†Olette turned to him looking shocked at his manners. “What?†Pence hopped up off the crate while Hayner and Olette argued. “I've got them right here. One second. I never caught your name last time you were here.†He continued rummaging through his bag as he spoke. “It's Ferax.†She hadn't deliberately concealed her name on her last visit. It just never came up. Pence nodded, then pulled his hand out of his bag with a large sweeping motion. “Aha! There they are.†He pulled his arm out of the air, and indeed, there was a sheaf of papers in his hand, no worse for wear despite the messiness of his backpack. “Here's your documents, I translated them as best I could, but there were a few words I couldn't figure out. I just have one thing...†Pence's features turned into an uncharacteristic worried frown. When it became clear that he wasn't going to ask without prompting, Ferax asked, “What is it?†Pence looked up, searching her face for his answer. “Why does Sora's name come up so often?†Ferax sighed. She had been expecting this question. “I don't know.†That was the truth. “That's what I'm trying to find out.†That wasn't, not quite. Pence nodded, however, like that was the best he was going to get and he'd better just accept it. He handed over the documents. Ferax quickly skimmed the pages. “Thanks pence. I -†Hayner's voice broke through her gratitude. “And who are you? I don't recall inviting you either.†He had just noticed Terin standing in the corner, investigating at the furnace. Terin continued his search for another moment before looking up. His voice when he spoke was pleasant and friendly. “Hm? Oh, I'm Terin, Ferax's friend. Nice to meet you.†He smiled his most charming smile, but the effect was ruined by his sunglasses. His eyes cut from Hayner's face to Feraz's. “Come here. I think I found it.†Quickly, she opened her bag and slipped the papers inside. There was time to look at them later. “Let me see.†Terin stood to one side, pointing at a spot on the furnace. “See, the point of entry has shrunk over time, but it's still here. It's only the size of a pinprick now though.†“A pinpricks enough. Stand back.†She flattened her palm against the spot Terin had pointed at and concentrated. Terin followed her advice and retreated a few steps. Hayner, Pence and Olette came a few steps closer, to see what she was doing. With a small bang and a large shock wave, a dark corridor opened. Hayner and Pence were blown back a few feet, while Terin and Olette, who had come closer but was still behind Terin, nearly got pushed over. Opening a dark corridor normally isn't that difficult. Reopening one that had been closed for several mo was much harder. “There,†Ferax said, dusting her hands off, “that should do. Let's go Terin.†“Yeah, one sec. I lost my sunglasses.†The trio's eyes bulged as they saw Terin's glowing yellow eyes. Terin got on his knees and reached under the sofa, exclaiming when his hands touched something. “Got 'em. Let's go, Ferax.†Pence rubbed his eyes. He could have sworn that, as they strange pair walked through the swirling darkness, a spot of even blacker darkness hopped out of Terin's shadow and into Ferax's arms. He could have sworn...
he never saw Roxas dual-wielding. the first time Roxas dual-wields is after Axel tries to stop him. Axel never sees him after that, until Twilight Town, and as such is shocked to see Roxas dual-wield. it has nothing to do with not remembering Xion, he just never saw Roxas do it.
it had to have happened at around the same time that Radiant Garden became Hollow Bastion. in the manga, it said that Leon &co. were only kids when that happened, but i wouldn't could that as a very reliable source. i would say that its been at least 5 years though, just based on Leon and Aeriths dialogue with Sora, Dnald and Goofy.
