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  2. burnitup
    burnitup
    I'll get to it soon! Maybe! Possibly... If I could get my attention off my RWBY OCs for a minute.
    May 7, 2015
  3. Loxare
    Loxare
    Ok, so you should totally use the colours I put in the editing as inspiration for the RWBY OCs. Just saying.
    May 7, 2015
  4. burnitup
    burnitup
    They already got their own colors (Beige, Ebony, Ivory, Gold). Sorry. ;_;
    May 7, 2015
  5. Loxare
    Loxare
    Darn. The colours I used were white, red, green, and cyan.
    May 7, 2015
  6. burnitup
    burnitup
    I'll keep those in mind for my second team.

    Want to hear about my OCs?
    May 7, 2015
  7. Loxare
    Loxare
    Only if you promise to go look at the exceptionally hard work I put into editing your story. The entire half hour of it.
    May 7, 2015
  8. burnitup
    burnitup
    I will! I always do.
    May 7, 2015
  9. Loxare
    Loxare
    Soonish. I want to know if I was useful.

    Fire away then.
    May 7, 2015
  10. burnitup
    burnitup
    You are. If you put a half hour pointing out my mistakes than you helped a lot. :3

    I guess I'll start with the team name: BEIJ
    May 7, 2015
  11. Loxare
    Loxare
    Yeah, but you won't know that for definites and for suresies until you read it.

    Makes sense.
    May 7, 2015
  12. Loxare
    Loxare
    Actually, no. Why BEIG? Why not BEIG? You said Gold.
    May 7, 2015
  13. burnitup
    burnitup
    Because J's name doesn't have G in her name. Her color is gold and her surname means gold, but no G.

    Speaking of which, the members of the team are Bezhevyy Zolnerowich, Ebon Sandalius, Irvin Reilly, and Jin Jing.
    May 7, 2015
  14. Loxare
    Loxare
    That's normally where you start, yes. Continue.
    May 7, 2015
  15. burnitup
    burnitup
    They allude to Ilya Muromets, Cú Chulainn, Ivan Tsarevich, and Guan Yu.
    May 7, 2015
  16. Loxare
    Loxare
    I have heard one of those names.
    May 7, 2015
  17. burnitup
    burnitup
    Which one?
    May 7, 2015
  18. Loxare
    Loxare
    Cu Chulainn. Also, Loxie has work tomorrow and will not be replying anymore today. But feel free to keep going. I'll read it tomorrow morning. Night BIU!
    May 7, 2015
  19. burnitup
    burnitup
    Ah. The one who alludes to Cu is Ebon. He's a wolf faunus (cause Cu's name means Culann's Hound. Get it? Hounds and wolves are canines? Eh? EH?) who is trained in martial arts by a Huntress (who is in turn based off Scáthach), later changes his name to his current name (similar to how Cu changed his name from Sétanta to Cú Chulainn) and become the bodyguard to Irvin (like how Cú Chulainn took the role as Culann's hound).
    May 7, 2015
  20. Loxare
    Loxare
    Calm down, yes I get it. Now keep going. This is getting interesting.
    May 7, 2015
  21. burnitup
    burnitup
    Also Ebon kinda murdered a guy in fight. Hence the name change.
    May 7, 2015
  22. Loxare
    Loxare
    I don't even know what his original name was. You keep saying name change, but you don't say from what to what.
    May 7, 2015
  23. burnitup
    burnitup
    Well his original name was *ding* Oh! Cookies! *goes off to the kitchen*
    May 7, 2015
  24. Loxare
    Loxare
    Ah, so it's a plot point. Give me those cookies, this is turning out to be a long story. Especially with you writing little bits of it and then waiting for me to reply.
    May 8, 2015
  25. burnitup
    burnitup
    I'm actually kicking around name ideas and haven't decided. I'm kinda leaning toward Eben Stark as his original name but I don't know.
    May 8, 2015
  26. Loxare
    Loxare
    Hitam. Nero. Kuro. Kawolo. Schwarz. Itim. Preto. Kalo. Dubh. All words for black in other languages. Unless you're going for something else.
    May 8, 2015
  27. burnitup
    burnitup
    Not really sure what I'm going for.
    May 8, 2015
  28. Loxare
    Loxare
    Eh, just suggestions. Dubh is Gaelic though. I mean, not the same as Celtic at all, but it's from the area. I do like that word...
    May 8, 2015
  29. burnitup
    burnitup
    Well I don't think national origins plays a part in the names. Look at Yang for example.
    May 8, 2015
  30. Loxare
    Loxare
    JNPR's entire team is based on national origins.
    May 8, 2015
  31. burnitup
    burnitup
    True. Mine aren't. Well... Ebon and Irvin's names aren't, anyway.
    May 9, 2015
  32. Loxare
    Loxare
    Cool. Anyways...
    May 9, 2015
  33. burnitup
    burnitup
    Anyways what?
    May 9, 2015
  34. Loxare
    Loxare
    Continue BIU. You've only told me about Ebon's story so far. You have three other characters to go through, and that's only assuming you've finished Ebon's.
    May 9, 2015
  35. burnitup
    burnitup
    Well okay. Jin Jing is up I guess. Well Jing was the daughter of a gangster in what could be considered the RWBY equivalent of the Yakuza in Vacuo that all but controlled the city they were located in. She was best buds with a few other children of gangsters, of of which was the leader's son. The gang however was eventually taken down and that created a power vacuum.
    May 10, 2015
  36. burnitup
    burnitup
    The children of the gangsters, including Jing, decided to try and keep the power in their hands so made their own gang to try and take hold of what the old gang had and are in a several year long gang war with the multiple other gangs in the city. Jing is a lieutenant in the gang and is arguably their best fighter. She takes parts in underground fight clubs and illegal street races.
    May 10, 2015
  37. burnitup
    burnitup
    Eventually though they were attacked and they lost badly. Jing managed to escape, feigning her own death in the ensuing carnage, left Vacuo and decided to lay low until things died down. So she got some forged transcripts and got into Beacon.
    May 10, 2015
  38. Loxare
    Loxare
    See, that's how you tell a person about a thing. Does she have any contact with her old gang? Does she later? Now that she's in Beacon, will she ever go back to the gang or is BEIJ her new "gang"?
    May 10, 2015
  39. burnitup
    burnitup
    She is currently one of the more fleshed out characters so far and a lengthy explanation was needed.

