It's actually really quite sexy :|
Very refreshing and descriptive writing, though partially confusing until the explanation in the final paragraph. It was clever though, and I liked the laughing face in the smoke from the gun. Nice work.
lol, well...actually we were having a rather nerdy quiz on capital cities :v Somebody said "whats the capital of Finland" and I was like "I KNOW...
Aw.:3 It was well written, and your style of writing is pleasant. The meeting of Roxas and Namine was cute indeed. ^^ Not much else to say except keep it up. (:
Did you use a guide when drawing the pokemon/digimon? Some of them look pretty well done, whereas your attemps at backgrounds are the complete opposite and look like the mindless scribbles of a five-year old. (that might have been a bit too harsh...) The penultimate and final drawing would have been quite excellent had you not added backgrounds. The...clouds(?) are messy and don't resemble a real sky. The coloring needs to be done more lightly, as the Grinch said, and don't change the direction of your pencil! If anything, digital coloring of the backgrounds would have looked lovely. Crop the pictures so the images arent dominated by the vast backgrounds. Nice try.
PLEASE go over your spelling and grammar ahfahf D: The very first letter isn't capitalized. That's the first impression the reader will get, and it doesn't make a good starting point. The story seems okay so far, I just have one major issue. The following text highlights the importance of starting new lines everytime someone new talks. xD It looks like Riku said all of this, and was gender swapping! So yeah, structure: New line everytime there's a new speaker! Good work otherwise :3
oh god thats a weird coincidence, we were talking about Helsinki at school today o.O Lanzarote is one of the canary islands, of the coast of...
HASEO IS EPlC
I love you so much! Don't ever forget, no matter what happens. <33
It was rather impressive. You seem to be a great fan of rhetorics and enjambment (carry-on lines) and thinking about other poetic devices would be a huge plus for your work. Assonance and alliteration would have done wonders in some of the lines there. ^^ I got a rather creepy feeling from the poem; instead of the narrator being a comforting source of words he or she felt more like they were taunting the child. xD I especially liked the final stanza. :3 Keep updating!
Just thought I'd point out one tiny error. "My scarlet-encrusted fingertips probed by bag" I guess it's meant to be "my" :3 I want to know who she's ringing! >| This was a much more powerful sentence than just "cheeks stained with mascara". It was impressive. I wish you had given some indication to how old she was in the flashback this time. Nice job as always.
[IMG] My mum used to say the skies are made of diamonds!
*glomp'd* 8D Haha, its excellent thanks x3 Apart from Christmas, Im going away to Lanzarote on the 27th, so I got lots to look forward to :'D Done...
You guys make me chuckle. xD It's amusing how people judge sexuality based on appearence.
Why not? Things you've done in the past don't disappear. xD I personally found this part of the story really amusing. KH doesn't make me smile that much, but this was quite the exception as it relates to real things. xD
I've never actually seen a Chucky Cheese or whatever. lol.
LOL RED LOBSTER THE WAITER MADE ME CRY THERE ...:c
He does indeed live in Belgium. xD
Knowing his love of texting I would guess Shizzy :v
Just because he appeared in one faggy movie doesn't mean he's a bad actor.
