It really does.
I know where you're coming from with that.
We all do from time to time. /shrug
Yeah, that's what I thought. xD
... O_o
Not sure if that counts as advertising but I do indeed like disco.
VGN + Ghetto + Pogo = HOLY ****
That she did.
Whaaaaaaaaaaat I haet the khv servers, I thought I responded but it turns out I didn't
OH see that explains a lot.
WAIT WHAT THE HE-/glomped
Tell your best friend that I'm okay with her squeeling over the fact that I like cats.
So I've been told xD
I absolutely love Cats, It's my favorite.
Thanks very much. Well met.
The section really just got too boring, so I left. /shrug
It is really hard To fit a good poem in This amount of space.
/shrug Do whatever. My poems are usually sad as of late so I write whenever I'm sad. If you write well when you're scared then write when you're scared. Either way I don't really make myself sad but whatever works for you works for you.
You could have done this better. That being said, you could have done this a lot worse and where this ended up is good. As night said, you didn't really have a rhythm but that's okay as many poems don't really need one. He also said that you could expand on your grammar which is certainly true but your grammar is fine where it is as well. The only thing I would add is that you are simply stating the things that happened. This in itself is nothing bad, but the blatant fashion that you do it in is the problem. It's too two dimensional; a flow or a rhythm would help with this but what would really be good is to put yourself in the viewpoint of the poem and put some emotion into it. Keep in mind though that this is just a personal opinion and this is a good job overall.
