Philppe, at the last second, switched his aim, so the arrow went flying at Jetix. "Oops," He said sarcastically.
Ya I read Ch. 4, too. Oops about the sig thing, I will edit it
kay, see ya BIC: Zexion started to examine the study around him. It would make sense if a clue to the Golden Heart was in here. Even if the piece of Heart itself was here.
OOC: How do we fight Cloudroth when Kyle isn't here? BIC: "I am ready when you are." Xandor said.
Philippe went over to where Ceri and Xandor were standing. "Hello, Ceri. It is, uh, nice to see you again." He turned back to Cloudroth and lifted his bow with the nocked arrow. Xandor growled, "We should stop him." He whipped out two daggers, one for each hand.
Zexion went over and stood beside Saix, then he whispered quietly, "You think the next piece of Golden Heart is in here?"
Xandor looked over at Ceri. "What is going on?" Philippe saw Cloudroth appear. He groaned. Can't he just leave us alone? Philippe turned part of the air in front of him, creating an invisble wall. He sent that flying towards Clouroth, then he took out his bow and nocked an arrow.
This seems like a very interesting story. There are some misspelled words and, on page three, I think it should be "There are" instead of "There is". I really like the artwork.^^ I hope you continue on with the story.
OOC: I am not sure if this thread is still going.....I am Zexion and I would still like to play in this thread, but I am not sure what happened to the others. As far as I know, if this is still going, then you can join.
Wow, a great chapter! Keep writing this story because I want to know what happens next!^^
I just read that part you posted for chapter six. It ws a little slow, but it seemed there needed to be a part like that. Also, it revealed some information about the island. I wonder why Roxas and Namine couldn't get out......
"I suppose you are right. I, too, am wondering who or what had brought him back." He suddenly smiled, "I am also glad to see you two again."
Xandor looked at Kyle, troubled. "The war has begun again, and Cloudroth is back. I feel as though we may never find peace."
I really enjoyed reading your story! I hope you continue with it because I can't wait to read what happens next! I really like your style of writing, the way you descibe the scenery, your choice of words, and how you put emotions into the characters. Overall, your style of writing makes the story all the more better. Keep on writing!^^
Philippe walks over to Natalie and Jecht, but sees Xandor go off in another direction. I hope he is not looking for trouble... Xandor portalled to where Kyle and Ceri where. "Um....Hello?"
Zexion turned to see Saix portal to Ansem's study. He pulled his hood up and followed Saix, portalling in behind him.
Ya, I know, I just wrote them, not really thinking. I am not a surious poem-writer, so you can tell there isn't any 'feeling' in them. I just did it for fun! ^^ Thanks, though, for your comments.
These are some short poems I wrote. They just popped into my head (not all at once) so I wrote them down. Then I decided to post them here. Kind of simple story, isn't it? Anyways, I just want to see what people think, that's all. 1st Random Poem: Up or Down? Old Mrs. Brown, Lives upside-down, And the ground is right beneath her. Her prize-winning pup, Is right side up, So now she is not so sure. 2nd Random Poem: The New Drummer There once was a guy named Jim, He really liked to play rhythm. Then one day, He forgot how to play, And the new drummer is Tim. 3rd Random Poem: Joe? There once was a guy named Joe, And that is about all I know. I wish I knew more about him. I sit and wonder, Through sunshine and thunder, Until the lights grow dim. 4th Random Poem: The Rabbit He hops, hops, hops, down the road, Not scared, frightened, or cold. His floppy ears are white as snow, Rosy cheeks that seem to glow. His fluffy tail all white and round, Upon his face, no sadness found. A chilly wind blows across his face, Then he is gone without a trace. 5th Random Poem: Winter The snow is falling. Is the first day of winter, Everything is white. Okay, these are all I could find. I have many others, but some are really terrible, while some good ones are lost. Oops. I will look for more poems and post them here, or even write some more, but I am not sure when I will have those up. Oh well. Your Opinion, please! ^^
I really liked this section. I kinda figured something like that wouild happen, but it was still amazing. You really write the characters well, especially Riku. (No kidding^^) I think you should continue with this story, though you probably are.
OOC: Saix's group is in Radiant Gardens, Xigbar's group is at Destiny's Islands, Axel is with Xemnas, and Roxas is looking for Sora.
