WOW! it really sets a depressed mood! it is really good!!!! noticed something i used really twice...
i liked it alot! but then again i am weird so you might not want my oppinion
Some weird story that popped into my head for no apparent reason. My eyes flickered open and I arose gently from the cold, stone floor. My hand groped around my waist aimlessly for my sword. I glanced down at my empty side and stood up quickly. My eyes flashed in the direction of the door. With my heart racing i ran to the exit and tugged on the brass handle. Of course its locked my mind was functioning popperly again; at least my head was clearing. I went to sit back down in the corner. As I took a seat my eyes glanced around my cell. There was a small cot in the corner. I had second thoughts; it looked worse to sleep on than the floor. my head turned sharply as i heard a lock click... ya i reread it it svcks XP
you said she closed her eyes then in the next sentence you said she opened her eyes, in stead of she opened her eyes try saying her eyes snapped open, it sounds a little choppy the other way. but what do i know, im only 12 ^.^
jess smiled and unsheathed her sword. "it has been a while since i practiced with anyone." she turned toward maria, "wanna try?" "my lord, i was able to mark the two i encountered, the girl and one of jaden's sons," yoshiro said kneeling before his master. his sword was now sheathed and hanging at his side.
jess inhaled deeply as the seal slowly began to form the words 'i am watching you'. her eyes grew wide and she took water from the ground and attempted to heal it. instead of healing new words formed 'my name is yoshiro'... ooc: oing avvie hunting... be back soon
ooc: going avatar hunting srry
*tackles clouds buddy* evil cookie killer!
oc: because i don't feel like it... and if it is a good thread everyone will join and i won't know who is who...
jess let the water sink back into the ground. as it faded away her arm gave a sharp jolt. without realizing her right hand shot to her left shouler. she pulled her hand away and a black seal laid there etched in her skin.
ooc: *laughs evily as giant green cookie walks toward me and picks me up each step the ground shakes*
ooc: *shakes head sadly* no way to start a cookie fight... i call forth my giant evil poison cookie number 2! ^^, *gaint green cookie marches into veiw*
jess glared at kain. she stood up and pulled some water from the ground, "i am not dead," she said calmly as she twisted it around her body. why do i suddenly have this weird power?
ooc: evil i was going to say that first! ooc: *chucks precious cookie at devils angel* evil! *runs after runaway cookie* ooc: you know you cannot have a good cookie fight without me, so if i leave...
ooc: *points at cloud's buddy* STALKER!
"i told you i'm fine!" jess said for the third time denying the fact she was still coughing up blood, "your wound can be healed easily where as mine... you'll just be wasting energy,"
ooc: OKAY! calm down. *smells cookie and tackles cloud's buddy* COOKIE HIDER!
"well at least we have some good news," jess turned pale and doubled over coughing up more blood.
ooc: wwwwwwwwaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaatttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttt?
"zargos? you mean the guy i saw in the portal?" she asked.
