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Well, give yourself some credit, it was really good for a first story. lol, I remember my first story. It was too bad for words. XD
You did really good for a first try.

:kiss:
Try to think of things that make you happy or laugh :) Listen to music might help.
I'm not always in a happy or good mood but I usually just think of kh and listen to music. Messed up things happen in there but there will aways be some good later on..even if feels like forever to happen..its all gotta clear up at some point

Cool. I liked it. :)

quelololololol good and i will give for now as i have nothing to top that

I bet their first stories aren't the same good as to how it is now. And most likely had some help by people.
Just think about it this way. You just posted up your first story. People might give opinions or suggestions to make it better. You take the advise and make it better. If Other chapters come then the same process repeats. You make it better and better. Then you get to the point where you realize you know what people expect or want from it so you either continue or start a new story on your own which should be a whole lot better than how you started.

Then some else comes posting up their first story too. And now they think their story is crap too but they just started out. Same feeling as you. But they have to remember the people that are great with stories started out the same as you. You learn from your mistakes and that's what makes us do better in life or at things.

Sports well maybe that's not your thing. Some people play and suck too but they keep playing because its fun for them. If you don't find one that you enjoy then obviously look for one that you do. If you really wanna play but you suck then practice. You'll find your way to become better. The beginers who are still better then they are just good at it. People just learn quicker than others and I bet your not the only one with the same problem.

First one to come up with it then :)

ke ke ke ke ke ke ke ke i have your key in my hand

:lolface: u sure?!?!?!?

orlay!!!!!!!!!!

well i stalk who won't be creeped out by it, and i am radeing your fridge and eating all your food now bye (leaves house) i also stole your car

thats because i havent botherd to stalk her/him. i stalk friends because they come to expect it more

Hello, India!
Being stalker god of KH-V can be advantageous!

Well whatever the other part is just remember that nobody starts out good. We all start like crap in the begining but in time we'll find something we're good at. Maybe even quicker. And trust me you are good at things. May not be everything but at somethings.

The story isn't bad but it isn't perfect either just average or a little above that. if you wanna get better then write more stories. The more the better you'll catch or find your mistakes. Now if you don't want to then maybe that's not your thing. Just look at the paraboss kh lyrics that's not bad. And you came up with it really quick. So you are good at somethings and not some failiure.

Can do. PM ne what you want the second chapter to be like. A general guideline will be fine.

Its Oliver.
Sa is chatting on my profile. LOl

Because you think your story is bad?

Sa: *to Bro India* NOT COOL!
CTC113: *to India* Ya it is extremly fun!

Scratch that all, you did fine. Most authors hate their work. It's all I can do half the time to not delete it all and start over. What I usually end up doing is starting over without deleting it. I havelots of copies of my stories on my computer. I'd suggest waiting three days after finishing the chapter before posting. Then you can look it over a few times and edit if need be.

Thanks man
SA: you didnt have to kick&hit me to get the comp bak!
CTC113: *to SA* Ya but it was fun LOL

I hear she is your gf
Nice dude!!! Im currently on the search... unfortinatly...