omg, you've lost all your Advent-ness. ...boo >l
YOU'RE A MONSTERo
It seems almost unbelievable that you told me a few hours ago that you had writer's block. :/ I said I would CnC, but I actually have nothing to critisize. :b The song at the start was chilling, and the Christmas scene so messed up. Cliff Richard blasting out of the radio was the icing on the cake, really. The scene with the teacher (I think it was a teacher) actually reminds me of English a few years ago, when we had to write about ourselves. We were actually given exactly the same instructions. What you wrote made me smile, but rather bitterly. :l Mixed feelings about the last section. I don't want somebody to be messing with her.
Thats fine <3 feel free to PM me if you want to talk more.
I really liked the last chapter, you pulled off the fight scene really well. xD Most fight scenes can get boring but you managed to mix in humor and just the right amount of action. It was very well written, I was smiling by the time Xemnas walked into the destroyed room. Keep it up (:
This place is empty? 8D *strips*
I'm really sorry to hear about this :/ it seems you've gone through a lot of unfortunate experiences. The doctors haven't confirmed that your mom has cancer yet, right? A lump in the breast isn't always cancerous, don't get your hopes down yet <3 My sister had a lump in her breast a few weeks ago which she panicked about, but it turned out to be harmless. Even if it does turn out to be cancerous, the survival rate these rates are much higher than they used to be. The best thing you can do is stick by your mom's side and give her hope. You say you liked your real dad before you discovered he was your real dad? If he's a genuinely nice guy, you should try to like him. Give him a chance- you don't know the reason why he left when you were two. I do think it's very unfair that the truth was kept hidden from you for so long, in my opinion everyone has the right to know who their biological parents are. But since he's back in your life and probably won't leave it now, you should try to give him a chance, despite how hard that may seem. You don't have to call him "dad", but give him the decency he deserves as a nice guy.
"underwear club" "power from breast milk" lololol
Yeah my mum cuts my hair if the hairdresser is inconvenient. and oh god misty, when it dries the curls will spring up too. D:
It's been about ten minutes now I'm lying bathing in the glow Of a crescent moon And all around surrounds a growing mass of snow You left me kiss-less Confirmed my doubts And now I haven't the heart to leave My bed of ice It feels so nice To slowly feel my nerves turn numb The sky above is undecided Half clear and clouded as if divided Like my mind Oh! I see stars now Between the flurries of white that fall And tickle my skin From heaven, a chilly call "Where are you?" I whisper But only to wince And feel my lips start to curl and blister Perhaps this is my end, here in the snow Bathing silently in moon-glow.
The presentation of your work put me off to start, but once I started reading it was a pretty pleasant experience. The quotes at the beginning of each entry were a nice touch, and your writing style is simple yet of a good quality. As Loxare pointed out, presentation is everything. Just using simple spacing between entries could attract more readers! I congratulate you on your fine grammar and spelling, by the way.
note to self- draw Rima, because she's awesome. this story deserves waaaay more reviewers. >| Not much happened in this chapter, but it seemed more of a preparation for something I suppose. Something dark coming from "inside", eh? I presume they mean inside their own territory but I keep seeing inside as being inside Yuki's belly. *laughs* Nice description of Rima. :3
I can't ever donate blood because I take insulin. It sucks because it used to be something I always wanted to do. ;-;
Hey, my nerdiness approved of the pickup line B|
Kind of, I guess. xD lololol that was such a dorky pick up line x3
I just snorted with laughter. How lady like. :v
*starts fire-breathing just to outclass Forsaken*
*quickly dashes in to light candles*
Jesus, it's already been four years? o.O 2006 feels like the other day D: last time I almost won £100 in a sweepstake. >:
I'm sure it's safe if her sister is a nurse guys. I don't think she would re-use needles or use an unclean one or anything. Plus by the sound of it, it was only a few drops ;B EDIT - WAIT I MISSED THE WHOLE NOT A NURSE YET THING OKAY DODGY