    She has some contact with the gang but it is very infrequent. When she first came to Beacon she has all the intention of going back to her gang, but I'm thinking that overtime she becomes use to her life at Beacon and her teammates and will probably leave her gang life behind and become a proper warrior.

    Also of note, she has Vegeta levels of arrogance.
    May 11, 2015
  40. Loxare
    Loxare
    No, keep doing that. That's good things.

    Cool. Who's next?

    Ahahaha, that must be fun to work with, especially with other characters.
    May 11, 2015
  41. burnitup
    burnitup
    She is going to be a target for Ebon to snark at because of that.

    I guess we'll go with Irvin next. He is not nearly as eventful as Jing. Irvin is the the sixth child of rather wealthy family that runs an agricultural company. Because of his status as the youngest child he is rather spoiled growing up but grew up as a rather sweet young guy. He is cheerful, friendly, and ladies man. One day he got bored of luxurious life style and decided to pick of hunting (animals, not Grimm) as a hobby which he was quite good at and enjoyed a lot.
    May 11, 2015
  42. burnitup
    burnitup
    Over time he got quite a few trophies out of his kills, then he heard reports of a bird Grimm attacking one of his family's farms and decided he'll go and take care of it. He tracked the Grimm to its lair and attacked it. The battle was back and forth with Irvin starting to lose when Ebon, who was passing through and heard the battle, came in and helped him out. Irvin thanked him, brought him home and told his family the story. Irvin's father was proud of his son but scolded him for his recklessness and offered Ebon a job as Irvin's bodyguard.
    May 11, 2015
  43. burnitup
    burnitup
    Since fighting the Grimm, Irvin began added Grimm kills to his hunt, taking a picture of his kills and buying replicas later so he'll have trophies. Eventually he decided to try and become a Huntsman, after all, hunting Grimm was fun. Why not go to a school to train you to become a hunter of Grimm that also lets you help people?
    May 11, 2015
  44. Loxare
    Loxare
    Ah, so he's in it for the sport. Good for him though It's good to find a job doing what you love. Also loving the "passing through" convenience bit. It never seems plausible, but hey! It could happen. What does his parents think of his super dangerous job? Also, is Ebon still his bodyguard now that they're in school together? And if ordered, would Ebon abandon Irvin to go save someone else? Would Irvin order that ever? Does Ebon listen to orders?
    May 11, 2015
  45. burnitup
    burnitup
    Ebon has been drifting around kingdom to kingdom, mostly because he keeps killing/severely injuring the people he fights which as you can guess makes a lot of enemies, so he just happened to be camping out in the forest Irvin was hunting the Grimm.

    His father and sisters approves. His brother less so.

    Ebon is still Irvin's bodyguard, he had no intention of ever becoming a Huntsman but Irvin was going to the school. It makes sense he'd follow him there too. They're also best friends.

    As for whether or not he'd abandon Irvin, doubtful
    May 11, 2015
  46. Loxare
    Loxare
    Cool. Cool. That does make sense. Is he in it for the money or is he loyal to Irvin? If loyal, what did Irvin do to get his loyalty? Do they consider themselves friends or guy and bodyguard? Are they on a contract basis? If the contract runs out, would Ebon split?

    Also, I posted a fic. It's Batman and Kingdom Hearts.
    May 11, 2015
  47. burnitup
    burnitup
    He's loyal to Irvin, money just enhances it really. They do consider themselves friends, they do stuff together all the time (mostly because Irvin drags Ebon along). Ebon is a paid employee of the Reilly family, something he can quiet doing just like any job.

    I'll check it out.
    May 11, 2015
  48. Loxare
    Loxare
    So, a brother's in arms thing? They work together long enough and eventually become besties? Or was there a big event that popped them over the work relation cliff into the waters of bro?

    Whoot!
    May 11, 2015
  49. burnitup
    burnitup
    They're fighting styles compliment one another (Ebon handles close combat, Irvin ranged), so they have a good working relationship. They meant at the age of 14 so about 3 years now. Irvin is rather casual with Ebon so Irvin is happy to just hang out with him.
    May 11, 2015
  50. Loxare
    Loxare
    Neato! Ok, who's next? Actually, I think we're down to one.
    May 11, 2015
  51. burnitup
    burnitup
    Bezhevyy I honestly haven't nailed out all the details of yet. He was born to some farmers. Born without anything below his knees. Spent a good chunk of his life wheelchair bound because his family couldn't afford the cybernetic limbs necessary to allow him to walk. He loves horses and managed to learn how to ride them despite his disability. On his 13th birthday he finally got those prosthetic limbs. At this point I haven't finished his story yet.
    May 11, 2015
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