Thank you so much, love :3 :glomp: I have a thread in the creativity corner, under lyrics and poetry where they are also posted. Again,...
hey. hey. like I wanted to know that. kthnxbai.
Posting this thread...?
Holy jesus, I love this ! <3 It's good how it rhymes in the beginning, goes into description (but in a poetic way) and then rhymes towards the end. It's also lovely, as it goes into metephorical, similie, and literal descriptions. <333Emzx
Oh, you have just totally grasped the concept of what I was aiming for. Thank you so so much Halez, you know I appreciate all your crit.<3 I wrote this a few weeks back, actually. It does have a few personal meanings, I admit. What's the matter, Hayley? What’s the matter, baby? Dry your eyes, Let me sing you a sweet lullaby. Do you feel sad, baby? You seem rather blue, Just remember deep down, That I love you. How are you feeling, honey? You seem happier today, Did my words of comfort, Make the badness go away? What’s on your mind, honey? You look quite hurt, Have your tears made dark stains, On your brand new shirt? Did you hear me, Hayley? I want to know what’s wrong, I want you to speak, Instead of listening to your songs. Do you hate me, Hayley? Have I done something, That has made you upset? Whatever I did, I most certainly regret. What’s the matter, baby? Dry your eyes, Let me sing you a sweet lullaby. Do you feel sad, baby? You seem rather blue, Just remember deep down, That I love you.
Don't you just know it. >|
Lick it. See what a deoda-pop tastes like.
Wow, this part of the poem was my favorite. Overall, it was brilliant. I loved it. Repetition, as Harriet said, was used perfectly, as were the rhetorical Q's. It added that extra personal touch that all brilliant poems posses.
Just like you. Hey there girl, You got your high skirt on, Ass chewing on a thong, You got your airs about you. You walk in here, Earphones in your ears, Eyes stuck in a leer, And I’m thinking ‘girl, screw you.’ You sit in your chair, Messing with your hair, Although no-one really cares, They don’t care about you. You pout at your mirror, Lip-gloss giving off a shimmer, Acting like you’re some famous singer, Damnit I hate you. Your voice is high, Like the skirt hovering up your thighs, I can’t look you in the eyes, Without wanting to hurt you. You made a sarcastic comment, And girl I lost it, My sanity is blown to shit, And I want to hurt you. You were walking all alone, Less than a mile from home, But I didn’t care, I was just behind you. Your voice turned muffled, Hair all ruffled, Caught up in the struggle, In the plastic coating. Running out of breath, Starving for air, Halfway to death, Now who’s gloating? You looked so pretty, In a dress so frilly, With that pale complexion, That cream cushion complimented you. I felt so grand, Hearing no reprimand, For having your blood on my hands, Now I’m rid of you. Hey there girl, I have your high skirt on, My Ass chewing on your thong, I got my airs just like you. Just. Like. You.
Oh, the irony song came out of nowhere more than the other. It was rhyming, which made it harder to write than my usual open poetry. I'm glad you liked it <3 I'll do it Anyway wasn't really intended to use sarcasm, actually. It was an open piece of poetry, so you can take it any way you please. Could you please build on what you mean when you say "Came out of nowhere" ? Because when you use this phrase, which I have seen you do a couple of times now, I don't quite understand what you mean. Am I supposed to write this in a certain way? Thank you for the CnC <3
to my surprise, I pronounced all of them right ._. I'm just stuck on how the fuck you pronounce Xion.
...Well, that was a pleasant surprise.
I'll do it anyway. I love how you shake your hips, To a melody in your head, And giggle as we try to guess it, And reveal After ten minutes of wrong answers That you made it up yourself. And then you giggle more. I love how you sing to songs, When you don't know the words. And even when you resort to the lyrics, La la la la, You still sound better than me. And yet you still insist I'm better. I adore the way you smile, Your cheeks plump up underneath your eyes, And you giggle with me, And laugh at stupid things, When we both know we shouldn't. But we laugh anyways. I adore how you talk, Stating the facts Standing your ground, And always backing me up When it comes down to arguments. But you call me witty anyways. It’s amazing how you kiss, With lips so soft, So that butter wouldn’t melt, And a mouth so tender, When you whisper my name. In reality. I hate it. But I say I love you anyways.
Goodnight Goodnight. I would preach to you all, but you're too young to be told. You got me rolling round in an ecstasy of gold. So, put on your face. Slap on that smile. Praise to your god; I haven't seen him in a while. Watch the coffin being lowered, 6 feet under-ground. A body being buried, never to be found. Black crows flying, A solemn mood awaits, The sharp sting of depression strikes the human race. Satanic bells ringing, sending out a warning-call. Christian hearts beating, though god resents them all. So put on your face. Slap on that smile. Praise to your god, I haven't seen him in a while. Don't make me laugh with your jibber and your singing. This won't turn out pretty with satanic bells ringing. You know this will end, With suffering in the final hour, It's hard to comprehend; the world withering like a flower. Praise to your god. I'm staring at his face. Praise to your god. May he save the human race.
It's no problem. ;3
Oh my goodness. Same here. :lolface:
:B|: The picture is of the old layout. I am rather disappointed.
I hate easter :B|: I looooooooove christmas. And winter. I like halloween, 'cause I always get red contacts. Hells year.
THERE'S A TSHIRT? :lolface: ...
I'm not really into rping at the moment. I have a lot of coursework to do, and I don't want the hassle at the moment. Sorry.
