Oh God I suck at dead lines >.> Firekeyblade Spoiler I really like your character, and your prose is pleasant enough. I just felt like it took you too long to actually get to the fighting part of the challenge. In fact, you didn’t really introduce conflict until your very last post, despite the fact that you were the initiator. It seemed that P had to drag the argument out of your character, after a few tries. The curiosity over KHV-tan was great, but it didn’t fit the given scenario of Andrew being annoyed over her following him at all. But you did do a good job in keeping your posts short. P Spoiler Again, you were great. I don’t really have anything to complain about. You tried to get the argument started, and you eventually succeeded, even when it sorta wasn’t your job. And the ‘peddler file’ thing was adorably hilarious, and KHV-tan’s view of sex had me tilting my head. Whatever that means. However… Your first post was one (1!) word over the limit. D8< EDIT: As it's somewhat unclear which word counter is correct, I shall leave my lame joke on with an admittance of error. Sowwy ;.; Midnight Spoiler You and Maka had an excellent give and take, and the two of you probably met the challenge requirements the best. The posts were emotional, realistic. I really felt for your character. You did a great job with letting Maka’s posts change your own, from what I see. Like with P, I didn’t find anything really wrong with this. Keep up the good work! Maka Spoiler And here’s the point where I start repeating myself… Like I mentioned in Midnight’s critique, you guys worked together really well, and really fit the conflict aspect of the challenge, as well as keeping to the word limit. This is a minor quibble, but I kinda felt like you could’ve adapted to Midnight’s post a tiny bit better. It seemed to me that your character didn’t really yield at all, and in stead you could’ve shared the blame, in a way I guess. But this might be a bit subjective, something I prefer to see instead of the ‘right’ thing. Eh, I dunno, I’m rambling again… Ace Spoiler Well, you certainly took the conflict part of the challenge to heart. To the point were I felt it was taken a bit too far. It got a bit too physical, too anime-like for my like. Which brings me to the next point. Your character is great, if she were a character in an over the top anime series. But in this kinda setting, I don’t find her realistic, can’t relate to her. It seems odd that a 27-year-old woman who’s so far seemed incredibly confident would get so worked over a 13-year-old girl talking to her crush. I understand that this was a part of the scenario given to you, but I felt it could’ve been handled better. Your posts weren’t bad really, they just felt odd, and slightly out of place, I guess. Britishism Spoiler Again, a group of posts with no real problem. You worked well with what was given, and still managed to keep things grounded. I loved Jen sticking up to her herself, and not quite believing she was doing it, it was a nice bit of characterization. I’m really struggling to come up with anything else constructive to say, so I’ll sign off with a ‘Great job!’.
[and took an AK-47 out from under his hat and blew Batman away with a rat-a-tat-tat] { ♥ } angels sang out an immaculate chorus down from the heavens descended Chuck Norris [Tummer] all came out of nowhere lightning fast and they kicked Chuck Norris in his cowboy ass This is the Ultimate Showdown... These please *hopes doesn't get ninja'd*
I'm just waiting for Glee to start >.>
If somebody else wants to organize it, sure, I just can't handle it right now. I'll gladly write a few chapters, but I'm under a lot of stress irl...
Writing them right now ;D
Roxas x Random Abused Stick 4eva! And Roxas or Donald x Sea Salt Ice-Cream 8D On a serious note, Zack x Aerith makes me regress to the highest points of my fangirly squeeing. It's just too frakking adorable. Rikku x Gippal was pretty sweet too, for that matter.
No, I meant when you said that refer to yourself as the woman's possession, as women being in control. You generally take care of what is yours, and that leads to maternal instincts to rise, and that leads to unfortunate Oedipal and Freudian implications. ^This x100 Don't treat women as if they were a puzzling species of their own. Treat them like they're human. Be yourself, because if you act around them at first, the facade is gonna fall, and there might be aspects in the real you that might not be compatible with her.
Ya gotta admit, it'd make a nice homage.
Ahahahahahahahahahahahaaaaaaa, no. Maybe my 'modern independant woman!' is what drives this answer, but refer to her and yourself as equals. If you refer to me as your possession, I'd be offended and find it condesending and patronizing, but if you do the opposite, I'll feel responsible for you, and I'm not your freaking mother.
Defying Gravity definitely, I sing that song in my sleep xD I have nothing against classics, and Fly Me to the Moon is a pleasant enough song, but the key is really bad for me ;.; There are maybe three lines in the song where I don't have to create a harmony to be able to sing it <,<
Eh, it depends on what songs are used in each choir, but I'm interested!
Oh yeah, it's the day that thing happened there 8D Totally remember it like it was yesterday.
IT'S HAMMER TIME! Danananah nanah nanah Can't touch this! Danananah nanah nanah Can't touch this!
That wouldn't work in our education system, as we have 300 word minimum limit per question for all exams (except for maths and certain physics/chemistry/biology questions). Unless you can really stretch your words I suppose xD Also, I miss one hour exams ;.; Haven't had them since grade school...
Dude, I would've been expelled if I tried that crap o.O Some school's even check if the paper resembles anything that's been published, or previous student essays, and whether it's just a coincidence or intended. Not to sound preachy, but don't do that anymore, or you'll eventually get into serious trouble.
I've been inactive for like a month, but what the hay, I might return if my internet starts to work properly again T_T
Why is applying to jobs so depressing? I feel like crying for no real reason, and that makes me pissed off, which makes me lose focus and I just wanna bang my head onto something hard now. /venting.
Yeah, me too, I raged at my sisters when they posted a map of the town we lived in years ago >.> I was hoping to do so, yeah. Yes, damn you! I'm...
You definitely deserve that break! Ahahaa, I think I found that button now >.< Gonna try it now, thanks for the help!
